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Website/Blog:

www.philipneale.blogspot.com

About Myself:

Accountant, 55, aspiring writer. Married 2 children, 2 cats (not married to the cats but they think they rule the roost). See gallery for more pictures - George was starting to demand appearance money so I relegated him to the background.......teach him to be sassy!

Ok, so we're pals again.........Hey George, see the nice reader? Kill !!!!!!

Started writing in July 2007 and found that I couldn't stop. Manuscripts now comprise 3 finished novels (60,000; 85,000; 65,000 words respectively) one in progress (currently 20,000), 2 compilations of short stories (total 100,000 words), and some messing around with poetry, although I must confess that it's not my favourite.

That started as limericks on birthday and anniversary cards and now I can't get off the hook.

If anyone knows of a cure............I may be interested (although not JUST yet).

Sorry about the deletions, but they now form part of my first publishd work on www.lulu.com called "Selected Short Stories - Volume 1" please check it out.....

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Sep 7, 2008	A Dish Served Cold	Mystery	20
Sep 5, 2008	Sparing the Rod	Non-Fiction	42
Sep 3, 2008	A Ticket to Tewkesbury	Miscellaneous Stories	167
Sep 2, 2008	Marks On the Wall	Mystery	102
Aug 31, 2008	Fight The Flab	Poetry	69
Aug 30, 2008	Romanes Eunt Domus	Humor	80
Aug 28, 2008	Highly Decorated	Humor	211
Aug 26, 2008	I Am	Mystery	184
Aug 24, 2008	Ebony Eyes	Romance	674
Aug 22, 2008	Blind Faith - Conclusion, Chapter 4	Mystery	95
Aug 21, 2008	Blind Faith, Chapter 3	Mystery	85
Aug 20, 2008	Stop Wining	Humor	180
Aug 19, 2008	Blind Faith, Chapter 2	Mystery	107
Aug 17, 2008	Blind Faith, Chapter 1	Mystery	160
Aug 14, 2008	A Foot in the Door - Conclusion, Chapter 2	Mystery	126
Aug 12, 2008	A Foot in the Door, Chapter 1	Mystery	109
Aug 10, 2008	Clock	Science Fiction	268
Aug 8, 2008	Layers of Innocence	Mystery	204
Aug 6, 2008	The Smell of Fear	Miscellaneous Stories	493
Aug 4, 2008	Battle Royal - A Survival Strategy	Adventure	158

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Comments

Title article: Rawling's Big Prize
Date: 2008-08-19 05:07:40

Gooder Than That
Outstanding descriptions - I was there!

Great attention to detail, and yes it was a long piece, but well worth the wait for an awesome ending.

It combined every big game film clip I've ever seen into one roller coaster ride.

Well done!

Phil

Title article: How Far
Date: 2008-08-18 15:27:41

Potter !!!
You put yourself down.

I read lots of substandard stuff on this site, and don't bother to comment because I can't think of anything good to say.

THIS is my kind of poetry, and not just because it rhymes and has words that I can understand.

There's a message that actually makes sense and uses short words that I casn read without having to use a dictionary.

This is really good stuff. God help us all if this tank runs dry.

Read it through three times just to check for hidden messages. Even tried it backwards just to make sure that there wasn't something in there that said "Paul Is Dead".

Really impressive.

Phil

Title article: Postcard
Date: 2008-08-18 12:04:08

Stark
Brutal tale told from the point of view, I assume, of one of society's dregs sleeping rough.

When you're at the bottom everything and everyone is 'up'.

Your portrayal of her apparent beauty in his eyes comes out in stark relief, as reality sees her as nothing more than a prostitute on drugs.

This was a gripping piece of flash fiction which was slightly spoiled by your lack of attention to spelling.

I am not one of the sites "grammar nazis" as they are amusingly called, but a quick spellcheck would have removed 95% of them.

Nevertheless it was an impressive piece of insight.

Phil

Title article: Degenerates; Cocaine., Chapter 1
Date: 2008-08-18 07:31:11

Sorry
I'm with Tarhead.

You cannot simply place a submission on the site and expect everyone who reads it to be your editor.

My story drafts are just that, and get checked through by at least one family member before they see the light of day, and STILL I find errors.

I'm not saying that my stuff is perfect - far from it, but I don't want others to be unpaid administrators for me.

Nevertheless, the story has potential and I would persevere with it, but please, and I've said it before on here, try to tone down the language.

A good story sells and tells itself and this one is good enough to stand on its own.

Phil

Title article: A Good Day for a Bad Mistake
Date: 2008-08-18 06:30:28

Wot a Gotcha!
What the hell are you trying to do to me???

Talk about getting suckered in. Hands in the air pal, I got gotted!!

This was exceptional, and I can't for the life of me understand how I missed it.

Lunchtime nearly done and I stumble into the trap you set.

Brilliant, and I didn't even read the other reviews first!!

Going to now, though.

Phil

Title article: The Morning After The War
Date: 2008-08-18 06:15:13

Balanced
Balanced and well thought out.

It's not always easy to put both sides of an argument or debate - there's invariably some element of favouritism.

Found myself switching from one point of view to the other as it progressed. The nailing down of the 'My Country Right Or Wrong' jingoism was its final bow.

Good piece of luring into the story.

