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DateTitleCategoryHits
Jul 22, 2008Flowers on the WallPoetry 182
Jun 14, 2008Escaping the WallsPoetry 124
May 3, 2008Life is GrandPoetry 124
Feb 23, 2008UmbrellaMiscellaneous Stories 259
Jan 31, 2008DripPoetry 209
Jan 25, 2008UnspokenPoetry 267
Apr 7, 2007DrunkMiscellaneous Stories 1663

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Title article: The Fall of Tone & The Beast of Vag
Date: 2008-06-24 19:52:41

needless cursing was a turn-off. I didn't even bother reading past the second paragraph. I'm sure you could have expanded your vocabulary a little more...

Title article: Paradox 102
Date: 2008-06-24 19:48:22

I really enjoyed this story. Great job keeping me hooked, without any predictable plot twists. Nice job using archetypes too :)

Title article: Dear Dad
Date: 2008-06-18 23:52:48
kinda tearing up
Oh wow. Besides opposite gender & parent, I can really, really connect with this. This is really from the heart, and it touches mine real close to home. Good job, you made me almost cry ;)

Title article: The locked door Ch 2
Date: 2008-06-18 18:35:33
Better!
Now THIS caught my attention! Great job; I can't wait for more :)

Title article: The deer's have eyez (Poorly written grammar story), Chapter 1
Date: 2008-06-17 12:02:01
Disgusting
There are very few things I hate in life. One of those is intentionally thwarting the efforts of someone how actually tries. Just as stickfigure said, you most likely took attention away from an honest attempt at writing. The fact that you included "Poorly written grammar story" in the title tells me this was indeed intentional. This is why there used to be submission screening.

Title article: The locked door/ intro
Date: 2008-06-16 08:25:10
What's this about?
Honestly, it takes more than a door to grab my attention. This seemed like maybe a half of an intro, or even a fourth, but definitely not a full introduction. A few structural quirks, a few agreement problems, and the almost complete lack of a plot leave me to say this is 2/5. But I'll definitely read the actual story this goes with when it comes out :)

Title article: Deliverance
Date: 2008-06-16 08:18:53
So-so
I'm not quite sure what happened, but I gather God had something to do with it. The story - and I mean the writing - really didn't flow as well as I would have liked, which made it a bit hard to read at times. Also it seemed kinda cliché, with the Chevy-and-Diner scene and how everyone was so quick to kill themselves. But the story wasn't bad by any of my standards, so 3/5 :)

Title article: The Fool
Date: 2008-06-14 12:03:24
great
I really liked this. I don't know what it's really about, but it's good. Also, one question: What were you on and where can I get some? :P

Title article: I Can See Clearly
Date: 2008-05-04 11:02:28
nice
This is really nice. For me, the first few lines seemed random, just collections of thoughts. But at the end, they were all wrapped into one package, and I loved it! 5/5 
 
 
 
Though, do pick a darker color next time ;)

Title article: Life is Grand
Date: 2008-05-04 10:57:56

thanks so much!

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