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Amie Kerlin (lemon)
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Member Since 03/06/2008
Last Online 08/29/2008
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About Myself: I write random things that come to me when I least expect them.
I'm not a dark person, but for whatever reason a lot of my writing is dark. Leave me comments so that I can improve-- If we don't get criticized, we can't grow. :)

Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Aug 29, 2008A Lover's GardenPoetry 27
Aug 25, 2008Lemon: a HaikuPoetry 217
Aug 12, 2008The Story of a Survivor, Chapter 3Miscellaneous Stories 88
Aug 10, 2008The Story of a Survivor, Chapter 2Miscellaneous Stories 119
Aug 6, 2008The Story of a Survivor, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 289
Aug 3, 2008Walking Along the ShorePoetry 132
Jul 30, 2008Stranded at SeaMiscellaneous Stories 148
Jul 26, 2008The Mexican Lasagna IncidentHumor 211
Jul 21, 2008All Liquid DietMiscellaneous Stories 235
Jul 20, 2008The PastPoetry 109
Jul 20, 2008Once AgainPoetry 113
Jul 16, 2008On The MendPoetry 113
Jul 13, 2008This Internal PoisonPoetry 170
Jul 13, 2008The OnePoetry 184
Jul 12, 2008A Bad DayPoetry 142
Jul 11, 2008The Reluctant LoverMiscellaneous Stories 380
Jul 10, 2008BlindPoetry 127
Jul 9, 2008Life's Little GamesPoetry 120
Jul 9, 2008Insanity of the SanePoetry 123
Jul 3, 2008The ArticleMiscellaneous Stories 298
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Books

TitleDate
Lemon Juice and PoetryAug 2, 2008

Comments

Title article: Today
Date: 2008-06-26 13:44:23

that line looks a lot better now that you changed it to 'granted' instead of grant. =]

Title article: Help you smile
Date: 2008-06-26 13:31:33

It was short, but I think that just adds to its simplicity. I think if it were any longer it would ruing that easy feeling about it. Nice job =]

Title article: To Dig Myself Out
Date: 2008-06-26 13:28:42

I liked it. the structure was different, but it just had an different kind of flow to it. I think that unique-ness added to its sorrow. I give it a five. The point definitely gets made in my mind anyway. =]

Title article: The exotic tales of a pink skunk and a cucumber, Chapter 76
Date: 2008-06-26 12:20:22

Random, yet funny, with a hint of INSANITY. gotta love it. I have to say I felt sorry for the fish...lol I especially liked the ending line 'To be concucumbered..spurred flirt.. i have psychedelic prblems.. big bright LEMONS in the sky..no problem of mine' lol =]

Title article: Something Cat
Date: 2008-06-26 12:11:56

lol great story. I'm telling you man, you've hit the nail on the head with the way you described the cats just staring at you. I've got THREE and they DO that ALL THE TIME!! especially around *gulp* dinnertime :o|

Title article: Rachel
Date: 2008-06-26 11:59:31

OK! That was interesting. I think he handled that pretty well considering it was his WIFE dead on the floor over there covered in bruises. You did a good job but I did notice some spelling errors as well as some grammar issues: 'Why me? Like I don't have enough on.' I'm assuming you meant GOING on. just little things, I really liked the story though =]

Title article: Fantasies
Date: 2008-06-26 11:48:02

Well done. I liked the way you separated the dream from reality with one simple word 'Crash'. I thought the format really contributed to the poem too, because when you're describing dreams, the text seems to float off of the page, then after 'Crash' everything starts to go back to the norm. Wonderful Job! =]

Title article: Today
Date: 2008-06-26 11:44:38

I had a bit of trouble at first with the rhythm of it, but then it came easier. You did well with describing the hope then the crushing reality.  
Two things: 1)breathE not breath, and 2) It's inevitable, its GRANT? did you mean Grand? :o|

Title article: Death
Date: 2008-06-25 17:43:09

I liked it. Great job describing everything. My only suggestion would be to try not to start all/or most of your sentences with 'you'. To me, it makes it a more difficult read and makes the rythm stop and start. Great story though =]

Title article: A Love Never Meant To Be
Date: 2008-06-25 17:34:01

I thought this was great. there was a lot of emotion pouring out of every line. I agree about the formatting though, it did make it hard to know who was talking, but you already addressed that :] Also, there were a few times that it seemed to stop and start. maybe just fixing a few sentences would fix that. keep posting :]