Phil

Title article: State Heritage
Date: 2008-08-18 06:08:48

Minutiae
We could all write an account of our own neighbourhood, and that would be far more interesting than the national stuff which the classical historian stuffs down our throats.

Sometimes it is far more entertaining, as here, to learn about someone or something which does not impact upon global issues.

I found this piece engrossing and although not entirley a personal account, was nevertheless very interesting.

I have a somewhat similar account of the brief life of an uncle whom I never knew, but whose name I bear. He was killed in action in Sicily in 1943.

you story brought out similar feelings to that one.

Good read.
Phil

Title article: Zippo
Date: 2008-08-18 05:52:52

Me too.............
I got a little lost in the final sentence, because I'd taken Potter's advice and not looked at the other reviews first (prat! - me, not Potter I hasten to add).

Maybe Harmattan's right about the "it" - that would make sense, but the dream is still confusing unless he has a death wish.

Entertaining story nevertheless.

Phil

Title article: Larval Stage
Date: 2008-08-18 05:36:01

Truly did not know what to put as the title to this review.

It left me breathless and open-mouthed in astonishment.

I had an idea where you were going, but not how.

At 8,000 words I almost missed it and that would have been a great shame.

Excellent story.

Phil

Title article: They live amongst us
Date: 2008-08-18 05:12:37

Twist
Nice twist to an old story.

It kept the plot alive and that's very important when you haven't many words to play around with.

Even at the death (sorry, no pun intended) I was expecting something else.

Good read.

Phil

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Lisa (antheerr) England	Created On: 08/21/2008 12:07:32 I guess I'd better sign your guest book and say "Hi Dad". You know what I think about your writing - I like most of them (except for the one about the spiders you horrid man!), and the ones I don't are just not my cup of tea rather than there being anything wrong with them. I like the ones I already know best, like the wine one, or the ones about George and Poppy and co, but that's because I already know the stories, but enjoy the way you tell them. Anyway, keep going with it Dad - you need to start making some money though to pay for my lifestyle!!! Lisa
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 08/08/2008 03:56:33 Wow. You been reading all my stories and now I feel bad I've haven't read many of yours. That gonna change, though. Just read your 'Layers of Innocence' and that was brilliant. You are truely a talented writer, my friend. I think I might start on your 'Stick' series next. Oh yeah, you can keep your cats. I'm allergic to them, they make me go blind. Keep well, Max Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): That's great because George says his passport is out of date anyway. Phil
Christian Wright (The 13th) WICKLOW	Created On: 08/06/2008 14:41:53 so youre from Derbyshire.Lived in Utoxeter, thats not too far from you is it.Anyway write on. Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): No, just up the road along the A50 - about half an hour. Phil
Nathan Weaver (onyxdragon) Missouri	Created On: 08/06/2008 07:59:46 I must say, I like Lulu as well. I haven't published on it, yet, though. I'm trying to finish writing and polishing a collection of short stories. I really like the way Lulu works. It's very nice. I'll have to go check your collection on Lulu out. Write on.
r.e.potter (r.e.potter) lost in my mind	Created On: 07/30/2008 05:50:21 Sit back and breath...popping stories out faster then the Spears sisters. I read fast, but not THAT fast. Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): In take 'em while they're there........no fresh ideas for a day or so, but got a stock af three or four to keep me going. Phil
David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump) hill country, texas	Created On: 07/27/2008 13:29:36 i read the disaster recovery story, and typically, after reading a story i bolt over to the writer's profile before i comment. just in case it's a young'un - i don't want to tip any tea kettles... if i like the writer's style, i usually look to see if he/she has other stories - and i hope for one or two. jeez - you have many... now i have a ton of reading to do. write on! Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Errrrm..........there's fewer than there used to be. Deleted 21 and published them in a book on Lulu.com so you won't see them here any more. Had Potter grumbling at me for speed writing, but when the ideas are there, it's a shame to waste them. Thought one up last week just as I was dropping off to sleep, and for the life of me I can't remember what it was now. Must keep pen and pad by the bedside in future. Damocles was one like that, but this time it stuck until morning. Phil
Xena Elvoniche (Xena) yorshire bratts	Created On: 07/16/2008 12:19:08 sir fillip neale i christen thee... Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Muchos gracias mi amiga.
Amie Kerlin (lemon) the litterbox	Created On: 07/12/2008 11:12:35 HEY! I take it you and George are back to being chummy. Glad to see it. =] Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Kind of, yes. This was also a warning to Punk that if he wants my cat he gonna have ta come and get him............. Daughter took this one....you have to be quick with George otherwise he's apt to inspect the camera for himself. He's myyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy cat and nooooooooobody can have him.....he's not even for rent. Meooowwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.
Amie Kerlin (lemon) somewhere in time	Created On: 07/03/2008 09:46:55 Hi! I just realized I haven't signed your guestbook yet so here we go. you might want to update your profile so it's not saying that the picture of you is George the cat lol Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Now look, you've only got my word for it that the picture really isn't me..............agter all, I am a story teller. Will get it swapped pretty damn quick guv'nor... Phil (Or george) - he's pretty cool though (Geoge, not me............although....)
Jessie Masoner (Behind_the_Mask) The Universe	Created On: 07/01/2008 13:59:33 Well first off I would like to say that your mystery stories are some of the best if not the best I have ever read. Second, Hi.