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Philip Neale (philneale1952)
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Member Since 04/30/2008
Last Online 10/11/2008
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Website/Blog: www.philipneale.blogspot.com
About Myself: Accountant, 55, aspiring writer. Married 2 children, 2 cats (not married to the cats but they think they rule the roost). See gallery for more pictures - George was starting to demand appearance money so I relegated him to the background.......teach him to be sassy!

Ok, so we're pals again.........Hey George, see the nice reader? Kill !!!!!!

Started writing in July 2007 and found that I couldn't stop. Manuscripts now comprise 3 finished novels (60,000; 85,000; 65,000 words respectively) one in progress (currently 20,000), 2 compilations of short stories (total 100,000 words), and some messing around with poetry, although I must confess that it's not my favourite.

That started as limericks on birthday and anniversary cards and now I can't get off the hook.

If anyone knows of a cure............I may be interested (although not JUST yet).

First manuscript is now a finished and published novel "A Ticket to Tewkesbury" (see stories list for a preview and list of acknowledgements).


Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Oct 9, 2008What Kind of Tool Am I?Humor 64
Oct 2, 2008Lasting LoveMiscellaneous Stories 103
Sep 29, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 1Horror 112
Sep 26, 2008Finders KeepersMystery 115
Sep 26, 2008Two Little Dicky BirdsMystery 115
Sep 24, 2008Poppy AppealHumor 287
Sep 17, 2008Funny You Should Say ThatHumor 196
Sep 7, 2008A Dish Served ColdMystery 532
Sep 5, 2008Sparing the RodNon-Fiction 114
Sep 3, 2008A Ticket to TewkesburyMiscellaneous Stories 437
Sep 2, 2008Marks On the WallMystery 210
Aug 31, 2008Fight The FlabPoetry 123
Aug 30, 2008Romanes Eunt DomusHumor 153
Aug 28, 2008Highly DecoratedHumor 298
Aug 26, 2008I AmMystery 260
Aug 24, 2008Ebony EyesRomance 960
Aug 22, 2008Blind Faith - Conclusion, Chapter 4Mystery 141
Aug 21, 2008Blind Faith, Chapter 3Mystery 130
Aug 20, 2008Stop WiningHumor 257
Aug 19, 2008Blind Faith, Chapter 2Mystery 161
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Comments

Total number of comments: 714

Title article: The Malefic House, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-10-09 05:20:53
Oh Yes
I'm with the DarcKnyt on this one. 
 
It cannot be easy for you doing this, and you are geting better with each submission. 
 
Even for a native English speaker, the nuances of the language are sometimes quite daunting, so it's hats off to you. 
 
Was with the piece right to the end. 
 
Well done. 
 
Phil

Title article: The Lottery
Date: 2008-10-05 13:36:24
Reprise
This was funny the first time I read it, and it's improved with age (or have I disintegrated?) 
 
Good - almost POETIC justice. 
 
Phil

Title article: Misery
Date: 2008-10-04 14:32:32
Hug
Hugugugugugugugugugugugugugugu gug 
 
Feeling better now? 
 
Poem right from the heart wasn't it? 
 
Chin up. 
 
Silly Philly

Title article: Bear the young Princess and Dog
Date: 2008-10-02 05:48:23
Fables
Inmpressively put together fable very much in the style of Aesop. 
 
"Familiarity Breeds Contempt" and the story brought this saying right to the front as the friendships between the three main payers developed and changed. 
 
The metaphor of using the dog for the poor down trodden tramp-like perosn was very good, as was the bear for the upright, strong one who had learned to evolve from his humble beginnings. 
 
Initial thoughts on the over use of "dog" and "bear" vanished as I realised that the whole structure of the story was built around it. 
 
Very good. 
 
Phil

Title article: The Malefic House, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-10-02 05:32:14
Improving
Your writing is coming on in leaps and bounds Seb. This is a really creepy one and the tension's there right at the start. 
 
I take my hat off to you, writing in a language which is not your own - I wouldn't know where to start. 
 
Push on with the next part, folks seem to like your style. 
 
Phil

Title article: Puppets
Date: 2008-10-01 06:16:26
Assumption
Assuming that he was responsible for the deaths of both of them, this was a good piece and interwoven with the two "established" ghosts, it gave the story a unique perspective. 
 
I thought you could have made the ending a litle clearer though, and perhaps it finished too soon. 
 
Nevertheless I liked it. 
 
Phil

Title article: The headline
Date: 2008-10-01 06:12:08
Aside
Aside from the errors (above) this was a very good portrayal of the kind of disaster which has become quite common. I liked the style. 
 
We had one in Britain some years ago in a Scottish town called Dunblane. An infant school was the target and many died. 
 
