Love Crawls Down the Drain

I can't believe she broke up with me! After five years...

Her Magic Touch, Chapter 3

She doesn't sleep well that night. Obviously...
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Amie Kerlin (lemon)
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About Myself: I write random things that come to me when I least expect them.
I'm not a dark person, but for whatever reason a lot of my writing is dark. Leave me comments so that I can improve-- If we don't get criticized, we can't grow. :)

Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Oct 12, 2008When I Think of YouMiscellaneous Stories 30
Sep 15, 2008The WaitressMiscellaneous Stories 1115
Aug 29, 2008A Lover's GardenPoetry 150
Aug 25, 2008Lemon: a HaikuPoetry 392
Aug 12, 2008The Story of a Survivor, Chapter 3Miscellaneous Stories 158
Aug 10, 2008The Story of a Survivor, Chapter 2Miscellaneous Stories 181
Aug 6, 2008The Story of a Survivor, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 382
Aug 3, 2008Walking Along the ShorePoetry 206
Jul 30, 2008Stranded at SeaMiscellaneous Stories 239
Jul 26, 2008The Mexican Lasagna IncidentHumor 277
Jul 21, 2008All Liquid DietMiscellaneous Stories 297
Jul 20, 2008The PastPoetry 142
Jul 20, 2008Once AgainPoetry 142
Jul 16, 2008On The MendPoetry 146
Jul 13, 2008This Internal PoisonPoetry 213
Jul 13, 2008The OnePoetry 226
Jul 12, 2008A Bad DayPoetry 192
Jul 11, 2008The Reluctant LoverMiscellaneous Stories 428
Jul 10, 2008BlindPoetry 168
Jul 9, 2008Life's Little GamesPoetry 165
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Books

TitleDate
Lemon Juice and PoetryAug 2, 2008

Comments

Total number of comments: 938

Title article: Unexpected Encounter In A Subway
Date: 2008-10-12 20:02:28

I think this has potential, but it needs to be broken up a bit so that it doesnt seem like on huge run-on sentence or something.  
 
I'm interested in reading more, but I would just suggest using paragraphs next time.  
 
Keep it coming =]

Title article: Secret British Body Shop
Date: 2008-10-12 12:41:25

This was really good. I'll thank you for writing about such a subject that is silently poisoning our kid's minds. its everywhere they look. Great job. 
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Title article: Ripples
Date: 2008-10-12 12:10:47

this was wonderful. I'm putting it in my favorites. I liked the imagery and the melancholy feel this had to it. and yet again i'll tell you how much emotion your work contains. you have a talent of wording things so that the reader FEELS the emotions in the poem. great job =]

Title article: It's a Matter of Importance
Date: 2008-10-12 12:03:45

@_@ lol  
This was written very well and i'll just reiterate what everyone else said about how you kept this from being cheap and corny. Plus it had the added bonus of keeping Potter in his chair while he was most likely at work haha.  
 
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Title article: "Please! Don't Go
Date: 2008-10-12 11:47:27

Your wording was good, but I would go over it because there were quite a few times where you used the wrong word, 'feel' instead of 'fell', 'where' instead of 'were'..  
 
also your use of quotation marks was confusing.. is each stanza just one person talking or are both talking in alternate lines? if its just one person, you dont have to put quotations on each line, just at the beginning and the end.  
 
it was a good poem lyrically, just not in good form =]

Title article: Songs From A Fender Bender
Date: 2008-10-12 11:43:16

I really liked these. I have to admit i've already taken the 'magical journey' to the site and listened to some of your stuff. not bad sir tarhead, not bad at all. =]

Title article: Advancing world
Date: 2008-10-12 11:33:04

This made me smile. At first I didnt know where you were going, but by the second stanza I caught on and thought it was great. The flow was off to me in a few places, but not bad enough to make it bad, actually i dont even know why i mentioned it lol. 
 
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Title article: I think I love you robot, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-10-12 11:28:47

oh wow, you WERE running a parallel. this was really sad. I liked it a lot though, you did a great job describing the anguish the woman felt. i also thought you did well with the way you DID give the robot an emotion.. regret. So really he was feeling emotion, he was just unable to express it. going into my favorites.

Title article: I think i love you Robot, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-10-12 11:23:56

This was actually pretty interesting. I dont know if you were puposely drawing a parallel between the robots lack of emotion and some girlfriends/boyfriends lack of emotion in relationships. if that even made sense lol. Anyway, I liked it and i'm off to part 2 =]

Title article: Palin Fever
Date: 2008-10-11 17:25:45

You are so damn random Jason. but hey, its alright. it keeps us on our toes. now i have to add cartoon characters to my list of things to keep away from you. haha. Great conversation piece.

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Michelle Huff (allmine)

Mmmmm...not sure
 Created On: 10/12/2008 14:31:06
That's a lovely picture of your lemoness
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 10/12/2008 14:09:01
Yeah, that's good you're actually researching the thing. Most people wouldn't do that and end up screwing it up. By the way, have you seen the episode of It's Always Sunny in Philadelphia where the gang gets held up, and they fear that they'll get stockholm syndrome? Good stuff ...

Oh, well sorry to offend you! I really like that pic by the way. I mean, I REALLY like it.

Uhh, anyways ... in that case, the robbers should wear your skin.

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 10/12/2008 13:48:27
Oh, like Patty Hearst (think that's her name)? Cool ... but one thing. When they commit the robbery, the disguise they're wearing has to be that lemon suit in your profile pic.

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 10/11/2008 15:44:48
Sup, lemon lime?
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 09/27/2008 19:41:40
I was just on the freecreditreport website .... damn i was so close to signing you up .... why do zombies have to be so nice? it isn't fair!

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 09/27/2008 19:32:05
Hey, hey, you don't want to do anything you might regret, do you?

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 09/27/2008 18:01:20
I'll sign you up for the NAMBLA newsletter ...

North American Marlon Brando Look Alikes

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 09/27/2008 13:50:16
SPAM!!!

ha! told you i'd get you back

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 09/22/2008 08:28:59
Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 09/22/2008 15:25:20
I know ..... i should really start doing that. I mean, you can never have enough pictures of Lemons .......

I'm writing a story about a zombie who mugs a human ....... it's called Pauly Shore Is Undead.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

 Created On: 09/21/2008 21:36:41
Yeah, because it's normal to just randomly search for pictures of Lemons ...

Are you really going to write the story?
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