If The Sun Didn't Rise

IF THE SUN DIDN'T RISE BY JON STALK...

Awakening of Minds (Part One)

So there I was, looking once more at the device on the...

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Philip Neale (philneale1952)
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Website/Blog: www.philipneale.blogspot.com
About Myself: Accountant, 55, aspiring writer. Married 2 children, 2 cats (not married to the cats but they think they rule the roost). See gallery for more pictures - George was starting to demand appearance money so I relegated him to the background.......teach him to be sassy!

Ok, so we're pals again.........Hey George, see the nice reader? Kill !!!!!!

Started writing in July 2007 and found that I couldn't stop. Manuscripts now comprise 3 finished novels (60,000; 85,000; 65,000 words respectively) one in progress (currently 20,000), 2 compilations of short stories (total 100,000 words), and some messing around with poetry, although I must confess that it's not my favourite.

That started as limericks on birthday and anniversary cards and now I can't get off the hook.

If anyone knows of a cure............I may be interested (although not JUST yet).

Sorry about the deletions, but they now form part of my first publishd work on www.lulu.com called "Selected Short Stories - Volume 1" please check it out.....


Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Aug 24, 2008Ebony EyesRomance 619
Aug 6, 2008The Smell of FearMiscellaneous Stories 487
May 9, 2008Needle in a HaystackMystery 473
May 6, 2008The Spiders and Johnny BailesHorror 457
Jun 7, 2008Mirror, Mirror, Chapter 1Mystery 448
May 11, 2008Bodies of Evidence - Chapter 1Mystery 394
May 8, 2008Packing It All InHumor 382
May 9, 2008Last ChristmasScience Fiction 376
May 8, 2008Marks Trilogy Part 1 - A Secret LifeMystery 333
Jul 4, 2008Killing Me SoftlyRomance 290
Aug 10, 2008ClockScience Fiction 267
May 9, 2008Coles to NewcastleRomance 245
Jun 12, 2008Mirror, Mirror, Chapter 2Mystery 228
Jul 17, 2008Stick, Chapter 1Horror 222
May 9, 2008A Friend in NeedMiscellaneous Stories 217
Jul 10, 2008Falling Out With GeorgeHumor 216
May 8, 2008Marks Trilogy Part 3 - Footsteps In TheMystery 206
Aug 28, 2008Highly DecoratedHumor 205
Aug 2, 2008SorryRomance 204
Aug 8, 2008Layers of InnocenceMystery 202
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Comments

Total number of comments: 598

Title article: Bonnie
Date: 2008-09-03 08:46:06
Kisser?
Neither am I Alfred - show a little compassion man! 
 
Write something yourself so we can all judge YOUR skills. 
 
Phil

Title article: HENPECKED HUSBAND
Date: 2008-09-03 05:59:35
Nonsense
Told you so, but you didn't listen did you? 
 
Phil

Title article: Jericho, Chapter 11
Date: 2008-09-03 05:57:00
Must Have Been Me
A quickening of the pace - it has to have been me. 
 
This was coming close to completing the loop with the Desperations, and I liked the additional tension of the extra shooter from the Hummer. 
 
Just when you thinkk the cavalry's arrived someone goes arse over tit. 
 
 
End must bne coming soon, and I'm waiting for the final scenes. 
 
Great going 
 
Phil

Title article: Jericho, Chapter 10
Date: 2008-09-03 05:50:01
Me
Maybe it's me and the after effects of the cold that's been bugging me, but the pace of this chapter seemed to have dropped. 
 
Your dialogue seemed a little stuttery and I knwo that's not like you at all, so I guess it must be me. 
 
Will mobe on to the next, down my coffee and shake the blues away baby.........(stop that!) 
 
Phil

Title article: Jericho, Chapter 9
Date: 2008-09-03 05:40:53
Changes
Changes of pace, dialogue and tone. 
 
It's great that you can do this with the switch of the telling to another character. 
 
This gives the story a whole new dimension, and is another trick to retain the reader's interest. 
 
Good going Max. 
 
Moving swiftly on..... 
 
Phil

Title article: Criminal Machination, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-09-03 04:35:56
Told You
Great start Seb. Keep the plot moving at this pace and there's a very good story line here. 
 
Flows quite nicely and might lend itself easliy to changes in direction as characters develop. 
 
Well done 
 
Phil

Title article: There Is No Me Without You
Date: 2008-09-03 04:31:47
Soothing
Short and sweet with lots of feeling. 
 
Well done Jessie. 
 
Phil

Title article: The Smell of Fear
Date: 2008-09-03 04:28:12
Thanks
Just a note of thanks to all of you who've taken the time to comment on this one. 
 
In all honesty the reaction has taken me by surprise as I didn't think it would be taken too seriously. 
 
Just goes to show how tastes vary doesn't it? 
 