It's different from you earlier work. 
 
Phil

Title article: Slave to the World, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-10-01 06:08:07
Interesting
Good starting chapter Amanda, and the child's innocence could explode with the plot as the guy takes control. 
 
I liked the use of Spanish (I know a little) and your technique of "almost" translating it. Were you a teacher? 
 
Keep going. 
 
Phil

Title article: Jason Richard Wright: Lacey Ann
Date: 2008-10-01 06:03:48
Great
Really good story on the 'Oedipus Rex' theme. 
 
I thought you handled the ploy extremely well, and I was willing for the bopy to put them both away. 
 
Just goes to show that you shouldm never mess with kids. 
 
Good stuff. 
 
Phil

Title article: HOUSE.
Date: 2008-10-01 05:58:09
Mixed Up
Like Harmattan, I opened this one up not quite knowing what to expect. 
 
You didn't disappoint. This is a good tale of one hell of a mixed up family. 
 
No crudity though, and the whole thing was painted with an enormous amount of subtlety when you bear in mind the hard, dark subject that you addressed. 
 
Phil

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amanda (ams)

Created On: 10/01/2008 11:34:29

happy birthday!!!

Michelle Huff (allmine)

Not sure.....
Created On: 10/01/2008 07:17:48

HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Golly, how did you know? It's really amazing that you knew..........so kind of you to remember an old man (!)

Phil


Lisa (antheerr)

England
Created On: 08/21/2008 12:07:32

I guess I'd better sign your guest book and say "Hi Dad".
You know what I think about your writing - I like most of them (except for the one about the spiders you horrid man!), and the ones I don't are just not my cup of tea rather than there being anything wrong with them. I like the ones I already know best, like the wine one, or the ones about George and Poppy and co, but that's because I already know the stories, but enjoy the way you tell them.
Anyway, keep going with it Dad - you need to start making some money though to pay for my lifestyle!!! Lisa

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

Created On: 08/08/2008 03:56:33

Wow.

You been reading all my stories and now I feel bad I've haven't read many of yours. That gonna change, though. Just read your 'Layers of Innocence' and that was brilliant. You are truely a talented writer, my friend. I think I might start on your 'Stick' series next.

Oh yeah, you can keep your cats. I'm allergic to them, they make me go blind.

Keep well,

Max
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): That's great because George says his passport is out of date anyway.

Phil


Christian Wright (The 13th)

WICKLOW
Created On: 08/06/2008 14:41:53

so youre from Derbyshire.Lived in Utoxeter, thats not too far from you is it.Anyway write on.
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): No, just up the road along the A50 - about half an hour.

Phil


Nathan Weaver (onyxdragon)

Missouri
Created On: 08/06/2008 07:59:46

I must say, I like Lulu as well. I haven't published on it, yet, though. I'm trying to finish writing and polishing a collection of short stories. I really like the way Lulu works. It's very nice. I'll have to go check your collection on Lulu out. Write on.

r.e.potter (r.e.potter)

lost in my mind
Created On: 07/30/2008 05:50:21

Sit back and breath...popping stories out faster then the Spears sisters. I read fast, but not THAT fast.
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): In take 'em while they're there........no fresh ideas for a day or so, but got a stock af three or four to keep me going.

Phil


David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump)

hill country, texas
Created On: 07/27/2008 13:29:36

i read the disaster recovery story, and typically, after reading a story i bolt over to the writer's profile before i comment. just in case it's a young'un - i don't want to tip any tea kettles...

if i like the writer's style, i usually look to see if he/she has other stories - and i hope for one or two.

jeez - you have many...

now i have a ton of reading to do.

write on!
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Errrrm..........there's fewer than there used to be.

Deleted 21 and published them in a book on Lulu.com so you won't see them here any more.

Had Potter grumbling at me for speed writing, but when the ideas are there, it's a shame to waste them.

Thought one up last week just as I was dropping off to sleep, and for the life of me I can't remember what it was now.

Must keep pen and pad by the bedside in future.

Damocles was one like that, but this time it stuck until morning.

Phil


Xena Elvoniche (Xena)

yorshire bratts
Created On: 07/16/2008 12:19:08

sir fillip neale i christen thee...
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Muchos gracias mi amiga.

Amie Kerlin (lemon)

the litterbox
Created On: 07/12/2008 11:12:35

HEY! I take it you and George are back to being chummy. Glad to see it. =]
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Kind of, yes. This was also a warning to Punk that if he wants my cat he gonna have ta come and get him.............

Daughter took this one....you have to be quick with George otherwise he's apt to inspect the camera for himself.

He's myyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy cat and nooooooooobody can have him.....he's not even for rent.

Meooowwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.


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