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Last Online	09/05/2008
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About Myself:

Will they... Will they talk about me this way if I die, too? I was this and that. Using past tense, saying whatever they want? So this is what death is all about... ...Not for me. I won't have it!!!

Amidst the eternal waves of time
From a ripple of change shall the storm rise
Out of the abyss peer the eyes of a demon
Behold the Razgriz, its wings of black sheath
The demon soars through dark skies
Fear and death trail in its shadow beneath
Until men united wield a hallowed sabre
In final reckoning, the beast is slain
As the demon sleeps man turns on man
His blood and madness soon cover the earth
From the depths of despair awaken the Razgriz
Its black wings ablaze in majestic light

Focus. Control. Conviction. Resolve. A true ace lacks none of these attributes. Nothing can deter you from the task at hand except your own fears. This is your sky.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Sep 2, 2008	There Is No Me Without You	Romance	308
Aug 19, 2008	Darkening, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	261
Jul 15, 2008	Some Random Thoughts	Non-Fiction	134
Jul 2, 2008	A WoW Story, Chapter 3	Adventure	146
Jun 23, 2008	Darkening, Chapter 0	Miscellaneous Stories	167
Jun 19, 2008	What really happens in the wilderness.	Miscellaneous Stories	168
Jun 6, 2008	A WoW Story, Chapter 2	Adventure	178
May 22, 2008	A WoW Story, Chapter 1	Adventure	264
May 20, 2008	Without Her	Romance	242
May 20, 2008	The Three Little Pigs Pt. 4	Horror	248
May 12, 2008	The Three Little Pigs Pt3	Horror	176
May 12, 2008	The Three Little Pigs Pt2	Horror	169
May 9, 2008	Three Little Pigs Pt. 1	Horror	171
May 8, 2008	Three Little Pigs (Prologue)	Horror	261
Apr 29, 2008	Prelude to a wow story, Chapter 0	Adventure	310

Comments

Title article: crazytyme
Date: 2008-08-21 16:02:40

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A look into the mind of a psychopathic killer. This is indeed something different at first I thought it was one of max booths novels because of all of the curse words, but then I realized it wasn’t and it moved a bit slow and it was over saturated with details.

But it told a good story in the end.

Keep up the good work.

Title article: The Butcher of Barrios
Date: 2008-08-21 14:47:45

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Hmm, once again you have me hooked.

I say young sir that you are indeed an excellent writer.

Perhaps one day you will become a great writer like me. (Hilarious joke I know)

Perhaps I should get your autograph now before it is too late.

Great job. Keep it up.

Title article: i could have loved no more!
Date: 2008-08-21 14:01:01

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I’m pretty glad that this did not have a messed up ending, I know this is coming from me, but yeah I thought that there could have been a few spaces between a few lines to make it a bit easier on the eyes but other than that I didn’t find anything wrong with it. It was appropriately descriptive and after all it was well written.

Keep up the good work.

Title article: bottled UP
Date: 2008-08-21 13:52:19

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Normally something like this would mess with my eyes but because the words flowed together easily it didn’t. I found the format actually quite clever.

Good job on the poem, keep up the great work, I hope to see more formatted like this from you in the future.

Title article: Before you land
Date: 2008-08-21 13:46:56

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This was great, one of the few poems I didn’t struggle to get though.

Poetry just isn’t my thing.

But!!! This held my attention.

And I’m sure that everyone has had the dream when they are falling and they wake up like OH CRAP I WAS FALLING!!!

Oh phew I’m safe.

Good job.

Title article: A Reccuring Past
Date: 2008-08-21 13:38:38

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Decent story.

I think you can expand on this first story and make a larger story out of it.

You caught the readers’ attention within the first few sections and held it.

It was formatted so that it was not difficult to read that is a bonus in my book.

Well done.

Title article: Punishment
Date: 2008-08-21 12:51:22

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You have a certain way of immersing the reader in the story that only a few authors are able to do.

You did not drown the reader in details that did not matter, but you did not leave the details out.

This was a excellent story.

and it deserves nothing less than 6 out of 5 but i cannot give it a 6 so a 5 must do for now.

Title article: They live amongst us
Date: 2008-08-21 12:36:00

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I thought this story was pretty good, it went a bit slow around the end but then again what can I expect with him standing in a corner for so long. A couple of the conversations could use some work but it’s not that big of a deal.

Keep up the good work.

Title article: The Demented Quiet One
Date: 2008-08-21 11:42:39

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I am not one for poetry, but I try to judge it from an unbiased opinion.

This one was decent, it told a story, but unfortunately I am not that great with poetry so I most likely missed the point, but I do like the Psycho killer feel of it.

I look foreword to my next attempt of reading your work.

Title article: "The Lesson"
Date: 2008-08-21 10:53:27

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It was a decent format, easy to read. Well written, it had a bit too much on the details for me.

Perhaps its just me but the whole butt rape thing is not that great of a topic, I’m sure you could have gotten the same point across with a different pivot point.

This has the potential to be something more if you cut back on some of the details and only referred to the rape, using that as a driving point for the main character in the next part, perhaps reveal what happened to him and why he would get his revenge on the two people.

Just some ideas.

and chaabuk you post the exact same review one more time and i'll report you for abuse of the credit system

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Jessie Masoner (Behind_the_Mask)'s connections

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Name	Entry
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 08/12/2008 08:15:16 Didja forget about WoW 4 and What Really Happens in the Wilderness 2? Come on, Slacker
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) a wasteland	Created On: 06/12/2008 14:08:16 dude ... V for Vendetta fucking rules!
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 06/11/2008 12:53:33 Wow, You Got Some Weird Pictures out of nowhere, next you will have a pic of a flying bear, or a talking beer, a bullet flying through a chest, a skeleton not put to rest, just remember to say Fuck You to the rest...
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 05/07/2008 14:41:58 Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 05/07/2008 14:42:47 The story of yours that i read was really good. You also leave some really good comment on my stories. Thank you.