Phil

Title article: Bonnie
Date: 2008-09-03 04:15:14
Shhhhhhhhhhhhhh......
Poignant and fitting tribute. Nice picture too. 
 
I'm a dog lover as well as a cat person, and this one pulled at the heart strings as our first one died after a car accident on the main road. 
 
I wasn't there and you always ask yourself 'Would I have been able to prevent it?'. 
 
Phil

Title article: Revenge of the Swarming Blackness, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-09-02 12:52:25
2001
I'm getting images of Arthur C Clarke's "2001 - A Space Odyssey". 
 
Once more you've denied an explanation save that the entity moves and is sentient. 
 
This is drama on a scale used by James Patterson and Jeffrey Deaver. Short, punchy chapters to keep the plot moving even when there does not appear to be much action. 
 
Watching............. 
 
Phil

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Lisa (antheerr)

England
Created On: 08/21/2008 12:07:32

I guess I'd better sign your guest book and say "Hi Dad".
You know what I think about your writing - I like most of them (except for the one about the spiders you horrid man!), and the ones I don't are just not my cup of tea rather than there being anything wrong with them. I like the ones I already know best, like the wine one, or the ones about George and Poppy and co, but that's because I already know the stories, but enjoy the way you tell them.
Anyway, keep going with it Dad - you need to start making some money though to pay for my lifestyle!!! Lisa

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

Created On: 08/08/2008 03:56:33

Wow.

You been reading all my stories and now I feel bad I've haven't read many of yours. That gonna change, though. Just read your 'Layers of Innocence' and that was brilliant. You are truely a talented writer, my friend. I think I might start on your 'Stick' series next.

Oh yeah, you can keep your cats. I'm allergic to them, they make me go blind.

Keep well,

Max
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): That's great because George says his passport is out of date anyway.

Phil


Christian Wright (The 13th)

WICKLOW
Created On: 08/06/2008 14:41:53

so youre from Derbyshire.Lived in Utoxeter, thats not too far from you is it.Anyway write on.
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): No, just up the road along the A50 - about half an hour.

Phil


Nathan Weaver (onyxdragon)

Missouri
Created On: 08/06/2008 07:59:46

I must say, I like Lulu as well. I haven't published on it, yet, though. I'm trying to finish writing and polishing a collection of short stories. I really like the way Lulu works. It's very nice. I'll have to go check your collection on Lulu out. Write on.

r.e.potter (r.e.potter)

lost in my mind
Created On: 07/30/2008 05:50:21

Sit back and breath...popping stories out faster then the Spears sisters. I read fast, but not THAT fast.
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): In take 'em while they're there........no fresh ideas for a day or so, but got a stock af three or four to keep me going.

Phil


David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump)

hill country, texas
Created On: 07/27/2008 13:29:36

i read the disaster recovery story, and typically, after reading a story i bolt over to the writer's profile before i comment. just in case it's a young'un - i don't want to tip any tea kettles...

if i like the writer's style, i usually look to see if he/she has other stories - and i hope for one or two.

jeez - you have many...

now i have a ton of reading to do.

write on!
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Errrrm..........there's fewer than there used to be.

Deleted 21 and published them in a book on Lulu.com so you won't see them here any more.

Had Potter grumbling at me for speed writing, but when the ideas are there, it's a shame to waste them.

Thought one up last week just as I was dropping off to sleep, and for the life of me I can't remember what it was now.

Must keep pen and pad by the bedside in future.

Damocles was one like that, but this time it stuck until morning.

Phil


Xena Elvoniche (Xena)

yorshire bratts
Created On: 07/16/2008 12:19:08

sir fillip neale i christen thee...
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Muchos gracias mi amiga.

Amie Kerlin (lemon)

the litterbox
Created On: 07/12/2008 11:12:35

HEY! I take it you and George are back to being chummy. Glad to see it. =]
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Kind of, yes. This was also a warning to Punk that if he wants my cat he gonna have ta come and get him.............

Daughter took this one....you have to be quick with George otherwise he's apt to inspect the camera for himself.

He's myyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy cat and nooooooooobody can have him.....he's not even for rent.

Meooowwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.


Amie Kerlin (lemon)

somewhere in time
Created On: 07/03/2008 09:46:55

Hi! I just realized I haven't signed your guestbook yet so here we go. you might want to update your profile so it's not saying that the picture of you is George the cat lol
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Now look, you've only got my word for it that the picture really isn't me..............agter all, I am a story teller.


Will get it swapped pretty damn quick guv'nor...

Phil (Or george) - he's pretty cool though (Geoge, not me............although....)


Jessie Masoner (Behind_the_Mask)

The Universe
Created On: 07/01/2008 13:59:33

Well first off I would like to say that your mystery stories are some of the best if not the best I have ever read.

Second,

Hi.

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