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About Myself:

Dear Whom-ever-the-heck, Esq.

Ok, so let me start off by stating that I hate these 'All About Me!' thingummys.

I never know what to write...and I have a bad habit of rambling in them.

I love stories though. I'm more often than not reading something than doing anything else. I dunno how great I am at writing them; I hold my own I guess.

The things I post here are mostly me entertaining myself and are written solely for the purpose of getting the pictures in my head out.

I welcome criticism despite that, good or bad. I can't promise it will make me change anything if you comment; I'm lazy that way. But I do warn any that if I don't think I fully understand what is being critiqued, it's possible I'll message you for clarification.

Gory little details are my bread and butter.

So anyways, I look forward to reading some awesome stuff and possibly getting some different insight for my own stories.

<3,
UrzTrly

P.S. Also, naturally 'Seshat' is a handle; I'm neither Egyptian nor a goddess. But if you're bored enough & want to know more useless crap about me, including my real name, feel free to message me.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
May 1, 2008	Revenge of the Dirty Limericks	Poetry	176
Mar 10, 2008	Dirty Limericks	Poetry	589
Mar 10, 2008	The Life and Times of Ms. So-and-so	Non-Fiction	212
Mar 9, 2008	Somewhere Road	Miscellaneous Stories	241
Mar 9, 2008	One Hundred Degrees Celsius	Miscellaneous Stories	209
Mar 9, 2008	The Devil’s Kitchen	Humor	333
Mar 9, 2008	Pandora Psyche	Miscellaneous Stories	223
Mar 9, 2008	Low-Cal Diet	Miscellaneous Stories	232
Mar 9, 2008	The Man in the Moon	Miscellaneous Stories	290

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Title article: One Hundred Degrees Celsius
Date: 2008-03-10 14:56:12

No, no...it WAS kinda half assed.
This was actually done with a word limit...no more than 500 words, I think.

So I had trouble getting everything out in order to tell it how I wanted. Which undoubtedly made it a bit sparse. Maybe I could have made him do someting more craypants at the end?

I tried to focus on showing tension & angst w/out using Nathaniel himself. (At least until the end) I saw him as a kind of person who would not show much emotion...possibley as a result of his parents' domineering style of child rearing.

I believe he thinks he is misunderstood, which may be the case in part. But he's still a spoiled rich brat though.

Just a misunderstood one.

He IS a hack at art however, but instead of doing it because he loves it, he does it because its something he can hang over his parents' heads like a snobbish bully...he believes it makes him better, higher than them.

Yes, I never thought about his little tantrum being like performance art! Too funny!

Ok...I'm done rambling now....thanks for the comment

Title article: Somewhere Road
Date: 2008-03-09 23:12:16

Thanks
She's been stalking me for a while now.

Title article: One Hundred Degrees Celsius
Date: 2008-03-09 23:10:40

Heh...
Thanks, and sorry I keep dogging all your comments.

In my field I've gotten used to critique...of the pretty tough, no holds barred variety. Its a sick habit now to want to know just exactly how and why I screw up.

So, even though I might come across as a comment rabid terrier...I appreciate your critique.

Title article: The Devil’s Kitchen
Date: 2008-03-09 22:57:58

Ah!
I think I see the problem now. I never intended to kill off my character...or his thingy. I was just being mean...and I hate to admit a part of me found it extremely funny.

I guess Cookie's comment about losing her apprentices seemed more final than I had intended...he's only passed out though, don't worry.

I have a nasty habit of trying to fool readers and throwing abrupt twists into my stories. I guess this one back fired on me.

Can't win 'em all, I guess. But thanks for reading & commenting!

Title article: One Hundred Degrees Celsius
Date: 2008-03-09 22:43:26

well, well, body snatcher tarhead
strikes again...

i think (tarhead that is) it was quirky...

Title article: Somewhere Road
Date: 2008-03-09 22:39:27

I just want to say....
This is a stoopid, last minute title....sorry bout that. XD

Title article: One Hundred Degrees Celsius
Date: 2008-03-09 22:37:59

Yes, I'm sneaky that way....
I seem to like to play tricks on readers by lulling them into a false sense of compliancy (i.e. being boring as hell, apparently). Then when they least expect it...goosing them in the ass! >)

Oh well, I'm glad you didn't give up on it & thanks for commenting!

Title article: The Devil’s Kitchen
Date: 2008-03-09 22:32:19

Er...
Is that a good 'i dunno' or a bad one? XD

Title article: The Man in the Moon
Date: 2008-03-09 22:09:43

Wonderful Imagination?
Thank you, that is a lovely complement. Glad you liked it!

Title article: Panties: A Romance Ruined
Date: 2008-03-09 21:28:07

Dirty Limmericks anyone?
My first thoughts:

a) Irreverent

b) Humorous

c) OhgodMEN! *eye roll*

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