Elijah

The distant door closed shut behind him with a click....

Population:200, Chapter 2

Another creature had joined the first at the door now....
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Website/Blog: www.philipneale.blogspot.com
About Myself: Accountant, 55, aspiring writer. Married 2 children, 2 cats (not married to the cats but they think they rule the roost). See gallery for more pictures - George was starting to demand appearance money so I relegated him to the background.......teach him to be sassy!

Ok, so we're pals again.........Hey George, see the nice reader? Kill !!!!!!

Started writing in July 2007 and found that I couldn't stop. Manuscripts now comprise 3 finished novels (60,000; 85,000; 65,000 words respectively) one in progress (currently 20,000), 2 compilations of short stories (total 100,000 words), and some messing around with poetry, although I must confess that it's not my favourite.

That started as limericks on birthday and anniversary cards and now I can't get off the hook.

If anyone knows of a cure............I may be interested (although not JUST yet).

First manuscript is now a finished and published novel "A Ticket to Tewkesbury" (see stories list for a preview and list of acknowledgements).

Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
May 6, 2008HopelessnessPoetry 178
May 20, 2008Bodies of Evidence - Chapter 6Mystery 177
Jul 13, 2008A Sporting Chance - Part OneMiscellaneous Stories 176
Aug 31, 2008Fight The FlabPoetry 174
Aug 14, 2008A Foot in the Door - Conclusion, Chapter 2Mystery 174
Jul 23, 2008Stick, Chapter 4Horror 173
Jul 29, 2008The Damocles LegacyScience Fiction 172
Aug 12, 2008A Foot in the Door, Chapter 1Mystery 165
Sep 5, 2008Sparing the RodNon-Fiction 163
Aug 22, 2008Blind Faith - Conclusion, Chapter 4Mystery 161
Jul 31, 2008The CrackerMiscellaneous Stories 160
Aug 21, 2008Blind Faith, Chapter 3Mystery 157
Oct 24, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 2Horror 143
Oct 29, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 3Horror 127
Jul 15, 2008A Sporting Chance - Part twoMiscellaneous Stories 120
Nov 2, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 5Horror 106
Oct 30, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 4Horror 103
Nov 2, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 6Horror 94
Nov 4, 2008Wishful Thinking - The Final Chapter, Chapter 7Horror 82
Nov 18, 2008AnniversaryPoetry 40
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Full MarksNov 14, 2008

Comments

Total number of comments: 830

Title article: First Friend
Date: 2008-11-20 01:08:12
International
Stuff like this, when it's done well, cuts right across national boundaries. 
 
This was excellent and although written from a US point of view, it went right back to mu own childhood here in the UK. 
 
Your descriptions of the back yard were the same as those of my own parents' house, and I'm now going for a cup of tea before reading it again. 
 
Oh yes, great control of grammar and spelling, almost forgot that one. 
 
Phil

Title article: IT'S OK MA SHE'S ONLY BLEEDING.
Date: 2008-11-17 06:13:50
Hmmmmmmm
Yes, this one had me looking over my shoulder. 
 
Creepily written in unusual person to display the schizophrenia. Gripped me from the outset. 
 
So calmly written in every-day manner that when the climax comes, although you just know there's evil in it, you aren't really prepared. 
 
Well done sir. 
 
Phil

Title article: Dyfo's Final Duel
Date: 2008-11-17 05:43:46
Fan
I'm not a fan of fantasy, but heard your plea and read on. 
 
It's typical of the sort of thing my daughters finds fascinating, and you maintained interest through the dialogue and plot. 
 
Gave you 4 for keeping me hooked. 
 
Phil

Title article: The cut.
Date: 2008-11-17 05:37:09
Trying
Whilst not understanding the the psychological state which can influence the nature of self-harm, I did find this a pointed piece of work. 
 
You brought out some stark emotions here. 
 
Phil

Title article: A Better Boy, Chapter 7
Date: 2008-11-14 16:38:30
Deadly
Well, when the end came it happened sooner than I expected and in a manner for which I was quite unprepared. 
 
You really have got a gift young man. There will be a few envious people on this site after reading this story. 
 
You took time and trouble to lay out the characters and plot in detail before closing it off in the most dramatic manner, leaving an open-ended conclusion for us all to ponder. 
 
Wow............. 
 
Phil

Title article: A Better Boy, Chapter 6
Date: 2008-11-14 16:33:38
Unease
There was a series of stories on UK television in the late 1960s called "Tales of Unease", and each weekly episode was a stand-alone piece of work. 
 
Your writing in this chapter reminds me vividly of the scary feelings it brought to me - I was in my early teens then. 
 
The pace has dropped quite suddenly and 'normality' has returned - except we all know by now that this is anything but normal. 
 
Outstanding piece of direction changing - I'm off to the next part. 
 
Phil

Title article: Invasion©- chapter 1
Date: 2008-11-14 16:14:28
Tension Personified
From the start I just knew this was a bad one waiting to happen, and you strung the wires out so tight. 
 
Bad is coming and we all know it - what we don't know is exactly how you're going to reel us in after we're on the hook. 
 
