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Last Online	09/04/2008
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About Myself:

Alright, what can i say about me?
I have every book i have ever read, even my child hood books, which i used to stay up all night reading with a flashlight under the covers. I made choices that lead me to Parting for the 4th of July on Route 101(on the beach) in Oregon, to debauchery standing at the end of Route 1 in Key west for Fantasy Fest. Also my 25 B-day, what a way to celebrate turning a 1/4 of a century. I'm 30 now living in the Midwest(guess where)taking care of my Grandfathers farm,(every building he built with his hands) I've been a waiter, bartender, construction worker, and lately a poker player, all while keeping books and pages of thoughts, ideas, concepts, snippets of conversations, and I'm starting to combine them into stories for all to enjoy.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Sep 4, 2008	Gabriel Visits	Science Fiction	67
Sep 3, 2008	Hearts Cry Out	Poetry	51
Aug 28, 2008	Nothing Compared	Poetry	82
Aug 27, 2008	2 Poems of Her	Poetry	79
Aug 25, 2008	Lighthouse	Romance	94
Aug 18, 2008	Going Up	Humor	91
Jul 16, 2008	The Wolf	Science Fiction	195
Jul 10, 2008	A View	Poetry	99
Jul 8, 2008	Shepherd	Science Fiction	107
Jul 6, 2008	Vices	Poetry	112
Jul 4, 2008	Birth of the White Buffalo	Romance	357
Jul 1, 2008	A Strange Dirty Doughnut	Humor	210
Jun 26, 2008	Bad Day	Miscellaneous Stories	90
Jun 12, 2008	It All Depends	Poetry	88
Jun 9, 2008	The Execution	Science Fiction	164
Jun 6, 2008	What Would You Know	Poetry	186
Jun 6, 2008	Faulty Steps	Poetry	85
Jun 5, 2008	Make Profits not Ethics	Miscellaneous Stories	207
Jun 5, 2008	Could She?	Romance	269
Apr 30, 2008	Love Without Me	Poetry	160

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Title article: Days of End (a journey of man)chapter 1 & 2
Date: 2008-07-08 12:33:17

Ok, i read it and im commenting without reading other comments.
Gripping. You simplified what Einstein couldn't. Good pace, great descriptions that flowed around the story. I liked that you did explain time travel, but also did it with a background story as well with Gov. funding and discoveries on a time line. and after all the descriptions, the last lines my favorite. Love how you don't describe the actual light show. Still saw some minor grammar crap, but those will iron themselves out after every re-read.

Title article: The Invention Of Uncertainty, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-07-08 11:19:52

I read part 2 first, saying that, part 1 seems too fast, almost like you moved your paintbrush across the canvas too fast and didn't leave the detail you wanted or i need. couple of verb issues, "were" a product of war, small things like for grammar. the man with the gun, when he shot it people scattered, but then 2 men were behind him? and the shout about freeing his son. in my opinion, with your ability to hold a scene in your minds eye, the guy with the gun part could be a great intro. still good, i just thought part 2 was better, as it should, since it was written later. more you write the better you get.

Title article: The Invention Of Uncertainty, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-07-08 11:03:59

usually the bad guys take candy FROM kids, loved the twist, makes more sense too. 1 sentence i would rewrite "Easily malleable, her legs felt like churned butter." I only say that cause "as" is used 4 times in first paragraph, and Baron is royalty, barren is empty. It was so good those were the only 2 things i could nit-pick over.

Title article: Unconscious Revenge
Date: 2008-07-08 10:24:07

no wonder guys think women are crazy. Starts dating a guy again after 13 years, and when the next step is about to be taken; BAM she leaves the guy because he slept with a girl 13 years ago. Nice little revenge story, some verb use is off and some sentences are weak but overall good.

Title article: M-T Barrel Bar
Date: 2008-07-08 10:05:12

I liked it. Talk about a bad day. The ending was a little confusing but im guessing when the bullet hit him, his mind (in its last second) gave him a moment of happiness before life was stolen away from him

Title article: The Gift
Date: 2008-07-08 02:32:50

man creates god, who creates man, who gives man purpose. Man uses god for excuses to do anything like killing and stealing, or god uses man to kill his own misguided children and spread his word that a man says he speaks. sorry, tired of people trying to preach to me about Jesus (like the pope) who have yet to live like the man or love the man because he said something like, " if you love me, you will keep my commandments." and with the world spinning around money, and the only people Jesus got mad at were the moneychangers on the steps of the church, well im ranting, just like your story.

Title article: Death
Date: 2008-07-08 01:56:27

Amatayo said one of the best things ever. I never delete or throw away anything i've ever written, one day i may look at it and see the diamond it is among the rocks, and if not, hey, i know how i felt about something at one point in my life and i can work from there.

Title article: This World is Cold
Date: 2008-07-08 01:48:29

a short emotional piece full of disdain for class segregation with a hopeless undertone that screams for someone to blame other than the speaker. how i felt it anyway, like how a critic feels about a painting, how you use words lets people know how you think.

Title article: Shallow Vagueness
Date: 2008-07-08 01:40:45

you seem to hide and hint about and around a love long lost. Was it free will or fate that caused minds to divide? excellently written and thought out

Title article: Wiggedy Wack
Date: 2008-07-08 01:28:36

words roll off your tongue like a Midwestern tornado can spit out debris. Random yet controlled, chaotic and yet also scripted. If aussie hip hop is all that, ill expect it on my mtv.

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07/08/2008 02:22:59	Re:Does anyone write in long hand anymore?	Off-Topic	461
07/08/2008 02:20:12	Re:What If?	Off-Topic	760
07/08/2008 02:04:43	Re:Does anyone write in long hand anymore?	Off-Topic	461

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Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 07/08/2008 10:11:03 what about them?
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 07/07/2008 17:14:54 Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/07/2008 17:21:17 She blew my mind, made me become the bad guy, she mad me silly, then i went crazy?
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 07/06/2008 18:09:22 the dictionary? jeeze, why couldnt you get a useful book, like Reading the Dictionary For Dummies?