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John Talleos (jtalos)
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Member Since 03/14/2008
Last Online 10/06/2008
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Website/Blog: spectatorfiction.blogspot.com
About Myself: Realtor living in Connecticut. Started a short story blog under the name Patrick Kern.

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DateTitleCategoryHits
Aug 31, 2008A Love Not ThereRomance 285
May 11, 2008Playing God With DonnaScience Fiction 240
Apr 19, 2008Future CareScience Fiction 216
Jul 11, 2008Hit The SpotHorror 139
Aug 9, 2008The IntersectionMiscellaneous Stories 133
Mar 14, 2008The Years Of BrothersMiscellaneous Stories 198

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Total number of comments: 8

Title article: A Love Not There
Date: 2008-08-31 17:59:57

To resistanceisfreedom, thanks for the compliment. This doesn't mirror anything I've been through, of course, but the elements of false hope and delusional love I've seen in different situations. As for Pilgrim I will re-edit save for the part you mentioned. Dave was writing a letter and so having gramma errors are common. After all it was a letter to Karen and not a piece for Storisville. Thanks for the compliment and to both for reading this

Title article: WO(W)NDERFUL WIFE
Date: 2008-08-31 13:19:25

The mark of a good poem, in my opinion ought to leave the reader thinking that they wished they had written it, or had the ability to write it. I didn't get this impression from your poem

Title article: HENPECKED HUSBAND
Date: 2008-08-31 13:16:12

Did you enter an rhyme with x contest?

Title article: Unnerving Tranquility
Date: 2008-08-31 13:12:06

The word "negativity" I don't think belongs in the mix of a poem.  
And then I have a hard time with the idea of a killer having an eloquent sense of beauty and love.  
And then does he really have to think about what to do about a body floating in a pool, its done, nothing left to do.

Title article: Your Big Day
Date: 2008-08-09 00:33:34

This ought to be a poem. In fact it ought to be a very bad poem.

Title article: 6 Minutes Until tomorrow
Date: 2008-08-09 00:17:46

What your trying to do here might have been best served in a poem.

Title article: Above It All
Date: 2008-07-11 20:39:44
Above it all?
Perhaps the Swaggerts and the Bakers of the world are no different in putting their morality  
"above it all" then your own immorality. Your both different sides of the same above it all coin.

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