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1961 The screams of agony cease to an...

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DateTitleCategoryHits
Apr 10, 2008Is this love?Miscellaneous Stories 136
Mar 27, 2008Better run through the jungleMiscellaneous Stories 140
Mar 25, 2008Sleepwalking, pills, and the thing in the fridgeHorror 256
Mar 24, 2008Little JohnnyMiscellaneous Stories 178
Mar 24, 2008The stolen carMiscellaneous Stories 200

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Total number of comments: 21

Title article: I'm The Pirate!
Date: 2008-04-15 07:06:17

Very strong story...But it seems weird that Michael should be in prison for something he did as a child?

Title article: Snap
Date: 2008-04-13 02:37:36

The ending was really powerful...The anguish of the narrator was well rendered through the whole story. I would like to know more about the bond between these two people, I understood it was strong and everything, but knowing more about it would bring even more emotion to the ending...And you also did a great job with the horrible little details concerning death, it was really creepy.

Title article: Is this love?
Date: 2008-04-11 09:31:35

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment :) 
I'm stuck with this story, but can't tell what is wrong with it, so I posted it to have opinions...So, what bothers you the most is the monologue and the constant use of 'I', thank you for pointing that out. 
And yes, this is not finished, but I don't know how to go on :(

Title article: Read The Book! - A.D.H.D Uncovered
Date: 2008-04-10 13:30:14

wow there are so many things going on...it's only a text but it's so full of energy. Feeling like that for real must be 100 times more frantic...

Title article: Moonscape Park (I)
Date: 2008-04-10 13:23:38

Very nice story overall...Ok there were a few cliches seen to often in war movies. But I think you did a good job with depicting this era, and the war seen from the inside...

Title article: Anamnesis
Date: 2008-03-30 10:50:58

I have no idea what 'Anamnesis' means, but this really describes schoolyears, and I guess it will still be meaningful when people will read this years after...this is full of nostalgia.

Title article: A Man's Last Dream
Date: 2008-03-30 10:44:58

Sadly this kind of stories happen...You created a really nice character, I could relate to him. The setting was interesting too, but I feel like you could have given more attention to the Indian elements...since you know about them, it shouldn't be hard for you, and it would make the reading even more enjoyable. 
I think you did a little mistake, or maybe it's me not understanding the meaning of this sentence:  
'The rain hid his tears and prevented his wife from knowing about his husband’s incompetence.' 
shouldn't it be 'her husband'?

Title article: Not Knowing
Date: 2008-03-29 12:55:42

You can really feel the confusion...I liked the repetition of 'I think I am'

Title article: She's Free And She Runs
Date: 2008-03-29 08:55:36

This was really good, especially the ending. The fact the whole thing is a dream brings a whole new meaning...like some sort of aspiration to freedom...I really liked this story!

Title article: Perfect Kitty-cat
Date: 2008-03-29 08:47:51

Good description of a cute kitty in the beginning :) 
I feel like this story is not finished...maybe you could add something about your relationship with this cat? It would be interesting to develop how it reacted to its new home, etc...

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