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DateTitleCategoryHits
Jul 19, 2008The Battle World, Chapter 4Adventure 73
Jul 3, 2008Intercourse of the crow and angelRomance 256
Jul 3, 2008The Battle World, Chapter 3Adventure 107
Jun 17, 2008The Battle World, Chapter 2Adventure 111
Jun 8, 2008The Battle World, Chapter 1Adventure 105

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Total number of comments: 16

Title article: Bicycle
Date: 2008-07-19 15:30:09
Nice
I'd be crying if I wasn't pumping cheery music down my ears. 
It reads so true to life and is a situation very real and very interesting. 
I hope this isn't a real story for the sake of those who read this...

Title article: The Battle World, Chapter 3
Date: 2008-07-06 15:07:21
Perhaps
you need to have read the other chapters first :p

Title article: The Battle World, Chapter 3
Date: 2008-07-04 03:46:53
RE: Xena
What guy is this you're talking about?

Title article: Jill: Chapter 5
Date: 2008-07-04 03:43:31

I don't see why this doesn't have any comments... 
This is simple and quick to read which is nice. The scenario is realistic to a point, the dialogue though is not, personally I don't think people would speak like that in this kind of situation unless their relation ship revolved around good looks and sex...

Title article: Girls Just Wanna have fun
Date: 2008-07-04 03:35:56
...
The strong language makes me feel this should have been 18'ed 
It's beautifully written, I needed to make my eyes understand the speak structure before I could really get what was happening.

Title article: Intercourse of the crow and angel
Date: 2008-07-03 18:57:00
RE: Lemon
The crow is a character of wisdom but ignorance also. It is a curse for the crow's ignorance that he is to watch the people have sex forever and not understand it as his wisdom is greater than the people he looks onto. 
And animals know about vulvas because they have sex, they don't however wear boxers.

Title article: Suicide
Date: 2008-07-03 18:44:29
Nice
Rhym scheme is a bit too simple for the kind of poem it is, but the content is right in there! Very trancing of the mind, you should write more like this as people obviously enjoy them.

Title article: Neoteric Dissonance
Date: 2008-07-03 18:42:31
Wow
It's like a spell, in both the way it is written and it's effect on the reader. 
I didn't like it until the last stanza though. I had to read it a few times before I really liked it.

Title article: Appealing Story
Date: 2008-07-03 17:12:47
I laughed
That was bad, I laughed at the end because it was just not believable. There are rules to writing a good erotic story; Keep it believable, stick to the kind of characters you're using (Don't make them turn into sex gods randomly then nerds afterwards) keep the desription of the character's feelings and body actions clear with little detail on their thoughts, the reader wants to imagine these things not read about other people acting them out. I don't like giving names in erotic stories either, I find it keeps the story open for what the reader's mind wants. Practise a bit more though.

Title article: Suicide
Date: 2008-07-03 17:00:27
Haha
I can see why this is one of the most discussed! Very powerful poem here, the ryhm scheme is basic like how a fresh poetry writer would start but it's written like a pro. Were you just using as many rhyming words as you could think of?

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