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Member Since	04/21/2008
Last Online	08/27/2008
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About Myself:

Unusual, Unpredictable and a little over the edge, etc...(the list could go on forever!)

I have four favorite authors who I aspire to be like. Tolkien, Lewis, Peretti, Dekker.

I wish to publish at least one book, if not more. This website will help me develop my talent. I LOVE feedback about how I am doing! Be it wonderful or horrible.

I am a Christian.

And just for the sake of quoting something! (I love quotes, by the way.)

"As our enemies have found we can reason like men, so now let us show them we can fight like men also." - Thomas Jefferson

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Jun 12, 2008	A Bitter Young Woman	Poetry	103
Apr 22, 2008	A Man to be Admired	Non-Fiction	185
May 12, 2008	Depression	Poetry	122
May 12, 2008	Epitome of Hurt	Poetry	117
Apr 22, 2008	Filippino Oceans	Poetry	155
May 12, 2008	I Feel Like Writing a Poem	Poetry	152
Apr 21, 2008	The Die Is Cast, Chapter 1	Adventure	220
Apr 22, 2008	The Die is Cast, Chapter 2	Adventure	210
May 11, 2008	The Die Is Cast, Chapter 3	Adventure	149
May 12, 2008	The Die is Cast, Chapter 4	Adventure	141
May 13, 2008	The Die is Cast, Chapter 5	Adventure	141
May 13, 2008	The Die is Cast, Chapter 6	Adventure	129
Jun 10, 2008	The Die is Cast, Chapter 7	Adventure	99
Aug 27, 2008	When No One Else Is Near	Poetry	36

Comments

Total number of comments: 45

Title article: Total Forgivness
Date: 2008-06-17 09:42:46

This was an excellent poem Robyn. This would be a great song!

Title article: the Processor-Continued
Date: 2008-06-13 15:27:12

Again, great potential, but still some work needs to be done. You need to work on your punctuation. And get rid of all the ellipses. You need to put who is saying what, but do not always use the word 'said'. Use other words. Change it up. There needs to be variety. Also, a bit more detail would be nice.

Title article: the Processor-Chapter 1
Date: 2008-06-13 15:12:09

This story has great potential. It starts off great, but goes downhill from there. You randomly switch tenses and use too many "..."s. Better punctuation would be a nice improvement. Also, you seemed to rush the story. Too much information with too little detail all at once.

I know, I am a harsh critique.

If you clean a few things up, though, this could be a great story!

Title article: Holding on
Date: 2008-06-13 14:40:49

This is a poem with a lot of meaning, for me at least, because of some events in my life recently. I know not what you were thinking when you wrote this poem, but I know what it means to me.

It was short, but sweet and all too true. Good job.

Title article: Fallen
Date: 2008-06-13 09:43:11

I agree with June Eclipsis, it had a nice beat.

This poem was well written and heart-felt even if it was short. Often times short poems are better than long poems. It just all depends.

Anyways, you did an awesome job with this poem.

Oh, and I could relate to it.

Title article: I Can't Tell You
Date: 2008-06-13 09:08:24

It's hard for me to believe that you've become a poet and a very good one at that. This, as always, was well done all around. It was well written and you conveyed emotions well. Amazing job well done.

Title article: Old Habits Die Hard
Date: 2008-06-12 14:08:39

That was quite an interesting piece of work and one I liked.

Title article: Show me...
Date: 2008-06-12 07:52:16

This was OK for your first, well second, poem that I've ever read of yours.

Title article: The Lamppost
Date: 2008-06-12 07:08:38

Pardon the double posting, but I just realized that your name and the name in the story were the same. Was this story a personal experience?

Title article: The Lamppost
Date: 2008-06-12 07:07:37

That was simply amazing. I felt like I walked into the story and was there for a short while.

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Gwyn (Darkness.of.Mystery)'s connections

bronte (whendarknessrises)

August Blackwood (June Eclipsis)

Robyn Taylor (rtvols344)

Lily Qwert (novel.idea)

ßenji Øates (ßêñjì_Øã†èš)

Nate Stanford (nick711)

Charlotte Jewel (Schreiber)

Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)

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Lily Qwert (novel.idea)	Created On: 06/16/2008 05:54:02 Edited By Lily Qwert (novel.idea) On: 06/16/2008 05:54:31 First class!!!
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