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Last Online	10/11/2008
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Website/Blog:

www.philipneale.blogspot.com

About Myself:

Accountant, 55, aspiring writer. Married 2 children, 2 cats (not married to the cats but they think they rule the roost). See gallery for more pictures - George was starting to demand appearance money so I relegated him to the background.......teach him to be sassy!

Ok, so we're pals again.........Hey George, see the nice reader? Kill !!!!!!

Started writing in July 2007 and found that I couldn't stop. Manuscripts now comprise 3 finished novels (60,000; 85,000; 65,000 words respectively) one in progress (currently 20,000), 2 compilations of short stories (total 100,000 words), and some messing around with poetry, although I must confess that it's not my favourite.

That started as limericks on birthday and anniversary cards and now I can't get off the hook.

If anyone knows of a cure............I may be interested (although not JUST yet).

First manuscript is now a finished and published novel "A Ticket to Tewkesbury" (see stories list for a preview and list of acknowledgements).

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Oct 9, 2008	What Kind of Tool Am I?	Humor	62
Oct 2, 2008	Lasting Love	Miscellaneous Stories	100
Sep 29, 2008	Wishful Thinking, Chapter 1	Horror	112
Sep 26, 2008	Finders Keepers	Mystery	115
Sep 26, 2008	Two Little Dicky Birds	Mystery	115
Sep 24, 2008	Poppy Appeal	Humor	284
Sep 17, 2008	Funny You Should Say That	Humor	196
Sep 7, 2008	A Dish Served Cold	Mystery	532
Sep 5, 2008	Sparing the Rod	Non-Fiction	114
Sep 3, 2008	A Ticket to Tewkesbury	Miscellaneous Stories	436
Sep 2, 2008	Marks On the Wall	Mystery	210
Aug 31, 2008	Fight The Flab	Poetry	123
Aug 30, 2008	Romanes Eunt Domus	Humor	151
Aug 28, 2008	Highly Decorated	Humor	297
Aug 26, 2008	I Am	Mystery	259
Aug 24, 2008	Ebony Eyes	Romance	960
Aug 22, 2008	Blind Faith - Conclusion, Chapter 4	Mystery	140
Aug 21, 2008	Blind Faith, Chapter 3	Mystery	130
Aug 20, 2008	Stop Wining	Humor	257
Aug 19, 2008	Blind Faith, Chapter 2	Mystery	161

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Comments

Title article: Survival, Chapter 5
Date: 2008-09-22 06:16:44

Doom and Gloom
There has to one doom and gloom merchant on every trip, and you did this one very well Jessie.

I've just come back from slitting my wrists but it was so doomy and gloomy down there that I couldn't se them.

George whinges and moans a lot like that, - perhaps you were a feline in a previous life?

Phil

Title article: Survival, Chapter 4
Date: 2008-09-22 06:10:18

Toilet
Trust you to flush the seriousness down the john, Potter.

Truthfully, this was light-heartedness at its best, and who else could have done it?

Good on you mate!

Phil

Title article: Survival, Chapter 3
Date: 2008-09-22 06:05:15

Talent
Loads of it in this chapter, and the expressive way you laid all your fears out kept me scrolling down word by word.

Did Russ manage to find the cold shower in the end?

Phil

Title article: Survival, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-09-22 05:59:55

Panic
You really got this one off to a great start with the sense of panic in the writing - going off to get some Valium now.

Sorry It's taken me so long to get round to this guys, but I've been kind of busy over the opast few weeks..............know what I mean?

I liked the way the dialogue sett he tone for the uncertainty.

Phil

Title article: Survival, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-09-20 05:37:16

Let Down
Why bother signing up then?

Phil

Title article: When There's No Other Choice
Date: 2008-09-19 06:26:20

What's Original?
Whilst it is very important to take criticism (even destructive sometimes) on the chin, I felt that the first comment was harsh.

It's hard to come up with unique and original story lines when all we see on the box is the very same dramas churned out by professionals week after week.

I personally thought that considerable effort had gone into this, and although the ending was predictable, these thing really do happen.

Maybe you could have shrouded the plot somewhat and have kept the reader guessing (Can't tell you how since it's your story), but each writer's style has to have some unique quality which sets them apart from others.

Perhaps you have yet to find yours. We all have to begin somewhere and this is NOT a bad starting point.

Don't give up because of one adverse opinion.

Phil

Title article: Tell Me That You Love Me
Date: 2008-09-19 06:14:24

Intriguing
Very interesting variation of style with the same message.

Part one was very Shakespearean and I think Will himself might have been pleased with the outcome. It's the kind of soliloquy I could imagine Hamlet speaking out to Ophelia.

