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Jamie Steatham (Lord Pinkington)
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Last Online 08/29/2008
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Total number of comments: 157

Title article: The End
Date: 2008-08-22 11:28:28

I see the influx of new reviewers are not gettin smarter. 
 
Mick, just make this a bit longer and show us more of the characters and this will be dandy. 
I've read your other stories and they were great so i'm sure you can pull this off too.

Title article: HENPECKED HUSBAND
Date: 2008-08-22 11:23:24

When Bubble went Kaput 
Our rejoices ended with a cut 
Out of the flames came Chaabuk 
which left me with a nervous tut 
and a stabbing pain in my gut

Title article: WO(W)NDERFUL WIFE
Date: 2008-08-22 05:36:28

I knew a girl called Bubble 
 
That always got in trouble 
 
her profiles always doubled 
 
those comments ending with a mumble 
 
her rhymes sounded like a rumble 
 
from a Klingon that had a tumble 
 
in one of her poetic fumbles 
 
So forgive me for this grumble 
 
But I wish I could burst her bubble

Title article: Frustration
Date: 2008-07-13 14:12:53

This is exactly how I felt when my wife told me we were having twins. 
 
To be honest really jelous of your poetry.I tried myself but I crashed and burned.

Title article: The Letter
Date: 2008-07-13 14:07:06

Xena wrote blah, blah , blah. 
This is coming from the joker that wrote about a skunk. 
 
Your story allmine was written with elegance and it was well written.As always you aproached a difficult subject and pulled it off perfectly.Good job.

Title article: SHADOW OF THE FALLEN, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-07-11 00:54:29

Watch your grammar and layout.Story was'nt bad.Very keen to see where this is going.But it could be so much better if you listened to us in chapter 0.

Title article: Closer Raisa; the beginning, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-07-10 00:31:20

Gotta agree with the Zp and Kasi.You gotta give the reader something to grab their attention so they go to chapter 2.This has nothing.The voice does'nt sound as if spoken by an adult with education.Sounds as if wroten by a kid.

Title article: Death (thought I'd have a go)
Date: 2008-07-10 00:25:00

I like how the "death" thing has caight on with you poets.Good idea, nice too see different perspectives.Dirkin, you never fail to dissinpoint.Well done.

Title article: a friend to zombies
Date: 2008-07-10 00:22:31

Ienjoyef the first half then it went stupid.Did'nt enjoy it.The only goood thing was the zombie picture.

Title article: I'm Just Me
Date: 2008-07-08 13:29:01

I read some comment advising you to try some other style of writing.If you love poetry do not give in.Just do what every one here does.Keep writing and practicing.Agree with most comments.Does need work but just keep working at it.

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Amie Kerlin (lemon)

 Created On: 07/12/2008 14:47:19
so Flossy...if that's even your real name . Its just me the stalker coming to stalk you some more.. I realize I've fallen behind on my stalking lately..hmm I wonder how many more times I can say stalker in this post? God I'm bored

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Amie Kerlin (lemon)

inside your head
 Created On: 06/30/2008 17:23:17
you mean you've never been stalked before? I find that hard to believe
Feedback from Jamie Steatham (Lord Pinkington): Normally I'm the stalker.But I cant talk about that.It's still with the courts to decide.
Amie Kerlin (lemon)

under the mud and mire, trying to claw my way out.
 Created On: 06/28/2008 14:35:29
now I'm invading your guestbook. mwahaha! where are your stories? Thanks for the comments you left on my stories
Feedback from Jamie Steatham (Lord Pinkington): I have my own stalker.Cool!!

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