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08/29/2008 12:28:14Re:PunishmentOff-Topic3093
08/29/2008 12:25:42Re:Proclaim Your RoyaltyOff-Topic232265
08/29/2008 12:22:49Re:Do You....Off-Topic712
08/29/2008 12:19:07Re:THATS IT!! I CALL ShenanigansOff-Topic2285
08/29/2008 12:15:13Re:How Do You?Off-Topic701
08/29/2008 12:13:29Re:Funny LyricsOff-Topic206
08/29/2008 11:58:30Re:Proclaim Your RoyaltyOff-Topic232265
08/29/2008 11:56:48Re:PunishmentOff-Topic3093
08/29/2008 11:53:02Re:Do You....Off-Topic712
08/29/2008 11:51:27Re:THATS IT!! I CALL ShenanigansOff-Topic2285

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OFFLINE Jessica S,A. (Forsaken)
OFFLINE Jamie Steatham (Lord Pinkington)
ONLINE Michelle Huff (allmine)
OFFLINE Matthew Daniel Carter (Pilgrim)
OFFLINE Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)
OFFLINE Billy (Vango)
ONLINE Philip Neale (philneale1952)
 
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Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

Created On: 08/28/2008 16:37:12

Hahahaha thanks for sharing that information with me lemon. I'll give share some back. I've used fruit. That's right fruit. I could smoke the shit out of your lemons.

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

Created On: 08/28/2008 11:45:25

Yeah........that's what I do with it too. Tabacco.......

Oh you kids.

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

Created On: 08/26/2008 16:38:18

A hooka huh? Gee what do you do with that?

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

Created On: 08/26/2008 11:38:34

I feel so terrible. You'd think having to work at 2 would give me plenty of time to sleep and heal right? That's so not the case here. I was up past 9A.M. at a friend's goodbye party. I just want to fall over and either die, or sleep for the rest of the day. I just thought I'd share my suffering. I miss my mattress......

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

Created On: 08/25/2008 08:20:08

7up and brandy hmmm? Sounds a little to highclass for this farmboy. Grey Goose is delicous. And expensive. Now I want it.

Yeah getting drunk with family is pretty good. We got our mom to throw up last x-mas. She only drinks a couple times a year so it was an accomplishment we were all proud of. I have a picture of it on my phone.

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

Created On: 08/25/2008 07:39:57

lol good line with the cake. I've never had the privelage of drinking with a navy man. I've gotten drunk with a corrections officer but he was a dick. He kept bragging about all the pain he had inflicted on people. That's a good piece for a story though. Hhhmmm......

Have you ever written a story while your drunk? I'm always like, "yeah this is awesome whooooo!!!" Then the next day I'm like, "Hhhmmmm......"

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

Created On: 08/25/2008 06:49:41

So when are you going to mail me some food lemon? I need to eat!!!

............and sleep. I got drunk last night, slept for 2 hours, and now I'm checking people out of the hotel. I'm pretty sure I'll be sober by the time I get off.

Then again I feel like death so maybe sobriety isn't what I need. Good thing this place is close to a gas station.

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

Created On: 08/22/2008 22:21:27

Well there's gonna be a freakers ball
Tonight at the freakers hall
And you know, you're invited one and all

Come on babies grease your lips
Grab your hats and swing your hips
Don't forget to bring your whips
We're going to the freakers ball

Blow your whistle and bang your gong
Roll up something to take along
It feels so good it must be wrong
We're freakin at the freakers ball

Where all the fags and the dykes they're boogyin' together
The leather freaks are dressed in all kinds of leather
The greatest of the sadists and the masochists too
Screaming "Please hit me, and I'll hit you"

The FBI are dancing with the junkies
All the straights, are swinging with the fogies
Across the floor and up the wall
We're freakin at the freakers ball
Yall, we're freakin at the freakers ball

Everybody's kissing each other
Brother with sister, son with mother
Smear my body up with butter
Take me to the freakers ball

Pass that roach please and pour the wine
I'll kiss yours if you'll kiss mine
I'm gonna boogie till i go blind
We're freakin at the freakers ball

White ones, black ones, yellow ones, red ones
Necrophiliacs looking for dead ones
The greatest of the sadist and the masochists too
Screaming "Please hit me, and I'll hit you"

Everybody's fallin' in batches
Pyromaniacs striking matches
I'm gonna itch me where it scratches
Freaking at the freakers ball

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

Created On: 08/22/2008 22:19:06

Puke has inspired many great stories. Use its power amie. But beware! For it might end up controlling you in the end. You must try to resist the vomits charm at all times! Otherwise........darkness awaits you.

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

Created On: 08/22/2008 21:46:29

Silly Max. Playing with his Kennedy Corpses.

No I haven't seen that commercial. But now I want to! Oh and by the way, my hair smells exactly how it looks. Excellent.

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