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Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)
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About Myself: I'm good at telling people what I like and don't like about their writing. It's a free service from me if you ask and show tangible interest in the works of others on this site.
You should comment on others things with something real to tell them, feedback, criticism, WHY you enjoyed/didn't enjoy instead of just IF you did or not.

Besides these things;
I hate the credits system on this site.
I write with bad punctuation on occasion because that's how I want it to sound if you speak out the sentences instead of read them. I know it's wrong.

I'd recommend a few authors from here as genuinely good authors and examples in how to do certain things, and here are the links to their pages:

Very good character development -
http://www.storiesville.com/d.dasgupta
(A nobody named somebody)

Relentlessly uncommon word choice (without sounding pretentious or forced) / good storytelling -
http://www.storiesville.com/Kasi elaborated
(The Invention of Uncertainty)

And just plain funny/original-
http://www.storiesville.com/JJtyler
(A Bad Answer For Writer's Block)

And for most things, including masturbation and partial insanity-

http://www.storiesville.com/content/view/1853/65/


I'll think of more later, but those are the ones I think very highly of.

Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Jul 20, 2008Under The Stars.Miscellaneous Stories 26
Jul 11, 2008Unavoidable Detours Created By The Elderly.Miscellaneous Stories 96
Jul 3, 2008Honest Livings.Miscellaneous Stories 90
Jun 22, 2008Preferences.Miscellaneous Stories 73
Jun 14, 2008Velocity.Miscellaneous Stories 89
Jun 11, 2008Coffee Stains, Chapter 2Miscellaneous Stories 213
Jun 8, 2008Coffee Stains, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 459
May 25, 2008His Favorite Chords.Miscellaneous Stories 544
Apr 27, 2008Admittedly, I Have Been Busy.Miscellaneous Stories 240
Mar 19, 200811:11 And 11:12 Can Be DifferentMiscellaneous Stories 491
Mar 14, 2008Drops Of Rain.Miscellaneous Stories 238
Mar 10, 2008The Sunlight That Didn't Come Through The Blinds.Miscellaneous Stories 257
Mar 8, 2008How Dolan Quit His Job, Without Pronouncing His Name.Miscellaneous Stories 241
Mar 6, 2008You Can't Unring A Bell.Miscellaneous Stories 251
Mar 5, 2008The Strangest Places.Miscellaneous Stories 241
Mar 4, 2008A Man Possessed.Miscellaneous Stories 204
Mar 2, 2008There Are Many Ways (This Not Being One).Miscellaneous Stories 227
Feb 28, 2008It's Free. You Can't Get A Refund.Miscellaneous Stories 303
Feb 27, 2008One Is Always Enough.Miscellaneous Stories 425
Feb 27, 2008I Guess?Miscellaneous Stories 266
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Last 10 Forum Posts
DateSubjectCategoryHits
05/27/2008 09:10:25Re:Comments: Tragedy and Good IntentionsOff-Topic986
05/26/2008 20:46:26Comments: Tragedy and Good IntentionsOff-Topic986
05/21/2008 22:49:20Re:Favorite AuthorOff-Topic2745
05/20/2008 11:12:23Re:Writing TipsOff-Topic608
05/20/2008 11:11:48Re:Writing TipsOff-Topic608
03/13/2008 23:12:52Re:What do YOU do when planning stories?Off-Topic752
03/01/2008 01:58:42Re:Appreciate it.Off-Topic535
02/29/2008 05:09:48Appreciate it.Off-Topic535

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Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)'s connections

OFFLINE Kasi (Kasi elaborated)
OFFLINE Philip Neale (philneale1952)
OFFLINE Dipankar Dasgupta (d.dasgupta)
OFFLINE JJ Tyler (JJtyler)
OFFLINE Jody (Jody)
OFFLINE tomahawk (tomahawk)
OFFLINE Thomas Reynolds (ThomasP3)
OFFLINE Christopher Chadwyck (Chadwyck45)
OFFLINE Egoist (Egoist)
OFFLINE Patrick Lytle (PKLytle)
 
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Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 07/19/2008 23:25:02
Edited By Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^) On: 07/19/2008 23:25:45
SPAZ
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

a wasteland
 Created On: 07/05/2008 23:35:00
Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/05/2008 23:35:22
whoa! there seems to be some serious heat here. but i like the cold, so i'm moving on. see ya

Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 06/17/2008 06:35:22
Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/17/2008 06:36:00
White Tiger
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 06/13/2008 07:46:37
Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/17/2008 06:36:32
Funny, I remember the conversation going more like this:


>>>>>>>>>>CELL wrote:
>>>>>>>>>>>>>Eh, I'm bored. Goodbye.

