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David Relic (David Relic)
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Last Online 11/21/2008
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Website/Blog: whatsablogdog?
About Myself: ...and through the darkness my love shines...

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DateTitleCategoryHits
Oct 21, 2008ElijahMiscellaneous Stories 221
Jul 10, 2008First KillAdventure 216
Jul 8, 2008Open Your EyesAdventure 233
Jun 14, 2008The Lullaby Man, Chapter 2Mystery 132
Jun 14, 2008The Lullaby Man, Chapter 1Mystery 159
Jun 3, 2008Operation ROCOHumor 164

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Total number of comments: 41

Title article: Ouch
Date: 2008-11-18 00:06:04

I love vampires!  
But I dont understand what one would have done istead of sucking...Oh, right.  
Thats funny.... 
 
Keep writng! I love zombies too!

Title article: Moonscape
Date: 2008-11-17 23:59:30

Wow. that was really good. smooth, near hypnotic. You should be proud of this piece. 
 
I could never write poetry. 
But I'm glad your doing it.....

Title article: I'm a Coroner.
Date: 2008-11-17 23:56:24

Wait, are you a coroner?

Title article: I'm a Coroner.
Date: 2008-11-17 23:53:31

Coroners break the bank. I suppose from some of your medical terms that you are, in fact, a Coroner. Which is cool. Are you looking for writing tips, or someone to tell you that its okay you play with dead people? 
wtiting tip: You have one colossal paragraph that should be broken into a few smaller ones.  
P.S: its okay to play with dead people.

Title article: Resolving Time
Date: 2008-11-17 23:45:16

Very deep. Stoners could read this over and over again...But I wouldnt know anything about that... 
 
Well written. Will surely read mroe of your work.

Title article: Dyfo's Final Duel
Date: 2008-11-17 23:41:25

I get down with fantasy, and I liked it. Dragons are great. The flow was pretty good. But I agree about the death dialog. You could still make his words strained without breaking them up so much.  
Dig it.

Title article: Frank
Date: 2008-11-17 23:36:13

You have good direction here.  
But proofread and keep reading other works, It’ll help with minor errors.  
And don’t listen to people who tell you to "trash" your work. When you write, you aren’t sculpting in stone, you are working with clay. You can constantly remold it and reshape it…you know, until you bake it in the oven or whatever. Then its kinda late to try and reshape it… 
 
Can you re-use clay after it goes in the oven?

Title article: Ode to Ruby Whispers
Date: 2008-11-17 23:21:31

Poets are savagely critical. This site is the best! 
 
...The little alfred doll is creepy, but I guess my image is creepy too. creepy is good...creepy, but good...

Title article: Lets Go to the Zoo
Date: 2008-10-26 20:27:55

Man, I like this family. I put the F-Bomb in every time there were ****, made me smile. F-Bombs over breakfast are the best. And I'm going to go ahead and assume that the "Santa" reference had something to do with snow from the north pole... 
I enjoyed this piece...

Title article: How Was Your Weekend?
Date: 2008-10-21 23:50:13

well written...But what in the grace of god was it? I dont know if I missed something, but Im not reading it twice. A bit dull. really dull. Damn.... 
Keep it coming!! 
Can't wait for more!

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