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Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Sep 3, 2008	Girls Just Wanna Have Fun Chapter Deuce 1/2	Romance	55
Jul 13, 2008	The Lord and The Pink Skunk 3 Chapter Nuevo Revelations	Adventure	293
Jul 4, 2008	Girls Just Wanna have fun	Non-Fiction	199
Jun 25, 2008	The exotic tales of a pink skunk and a cucumber, Chapter 76	Romance	331
Jun 18, 2008	A Pink Skunk and His Lord, Chapter 36	Adventure	152
Jun 15, 2008	The Moon is My Pet and My Lover	Mystery	186
Apr 25, 2008	Adventures of Undead Daddy	Adventure	281
Apr 24, 2008	A Brazen Shame	Miscellaneous Stories	243
Apr 10, 2008	The Birth and Death of a Gang(ster)(s)	Romance	430
Apr 7, 2008	The Subway Angel	Science Fiction	254
Mar 20, 2008	Panda Jesus: Or How Jesus Got His Panda Back	Poetry	268
Mar 20, 2008	Chapter 5 Rocks	Mystery	288

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Title article: THE SHADOW OF THE FALLEN, Chapter 0
Date: 2008-07-07 18:56:20

AY just listen to what im saying
so alright and hey who is this hunter guy.. is he actually gabrial and this is why hes getting these powers? ok so about the flaccid ending.. he prayed and a lightning bolt shot from the sky and hit him on the head and he was knocked out.. cmon now.. i thought this was supposed to be thee god, creator of heaven and earth, not pussy bitch god, or pussywillow or sandy vagina god.. when the bolt hit him you should of just added one of those 'bonk on the head' sound effects like in the three stooges.. you should of atleast had him knocked in the air a little bit.. and if you felt spry you could of had his shoes end up in some random freezer in a basement with some sluts panties tucked into them (true story), and therres smoke coming from them of course.. thatll convey what kind of power were dealing with here.. see what im saying? okay well.. i guess that concludes the longest comment in life.. sorry i was having fun.. but you know what.. dont change anything.. and if this is intended im

Title article: THE SHADOW OF THE FALLEN, Chapter 0
Date: 2008-07-07 18:24:47

the trick
to getting super powers is just asking god.. but the catch is you gotta ask twice.. o and thats another thing.. after i tripped and stumbled over the first line.. thats not good.. i felt like a runner hwo just stumbled and tripped right after the gun shot.. i just wasnt expecting it.. i thought someone was saying.. first of all, but then i was thought now that couldnt be right.. the first war ever fought.. might be smoother.. but hey.. im not telling you how to do your job.. so anyway.. back to the praying to god thing... now the ending was just as limp as.. well nvm.. like, i assume that was a lightnbing bolt from zeus, or god, or whoever, not just an ironic.. well i guess its not really ironic.. unless hes dead.. you know like.. he prayed to god and alightning bolt striked him.. like if you were walking by you might think.. dang god really did give him poweers.. but then you find out hes just dead.. wow, talk about a case of the mondays.. sorry im babbling.. so okay some lightning bo

Title article: THE SHADOW OF THE FALLEN, Chapter 0
Date: 2008-07-07 18:09:39

ok it went like
or it was the part where... the kid was running out side.. oh and i kept getting confused with all the characters names.. you just were like fuck it.. im throwin in 7 main characters, three deamons, a vampire and a grandma.. and all of them have the same name by coincidence.. dang i spelled that right? ok anyway, i know you didnt do taht but thats how i felt.. ok so like the part where the kid runs out of the hose after the fight... it said like.. nobody followed him, thank god... but his house is on fire and his family brutally murdered by a vampire and a werwof.. yea, thank god.. and if that just happend to me.. id probably be to busy running and screaming to sit down adn ask god for super powers.. nother thing that made me chuckle.. he neals and prays for powers.. nothing happens.. he lowers his head.. haha like he just asked his parents for ice cream and they were like.. no. and he whimpers and lowers his head and walks away... but then hey.. he got it the second time.. so i guess.

Title article: THE SHADOW OF THE FALLEN, Chapter 0
Date: 2008-07-07 17:47:33

damn
that must be the most naive family in life...'oh hello family... oh i cant come in unless you invite me in.. yea im kinda ocd like that... oh and i hope wer not having garlic, or sign of the cross shaped fish sticks... or anythin that might stab me in the heart.. or anything that would offend a vampire for that matter... not saying i am one.. you know its just the ocd.. yea... oh and im allergic to koolaid.. do you have any blood? oh sure we do mr. salesman.. let me go fetch our cat...! im pretty sure i would of stabbed him in teh heart with a widdled stake oncde he said he was allergic to garlic... but thats just me.. but yea.. i can see this as a B movie id watch over and over... and if it had steven seagal in it id probably climax.. and yea other thanwhats already been said... but if thats not what you were looking for try dressing it up a little.. alto of its flat and corny.. like say.. at the end.. i chuckled.. it went like...

Title article: Consumer
Date: 2008-07-06 23:59:08

nvm
you already said you were... thats what the poem was right? my bizzad

Title article: Consumer
Date: 2008-07-06 23:57:22

hey man
who are you talking about, man... the consumer.. which we all are.... unless cregg here has a farm where he grows all his food, and raises cattle churns his own butter and builds computers from wood and stone, then hes not... or are you talking about big business like walmart... cause theyre not the consumer, man, you are, man...

Title article: sugar
Date: 2008-07-06 00:16:08

ohhh
sugar sugar.. dan anana naa.. oh honey honay.. you are myy canddaaay girll.. and i.. keep.. loving... you? but you know that was good... i really enjoyed it.

Title article: Testing My Pencil
Date: 2008-07-05 23:34:29

oh
thats one sexy pencil... i want one like that... and i just know thats what pencils talk about when were not around... dang man... you got a pencil friend

Title article: Kisha's Adventure, Chapter 7
Date: 2008-07-05 23:15:25

adventure
ayy..kisha had a little bit too much adventure has she? That WAS a pretty big "adventure," ay kisha.. enough adventure to last your life time ay haha little squirt.. i like your metaphor

Title article: I'm Just Me
Date: 2008-07-05 23:11:45

what in the
hell are you talking about lady?? people are staring at her and then theyre not staring at her, then shes crazy now shes not crazy and shes normal.. what in the gadzooks

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