The descriptive stuff is almost three dimensional, and although we can all be accused of back-slapping at times, this is something else. 
 
It goes way beyond a simple sci-fi story, and all you've done so far is to sketch out the main characters. 
 
Will be watching this one now I'm back on-side. 
 
Phil

Title article: A Better Boy, Chapter 5
Date: 2008-11-10 14:18:10
Dramatic
Sudden increases in the pace of a story have the inevitable effect of making the audience sit up and take notice. 
 
You've done this very well at a crucial point in the plot. 
 
Now comes a turning point where the "cure" has been administered and you shut down the plotline until the next chapter. 
 
Outstanding control over the feed of information to the reader. You have some talent young man. 
 
Phil

Title article: A Better Boy, Chapter 4
Date: 2008-11-09 11:24:36
Stepford Wives....?
You know, the more I read this, the more it takes me way back top the "B" movies of the 60s. 
 
"B" doesn't mean they were bad, in fact lots of them became classics, and the storylines ran similar tp yours. 
 
The chapter lengths could stand a little increasing now that you've established the plot, but that's not meant as a criticism, more an opinion. 
 
It's a really good story, adn belies your age. 
 
Phil

Title article: A Better Boy, Chapter 3
Date: 2008-11-09 11:20:33
Freak
And now..............here comes the freaky part of the story. 
 
Well held back and you've chosen the perfect timimg for releasing the plotline that's coming. 
 
Nicley built up tension with a cliff-hanger at the end. 
 
Rock 'n Roll! 
 
Phil

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Amie Kerlin (lemon)

 Created On: 10/12/2008 14:53:04
Aparently I missed your birthday, so happy belated birthday.

I just thought I would drop in and say hi since I hadn't talked to you in FOREVER. I have so much reading to catch up on.
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Hey Lemon, not gone "sour" on me then?

Belated thanks

Phil
amanda (ams)

 Created On: 10/01/2008 11:34:29
happy birthday!!!
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Belated thanks

Phil
Michelle Huff (allmine)

Not sure.....
 Created On: 10/01/2008 07:17:48
HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Golly, how did you know? It's really amazing that you knew..........so kind of you to remember an old man (!)

Phil
Lisa (antheerr)

England
 Created On: 08/21/2008 12:07:32
I guess I'd better sign your guest book and say "Hi Dad".
You know what I think about your writing - I like most of them (except for the one about the spiders you horrid man!), and the ones I don't are just not my cup of tea rather than there being anything wrong with them. I like the ones I already know best, like the wine one, or the ones about George and Poppy and co, but that's because I already know the stories, but enjoy the way you tell them.
Anyway, keep going with it Dad - you need to start making some money though to pay for my lifestyle!!! Lisa
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 08/08/2008 03:56:33
Wow.

You been reading all my stories and now I feel bad I've haven't read many of yours. That gonna change, though. Just read your 'Layers of Innocence' and that was brilliant. You are truely a talented writer, my friend. I think I might start on your 'Stick' series next.

Oh yeah, you can keep your cats. I'm allergic to them, they make me go blind.

Keep well,

Max
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): That's great because George says his passport is out of date anyway.

Phil
Christian Wright (The 13th)

WICKLOW
 Created On: 08/06/2008 14:41:53
so youre from Derbyshire.Lived in Utoxeter, thats not too far from you is it.Anyway write on.
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): No, just up the road along the A50 - about half an hour.

Phil
Nathan Weaver (onyxdragon)

Missouri
 Created On: 08/06/2008 07:59:46
I must say, I like Lulu as well. I haven't published on it, yet, though. I'm trying to finish writing and polishing a collection of short stories. I really like the way Lulu works. It's very nice. I'll have to go check your collection on Lulu out. Write on.
r.e.potter (r.e.potter)

lost in my mind
 Created On: 07/30/2008 05:50:21
Sit back and breath...popping stories out faster then the Spears sisters. I read fast, but not THAT fast.
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): In take 'em while they're there........no fresh ideas for a day or so, but got a stock af three or four to keep me going.

Phil
David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump)

hill country, texas
 Created On: 07/27/2008 13:29:36
i read the disaster recovery story, and typically, after reading a story i bolt over to the writer's profile before i comment. just in case it's a young'un - i don't want to tip any tea kettles...

if i like the writer's style, i usually look to see if he/she has other stories - and i hope for one or two.

jeez - you have many...

now i have a ton of reading to do.

write on!
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Errrrm..........there's fewer than there used to be.

Deleted 21 and published them in a book on Lulu.com so you won't see them here any more.

Had Potter grumbling at me for speed writing, but when the ideas are there, it's a shame to waste them.

Thought one up last week just as I was dropping off to sleep, and for the life of me I can't remember what it was now.

Must keep pen and pad by the bedside in future.

Damocles was one like that, but this time it stuck until morning.

Phil
Xena Elvoniche (Xena)

yorshire bratts
 Created On: 07/16/2008 12:19:08
sir fillip neale i christen thee...
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Muchos gracias mi amiga.
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