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Last Online	11/10/2008
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About Myself:

Just me. Writing my thoughts.

-Kasi, Elaborated.

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Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Aug 9, 2008	Ramble On	Poetry	241
Jul 28, 2008	A Binding Constraint	Poetry	296
Jul 11, 2008	Personal Evolution	Poetry	343
Jul 7, 2008	The Invention Of Uncertainty, Chapter 2	Adventure	197
Jun 27, 2008	The Broke Busker	Poetry	216
Jun 23, 2008	The Invention Of Uncertainty, Chapter 1	Adventure	311
May 29, 2008	A Musing Impression	Poetry	238
May 27, 2008	Fragmented Sentiment	Poetry	292
May 23, 2008	The Attack	Poetry	577
May 22, 2008	Autumn Mountain Sleep	Poetry	345
May 19, 2008	Our Words	Poetry	296
May 19, 2008	When We Set Foot On Dry Land	Poetry	380

Comments

Title article: Strings
Date: 2008-07-12 10:49:05

I liked the way you put this together! As I was reading it, I felt as if I was falling too, just as the apple had. A very moving composition. Well done!

Title article: Confession
Date: 2008-07-09 13:43:54

Yes, morbid and dark - but very descriptive. I too think it would read better in paragraphs rather than poetry form. But relatively good for a 10th grader!

Title article: Closer Raisa; the beginning, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-07-09 13:39:08

Interesting start, but very short. This could be the prologue, but I guess thats what the beginning means. I am curious as to what happened in "the botched attempt".... I'll be looking out for the rest.

Title article: I'll Be Stuck In Pain
Date: 2008-07-09 12:45:06

Wow. Tons of emotions here, good poem. The only thing I could nit pick about would be the line, "I've have to hold in", I think that may be a type-o of sorts. Either way I liked it!

Title article: Sightless Sight
Date: 2008-07-09 12:42:09

I don't wear glasses either, I bet sometimes it would be better to with out them... "Sorry I dont have my galsses today". You could get out of alot... I couldn't imagine having to wear contacts, I cant get close to my eyes with anything. Good poem, I enjoyed your rhymes!

Title article: May Before November
Date: 2008-07-08 20:18:21

Yeah, I feel the world is moving slowly - but fast at the same time. I have had all those same thoughts before, there is no better way to describe getting older.

Title article: The Invention Of Uncertainty, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-07-08 11:45:48

Thank you!!
I like 'are' the product of war, 'were' is past tense since they still are and always will be forever changed by that war. And... This part moves fast as a way to kind of convey the hostility that they are going through. The second part slows down to show a sense of peace..The two men- will be explained in a later chapter, I know it seems weird not being able to read the story in its entirety, but hang in there it will all pan out. Thanks for all your help!

Title article: The Invention Of Uncertainty, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-07-08 11:24:05

yeah, I need to revise it. But as in most stories (not trying to give too much away) what happens in the beginning may come back to haunt the rest.

Title article: Shallow Vagueness
Date: 2008-07-08 11:17:54

Once again you have created a beautiful poem, I enjoy the emphasis on emotions all your poems have, and they all contain great poetic structure. Another job well done!

Title article: This World is Cold
Date: 2008-07-07 21:37:07

You did very well with the rhyming, and it sounded fine to me. This poem is short and sweet, to the point..... It's symetrical for lack of a better word.

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Connection

Kasi (Kasi Elaborated)'s connections

Ashutosh Ghildiyal (Ashutosh)

Project 30 (Project 30)

Christian Wright (The 13th)

Jon Stalk (JonStalk)

Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

Philip Neale (philneale1952)

Dipankar Dasgupta (d.dasgupta)

Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)

David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump)

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Guestbook

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Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 07/07/2008 18:53:39 Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/07/2008 19:05:16 Your poems are absolutely magnificant.
Billy (Vango)	Created On: 05/24/2008 16:43:37 I've fell in love with your poems, they're absolutely the best I've ever read. Feedback from Kasi (Kasi Elaborated): Wow! Thanks!