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Jessie Masoner (Behind_the_Mask)
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About Myself: Will they... Will they talk about me this way if I die, too? I was this and that. Using past tense, saying whatever they want? So this is what death is all about... ...Not for me. I won't have it!!!


Amidst the eternal waves of time
From a ripple of change shall the storm rise
Out of the abyss peer the eyes of a demon
Behold the Razgriz, its wings of black sheath
The demon soars through dark skies
Fear and death trail in its shadow beneath
Until men united wield a hallowed sabre
In final reckoning, the beast is slain
As the demon sleeps man turns on man
His blood and madness soon cover the earth
From the depths of despair awaken the Razgriz
Its black wings ablaze in majestic light

Focus. Control. Conviction. Resolve. A true ace lacks none of these attributes. Nothing can deter you from the task at hand except your own fears. This is your sky.

Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Aug 19, 2008Darkening, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 208
Jul 15, 2008Some Random ThoughtsNon-Fiction 116
Jul 2, 2008A WoW Story, Chapter 3Adventure 140
Jun 23, 2008Darkening, Chapter 0Miscellaneous Stories 153
Jun 19, 2008What really happens in the wilderness.Miscellaneous Stories 151
Jun 6, 2008A WoW Story, Chapter 2Adventure 175
May 22, 2008A WoW Story, Chapter 1Adventure 261
May 20, 2008Without HerRomance 233
May 20, 2008The Three Little Pigs Pt. 4Horror 232
May 12, 2008The Three Little Pigs Pt3Horror 169
May 12, 2008The Three Little Pigs Pt2Horror 160
May 9, 2008Three Little Pigs Pt. 1Horror 162
May 8, 2008Three Little Pigs (Prologue)Horror 253
Apr 29, 2008Prelude to a wow story, Chapter 0Adventure 303

Comments

Title article: Him
Date: 2008-08-20 14:29:37
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I think this is a great start. 
 
But, you can add it later or earlier but in my opinion it needs to be added. A bit more information about the DEP it seems that it will be a big topic of the entire story and as the reader having such a large pivot point and not knowing anything about it really take away from the story. Some additional background information can be helpful but it may not be necessary this early on. 
 
This has the makings of a great Science Fiction Mystery. 
 
Perhaps you can make a tangential story from a different character if this one is going to take place from one point of view that way if we read the two we can get information that was left out of the first one. That way you can have a series going about this. 
 
Just thought I’d give some thoughts on the matter.

Title article: DOLL.
Date: 2008-08-20 14:02:20
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I too thought it was going to be another story about a doll coming to life and killing everyone, but I have to say that what the doll was witness to was far worse that murder. 
 
I have to agree with Phil about the layout, the single paragraph style made it a bit difficult to read at first but I soon forgot about it and was consumed by the story. 
 
Very well done. 
Keep up the great work.

Title article: VIDEOTHERAPY
Date: 2008-08-20 13:46:12
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I liked it. 
 
I found the dialogue between X and Y to be hilarious, not what they were saying but how they were saying it. (If that makes any sense) 
 
It was presented in an intelligent fashion, when writing I find it difficult to even sound credible. But the entire thing was well done. 
 
Great work!

Title article: in your eyes *short*
Date: 2008-08-20 13:20:00
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Hmmm, I wonder? 
 
I don't really know what to think about this one. 
 
As a poem its rhyming scheme is decent. 
 
But as something that is trying to convey a message it is unclear. 
 
perhaps the message is for you to understand. 
 
oh well. 
 
Decent job.

Title article: Orcs
Date: 2008-08-20 13:15:45
hmmm
Unless i'm mistaken each side was refereing to the other as orcs. 
 
oh well. 
 
It was a great story either way. 
 
Not too descriptive but not too bland. 
 
I think it ended properly but i'd also like to see more of it. 
 
great job

Title article: Going Home
Date: 2008-08-20 12:54:09
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Loved it, 
 
The entire story was well written and it immersed you into it. 
 
Just flat out brilliant, there aren’t many non-zombie / horror stories that I say are brilliant but this is most defiantly with out a doubt one of the best stories I’ve read in a while.

Title article: The Necromancer
Date: 2008-08-20 12:25:55
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It was a decent story I believe it ended too soon, but it was straight and to the point and ended where in reality it would have ended.  
 
You were descriptive enough to give the necessary details and at the same time you didn’t drown the reader in details. 
 
It’s a good look at how some indigenous peoples of far off places (not that many now) may look at what we think is common practice. 
 
Good work.

Title article: The Necromancer
Date: 2008-08-20 12:25:50
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It was a decent story I believe it ended too soon, but it was straight and to the point and ended where in reality it would have ended.  
 
You were descriptive enough to give the necessary details and at the same time you didn’t drown the reader in details. 
 
It’s a good look at how some indigenous peoples of far off places (not that many now) may look at what we think is common practice. 
 
Good work.

Title article: Suburban Hell
Date: 2008-08-20 12:06:00
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Hmmm, 
 
I loved it; at first I was like what does Max have planned with this one? As it went along I was so hooked that I forgot that you a one demented son of a, person. The ending was the icing on the cake for me. If you decide to write more on this one I would definitely read it. 
 
Keep up the great work. 
 
 
PS. The gun with the bang flag was hilarious. I’d watch this show.

Title article: Darkening, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-08-19 18:38:48
@Darrin!or who ever
Its a spiritual sequel to my story Darkening.

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Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 08/12/2008 08:15:16
Didja forget about WoW 4 and What Really Happens in the Wilderness 2?

Come on, Slacker

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

a wasteland
 Created On: 06/12/2008 14:08:16
dude ...

V for Vendetta fucking rules!
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 06/11/2008 12:53:33
Wow, You Got Some Weird Pictures out of nowhere,
next you will have a pic of a flying bear,
or a talking beer,

a bullet flying through a chest,
a skeleton not put to rest,
just remember to say Fuck You to the rest...
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 05/07/2008 14:41:58
Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 05/07/2008 14:42:47
The story of yours that i read was really good. You also leave some really good comment on my stories. Thank you.

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