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About Myself:

From Long Island. Love to write short stories. Also love to read them.I always have something cooking in this old noggin.
Please feel free to leave feedback. Good or Bad, I am just honored you would take time to read anything I wrote.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Oct 17, 2008	Pennies, Chapter 6	Miscellaneous Stories	108
Oct 9, 2008	Pennies, Chapter 5	Miscellaneous Stories	96
Oct 8, 2008	Pennies, Chapter 4	Miscellaneous Stories	84
Oct 7, 2008	Pennies, Chapter 3	Miscellaneous Stories	192
Oct 6, 2008	Pennies, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	115
Oct 6, 2008	Pennies, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	131

Comments

Title article: Just a Tease
Date: 2008-08-08 08:54:48

Dear
It was good. Well hidden. I think listing this as romance, instead of humor where it probably should be,conceals the ending and keeps it from being given away.
I enjoyed it thoroughly.

Title article: Passion
Date: 2008-08-05 19:43:58

Wow, that was something, I was starting to sweat.
Seriously....good job. I think it gave an accurate description of what internet relationship must be like when people first meet, all the build up.
Great story.

Title article: Scratched
Date: 2008-08-04 11:45:05

Pretty power feeling are going on in this one. A little depressing in the aspect of scratching yourself. Cannot help but think of someone who cuts themselves.
Good Stuff

Title article: The Graveyard Greens
Date: 2008-08-03 05:46:59

Hysterical story. What an original idea. Much like your What the hell did you do the dog Brian (which I printed out and passed around to everyone at work, most people loved it. except the lady whose dog just had died), I feel you are at your best when telling the story in dialogue because they are just so funny. I am offering myself to be the 18th hole.
Great read. Thanks

Title article: Sorry
Date: 2008-08-03 05:37:41

This was such a great story. Actaully, if you ask me, this could definitely be broaden out into something much more, at leat a novella. I would love to jump into details of these characters lives. Great read. I love the ending. I think most lives end up with regret. We take life for granted until it is too late.

Title article: UNFINISHED BUSINESS (reposted)
Date: 2008-08-03 05:23:27

I am a little confused. I liked the imagery, but I have to admit, I have no idea what is going on with this. Is this a trip on a bad drug? Dumb question maybe. Like I said, nice imagery

Title article: THE FIRE
Date: 2008-08-01 04:25:15

I found a good story line here. Makes me want the next part. Really good, definitely had myu attention.
Two things.
1)You line, She really felt hot and it seems like her dkin was burning. I think it should be SKIN. No big deal, happens to all of us.
2)To be continued. If this is a series, you probably should have place that way and had it listed has chapter one.

Otherwise I really liked it. I also liked how you ended it in mid-sentence, keeps the reader wanting more.

Title article: The Fairy's Retribution
Date: 2008-07-31 11:50:54

I in aggreement with Dirkin, it seem that the whole story/poem revolved around the rhyming, which don't get me wrong, it a very hard task, but I felt it took something away from it all.
But then again, I have never wrote anything that rhymed, so thumbs up to you.

Title article: A Life Complete ©
Date: 2008-07-31 05:52:13

This is a beautiful story.
Nothing else can be said. You
really brought out feelings in this one that seem to hit home for everyone who read this.

Title article: A Binding Constraint
Date: 2008-07-29 05:34:05

This was excellent. You used such large words and made them flow seemlessly. This is probably one of the better poems I have read on this site. Thanks for a great read.