Part two was much more modern, and although less to my taste, still very lyrical.

Nice piece of skill.

Phil

Title article: Breaking the Silence
Date: 2008-09-18 06:21:26

Yes, it was a good piece, but I also felt that there was somewhere that you could have taken it.

What about some form of revenge involving the instrument, and maybe composing a piece of music in celebration?

Good effort though.

Phil

Title article: Secrets of St. Margaret's (part 5)
Date: 2008-09-18 06:14:39

Deep
Sad tale of what can happen when adults are not held accountable for their positions and actions.

There has been a similar scandal in Jersey, one of the British Channel Islands. Same sort of abuse dating back 30 years in a childrens' home on the island, and there's been a suspicious closing opf ranks.

The plot in this one is coming quickly to its conclusion and I can't wait to see what happens next.

Get on with it man! (lol)

Phil

Title article: Density
Date: 2008-09-18 06:05:14

Bittersweet
The word above said it all, and I was floating amongst the words you "wove".

Good piece Anna.

Phil

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10/06/2008 16:36:07	Re:Phil's Birthday	Off-Topic	309
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Name	Entry
amanda (ams)	Created On: 10/01/2008 11:34:29 happy birthday!!!
Michelle Huff (allmine) Not sure.....	Created On: 10/01/2008 07:17:48 HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!! Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Golly, how did you know? It's really amazing that you knew..........so kind of you to remember an old man (!) Phil
Lisa (antheerr) England	Created On: 08/21/2008 12:07:32 I guess I'd better sign your guest book and say "Hi Dad". You know what I think about your writing - I like most of them (except for the one about the spiders you horrid man!), and the ones I don't are just not my cup of tea rather than there being anything wrong with them. I like the ones I already know best, like the wine one, or the ones about George and Poppy and co, but that's because I already know the stories, but enjoy the way you tell them. Anyway, keep going with it Dad - you need to start making some money though to pay for my lifestyle!!! Lisa
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 08/08/2008 03:56:33 Wow. You been reading all my stories and now I feel bad I've haven't read many of yours. That gonna change, though. Just read your 'Layers of Innocence' and that was brilliant. You are truely a talented writer, my friend. I think I might start on your 'Stick' series next. Oh yeah, you can keep your cats. I'm allergic to them, they make me go blind. Keep well, Max Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): That's great because George says his passport is out of date anyway. Phil
Christian Wright (The 13th) WICKLOW	Created On: 08/06/2008 14:41:53 so youre from Derbyshire.Lived in Utoxeter, thats not too far from you is it.Anyway write on. Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): No, just up the road along the A50 - about half an hour. Phil
Nathan Weaver (onyxdragon) Missouri	Created On: 08/06/2008 07:59:46 I must say, I like Lulu as well. I haven't published on it, yet, though. I'm trying to finish writing and polishing a collection of short stories. I really like the way Lulu works. It's very nice. I'll have to go check your collection on Lulu out. Write on.
r.e.potter (r.e.potter) lost in my mind	Created On: 07/30/2008 05:50:21 Sit back and breath...popping stories out faster then the Spears sisters. I read fast, but not THAT fast. Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): In take 'em while they're there........no fresh ideas for a day or so, but got a stock af three or four to keep me going. Phil
David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump) hill country, texas	Created On: 07/27/2008 13:29:36 i read the disaster recovery story, and typically, after reading a story i bolt over to the writer's profile before i comment. just in case it's a young'un - i don't want to tip any tea kettles... if i like the writer's style, i usually look to see if he/she has other stories - and i hope for one or two. jeez - you have many... now i have a ton of reading to do. write on! Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Errrrm..........there's fewer than there used to be. Deleted 21 and published them in a book on Lulu.com so you won't see them here any more. Had Potter grumbling at me for speed writing, but when the ideas are there, it's a shame to waste them. Thought one up last week just as I was dropping off to sleep, and for the life of me I can't remember what it was now. Must keep pen and pad by the bedside in future. Damocles was one like that, but this time it stuck until morning. Phil
Xena Elvoniche (Xena) yorshire bratts	Created On: 07/16/2008 12:19:08 sir fillip neale i christen thee... Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Muchos gracias mi amiga.
Amie Kerlin (lemon) the litterbox	Created On: 07/12/2008 11:12:35 HEY! I take it you and George are back to being chummy. Glad to see it. =] Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Kind of, yes. This was also a warning to Punk that if he wants my cat he gonna have ta come and get him............. Daughter took this one....you have to be quick with George otherwise he's apt to inspect the camera for himself. He's myyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy cat and nooooooooobody can have him.....he's not even for rent. Meooowwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.