There Is Only One Star, Chapter 4

Somewhere around six months after Katie left, a year...

gone was the girl

gone was the girl once innocent of love, heartaches...
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About Myself: I write random things that come to me when I least expect them.
I'm not a dark person, but for whatever reason a lot of my writing is dark. Leave me comments so that I can improve-- If we don't get criticized, we can't grow. :)

Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Aug 12, 2008The Story of a Survivor, Chapter 3Miscellaneous Stories 74
Aug 10, 2008The Story of a Survivor, Chapter 2Miscellaneous Stories 111
Aug 6, 2008The Story of a Survivor, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 277
Aug 3, 2008Walking Along the ShorePoetry 112
Jul 30, 2008Stranded at SeaMiscellaneous Stories 136
Jul 26, 2008The Mexican Lasagna IncidentHumor 199
Jul 21, 2008All Liquid DietMiscellaneous Stories 223
Jul 20, 2008The PastPoetry 99
Jul 20, 2008Once AgainPoetry 103
Jul 16, 2008On The MendPoetry 109
Jul 13, 2008This Internal PoisonPoetry 164
Jul 13, 2008The OnePoetry 175
Jul 12, 2008A Bad DayPoetry 135
Jul 11, 2008The Reluctant LoverMiscellaneous Stories 366
Jul 10, 2008BlindPoetry 123
Jul 9, 2008Life's Little GamesPoetry 117
Jul 9, 2008Insanity of the SanePoetry 121
Jul 3, 2008The ArticleMiscellaneous Stories 293
Jul 2, 2008No PressuresPoetry 140
Jul 1, 2008A Mom's View of SummerHumor 175
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Lemon Juice and PoetryAug 2, 2008

Comments

Total number of comments: 745

Title article: The Jesus Caravan
Date: 2008-08-21 17:15:18

i thought it was an interesting story. i liked the reaction you wrote to finding the person.  
 
I agree with the comments about the ending. It was abrupt. I hope you are going to expand this a little more.

Title article: He swoops, he scores
Date: 2008-08-21 16:43:08

haha! that was funny. here I was thinking it was going to be about an eagle going for fish or something, but it was about a gull swiping a kids lunch. Those things are real bastards. when at sea world beware of them when your 3 year old has fish to feed the dolphins. :S

Title article: Before you land
Date: 2008-08-21 13:12:11

That was an interesting poem. I liked your transition to each line. I can honestly say i've had dreams like these lol 
Very nifty idea indeed. keep it coming. =]

Title article: The Grey Dawn
Date: 2008-08-21 12:59:33

Good poem. This had the feeling of hopelessness and sorrow. Very well conveyed. 
 
of course i noticed the spelling error of 'wale'. it should be wail =]

Title article: The Demented Quiet One
Date: 2008-08-21 12:57:38

Scary. This is horror the way I like it... the everyday average person that has deep dark murderous secrets.  
I saw this as someone who was trying to love the unlovable and trying to 'fix' this person's neurosis.  
 
great job

Title article: To Bleed, Chapter 10
Date: 2008-08-21 12:53:20

Seriously. the mom needs to be smacked on the head several times with a blunt object.  
 
Ok now that THATS out of the way, I'm glad you're back and continuing with this story. Man, What is the mom THINKING? one daughter killed herself and the other is seriously messed up and she's DATING? wow. You did an excellent job writing the 'mommie dearest'

Title article: the disquiet fall
Date: 2008-08-21 12:47:19

I thought this was great. I liked the way it flowed and the imagery that was used here.  
'they all send the tree 
shaking,leaving 
pears to drip drop 
just a few' 
 
perfect. =]

Title article: The Kidnappers Journal, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-08-21 12:43:36

I think this was ok, but it WAS a bit TOO short maybe. maybe it would be better to make each chapter a little longer so that the reader gets more information each chapter instead of it being so choppy like it is.  
 
And by the way, its "I WON'T hurt you" not I WANT hurt you.. =]

Title article: Punishment
Date: 2008-08-21 12:36:46

I love this story. That would definitely be hell to know that you had every chance to know God in life, but you chose not to and now you relive that choice over and over and over again.

Title article: Nights Journey
Date: 2008-08-21 10:26:04

Crazy story. I liked it though, i guess its because i have a thing for crazy lol. 
 
anyway, this was a great piece as always Potter. I've yet to read anything of yours that i didnt like. =]

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Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

 Created On: 08/21/2008 15:41:25
Hahahahaha. I don't think BR plays that one anymore. Good song though.

Countries manufacture bombs and guns
to kill your brother for something he hasn't even done

I wish I was writing stuff like that in highschool. Most of my stuff was void of intellect and read like it was on a sugar high. But luckily now I've gotten out of that stint......

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

 Created On: 08/21/2008 14:48:23
Oh my God you put that on my profile!!! Quickly change the M to an R. We were talking about Retallica. *shifts eyes from side to side* Nobodies getting sued here.
Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

 Created On: 08/21/2008 14:28:34
Yeah their new stuff pisses me off. They used to be so good. Now they just need to stop making music.
Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

 Created On: 08/21/2008 13:16:12
What about Dominated Love Slave. Tre sings that great.
Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

 Created On: 08/21/2008 11:41:43
Hey thanks for dumping that assload of lyrics on my page. That's digital littering and someday if I have my way it'll be a crime. And you'll be fined $5. Muahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!!

But yeah that was a funny song. Haven't listened to it forever.
Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

 Created On: 08/19/2008 18:33:09
lol I bet you have!

But seriously. Those 16 year old kids aren't still harrassing you are they?
Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

 Created On: 08/19/2008 17:48:30
Never limp are my noodles. Strong and hard they are. Defeat you they will.
Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

 Created On: 08/19/2008 16:31:50
Your meat tenderizers, scare me they don't. Sharpening my noodles I have. Ready for blood they are.
Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

 Created On: 08/19/2008 11:37:43
You will be..........you will be...........

Afraid of ramen you will be. Drown in a giant bowl you will. Defeat me you will not. Surrender, unexceptable it is.

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

 Created On: 08/18/2008 03:20:53
Well that's still a good dish. Great for cleaning out your gums. But what? You don't think I have the technology to assemble noodle arms with grasping capabilities? I am far more advanced than your average ramen eater. So be warned, because they're coming for you...
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