>>>>>>>>>> cookingWine wrote:
>>>>>>>>>>>>Of course Juttabell, and you know that they only go "peuw peuw" for you!

>>>>>>>CELL wrote:
>>>>>>>>>> Fanny Pack (i.e. you), not unless you have some lasers inside you.

>>>>>>>>cookingWine wrote:
>>>>>>>>>> You are so gracious Juttabell, please, may I compliment you on your anatomy?

>>>>>CELL wrote:
>>>>>>>> Eh, sure you can be my fanny pack.

>>>>cookingWine wrote:
>>>>> Please Juttabell!
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 06/12/2008 13:40:22
Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/13/2008 07:29:27
My fanny pack.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 05/28/2008 12:10:36
Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 05/28/2008 12:12:32
Those aren't stink lines. It's the emanating glory that surrounds me.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 05/26/2008 15:09:22
I heard you don't bathe.
Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): I heard it's just the reflective stink from you.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 05/25/2008 19:00:08
Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/12/2008 14:06:40
to answer your question, if the air around Earth froze it'd look like a cube, and then Subzero Earth would get placed inside an ice cube tray. I dunno why, would definitely eliminate an ice cube tray's purpose, but well, that's just what I heard... you know, just from around...
Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): I heard you suck.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 05/13/2008 17:46:01
Hello, ugly.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)

 Created On: 04/30/2008 13:08:03
You can go fuck yourself. And then go pour another glass of that boring wine.
Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): Cheers!
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Comments

Title article: white light
Date: 2008-05-07 18:12:35

Hm. If that was meant to be a funny story, then terrorists were planning on flying to Hawaii.

Title article: When Shes Gone...
Date: 2008-05-07 17:58:54

This sounds like one of those anti-marijuana commercials. 
It sounds like non-fiction, too. 
Keep on keeping on. 
cS.

Title article: Let Me In
Date: 2008-05-07 17:56:43

Hm. 
I dislike the horror genre. Gotta' write what you gotta' write. 
Keep on keeping on. 
cS.

Title article: BillBored
Date: 2008-05-07 17:54:48

Ah. Going to limewire for music is part of the problem because it is sapping dollars straight out of 
1) the record industry, which puts out new music and when it is losing money, and which will stick to reliable artists that will turn a buck in order for themselves to stay in business. 
2) and the artists themselves, obviously. be they punk, randb, rap or fucking muddy waters himself. 
 
I just started buying vinyl. Not only is it so full of quality substance and good art, it seems to be missing a lot of the singles era that we are so unfortunate to have thrust upon us. 
I'll tell you an album to be bought. 
Anything by Fake Problems. Have a good one.

Title article: Useless
Date: 2008-05-07 17:44:03

This seems like something that should be filed under non-fiction.

Title article: The alter ego
Date: 2008-05-07 17:42:45

I thought it could have been better. You dragged me into feeling pity for him at times, and suggested it at some (hoping you would do the latter more often). 
The overall vision has been done before, and I think you need to change it so you make it your own, unique perspective on how this happened as opposed to a simple story on alter-egos and such. 
I appreciate that you try and draw emotion without using violent change or anything like that. A good effort. 
 
Keep on keeping on. 
CS.

Title article: girl
Date: 2008-05-07 17:36:34

I like the brevity. It makes things that aren't crucial seem crucial. 
 
Keep on keeping on, and hopefully, writing more. 
CS.

Title article: never
Date: 2008-05-07 17:35:05

Hm. 
A beginning in an ending.

Title article: never grow old
Date: 2008-05-06 15:58:39

That was a great transitional line with the casket falling. 
 
I think that was the perfect length for a concise piece like this. I'm going to come back and see what else you have to offer after this.

Title article: A Quiet Isolation
Date: 2008-05-06 15:55:53

It nodded in and out of interesting to me.  
It was very rich and emotional imagery, which for me is both good and bad because at times it was drawn out.  
But this seems like the kind of thing that you aren't writing for readers.  
 
I wish I had the attention span or the willpower to look back through the story and figure out what the photograph metaphorically stood for, because that seems like it should be an interesting point that doesn't jump out at the reader. 
 
Keep on keeping on. 
CS.

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