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About Myself:

This seems to be a popular topic directed at me, so I'll address it.
Q.
You sure seem to be a know-it-all when you comment, yet you don't do it on your stories. What's the deal?
A.
Simply, I write things the way I like to write them. I think that everyone should do the same. The reason I point out when other people fail at this is because sometimes they aren't aware of it and how disastrous it can be to their story. I, (<--example of something I like to do) know that I am writing badly when I do so, because that is what I enjoy doing and will continue to do so.

The bottom line is that I can help your story become better, conventionally and just to me (but very rarely both, together). If you'd would like that service, I would be happy to do it.

Feel free to let me know of all my shortcomings as a writer, person, or any other facet of my life as you see fit.
I will be the guy grinning on his high horse.
Cheers!
(If you're going to take the time to read something, take the time to give it an intelligent review. A sentence or two of feedback is like giving a nickel tip on a thirty dollar bill.)

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Jul 3, 2008	Honest Livings.	Miscellaneous Stories	55
Jun 22, 2008	Preferences.	Miscellaneous Stories	58
Jun 14, 2008	Velocity.	Miscellaneous Stories	77
Jun 11, 2008	Coffee Stains, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	197
Jun 8, 2008	Coffee Stains, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	441
May 25, 2008	His Favorite Chords.	Miscellaneous Stories	526
Apr 27, 2008	Admittedly, I Have Been Busy.	Miscellaneous Stories	187
Mar 19, 2008	11:11 And 11:12 Can Be Different	Miscellaneous Stories	483
Mar 14, 2008	Drops Of Rain.	Miscellaneous Stories	229
Mar 10, 2008	The Sunlight That Didn't Come Through The Blinds.	Miscellaneous Stories	232
Mar 8, 2008	How Dolan Quit His Job, Without Pronouncing His Name.	Miscellaneous Stories	218
Mar 6, 2008	You Can't Unring A Bell.	Miscellaneous Stories	236
Mar 5, 2008	The Strangest Places.	Miscellaneous Stories	231
Mar 4, 2008	A Man Possessed.	Miscellaneous Stories	194
Mar 2, 2008	There Are Many Ways (This Not Being One).	Miscellaneous Stories	217
Feb 28, 2008	It's Free. You Can't Get A Refund.	Miscellaneous Stories	288
Feb 27, 2008	One Is Always Enough.	Miscellaneous Stories	414
Feb 27, 2008	I Guess?	Miscellaneous Stories	250
Feb 26, 2008	Roosters and Lions In Monotone.	Miscellaneous Stories	246

Forum

Last 10 Forum Posts

Date	Subject	Category	Hits
05/27/2008 09:10:25	Re:Comments: Tragedy and Good Intentions	Off-Topic	890
05/26/2008 20:46:26	Comments: Tragedy and Good Intentions	Off-Topic	890
05/21/2008 22:49:20	Re:Favorite Author	Off-Topic	2469
05/20/2008 11:12:23	Re:Writing Tips	Off-Topic	572
05/20/2008 11:11:48	Re:Writing Tips	Off-Topic	572
03/13/2008 23:12:52	Re:What do YOU do when planning stories?	Off-Topic	733
03/01/2008 01:58:42	Re:Appreciate it.	Off-Topic	492
02/29/2008 05:09:48	Appreciate it.	Off-Topic	492

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Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 06/17/2008 06:35:22 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/17/2008 06:36:00 White Tiger
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 06/13/2008 07:46:37 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/17/2008 06:36:32 Funny, I remember the conversation going more like this: >>>>>>>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>>>>>>>Eh, I'm bored. Goodbye. >>>>>>>>>> cookingWine wrote: >>>>>>>>>>>>Of course Juttabell, and you know that they only go "peuw peuw" for you! >>>>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>>>> Fanny Pack (i.e. you), not unless you have some lasers inside you. >>>>>>>>cookingWine wrote: >>>>>>>>>> You are so gracious Juttabell, please, may I compliment you on your anatomy? >>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>> Eh, sure you can be my fanny pack. >>>>cookingWine wrote: >>>>> Please Juttabell!
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 06/12/2008 13:40:22 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/13/2008 07:29:27 My fanny pack.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/28/2008 12:10:36 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 05/28/2008 12:12:32 Those aren't stink lines. It's the emanating glory that surrounds me.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/26/2008 15:09:22 I heard you don't bathe. Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): I heard it's just the reflective stink from you.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/25/2008 19:00:08 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/12/2008 14:06:40 to answer your question, if the air around Earth froze it'd look like a cube, and then Subzero Earth would get placed inside an ice cube tray. I dunno why, would definitely eliminate an ice cube tray's purpose, but well, that's just what I heard... you know, just from around... Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): I heard you suck.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/13/2008 17:46:01 Hello, ugly.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 04/30/2008 13:08:03 You can go fuck yourself. And then go pour another glass of that boring wine. Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): Cheers!
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 04/30/2008 06:32:44 Hahaha, shut up Cole-Man!! Or I'll have to serve you with my mean, electric dance moves!
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^) cookingWine's a party pooper	Created On: 03/26/2008 13:19:49 Edited By Yahaira Nunez (Pez) On: 03/27/2008 07:26:12 Oi, fine... previous comment withdrawn. Just found it funny how you say, or rather type, "... and all that jazz."

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Comments

Title article: Dude, You Got Your Ass Kicked by a Girl
Date: 2008-05-12 12:01:26

This is kind of like a Rob Scheinder movie.
I mean, I guess it's funny. It's more like, why did you type this out?
Tough concept, the guy gets his ass kicked by a girl. Snarf snarf har har. Try and master it a little more instead of just stitching lines of dialogue together sloppily.

Title article: Die Twice
Date: 2008-05-12 11:59:09

Hm. I don't know what to think about this. That is rare for me.
It's okay. There is nothing remarkable, and nothing remarkably wrong.
Keep on keeping on.
-CS

Title article: The Die is Cast, Chapter 4
Date: 2008-05-12 11:41:14

Lost me at the end.
Kings and Queens and Ajax and masters and sleeping beauties are a bit much for me. It also seems like the dialogue is from a James Bond movie.
I still like the active narrator.

Title article: An Activist Studying Chairman Mao's Works
Date: 2008-05-11 20:58:56

The Chinese concept of the state is so dramatically different from us Westerners, and it's so interesting. Mao really embodied that community concept of worship and idolatry of the state.
I didn't read the whole thing, but I skimmed bits and pieces.
For whatever reason you're doing it, I hope it's a good time.

Title article: Friday Night
Date: 2008-05-11 20:25:34

Getting high in a forest before playing volleyball.
I'm pretty sure I've never heard that one on a checklist. I like how it is almost optimistic in a weird way. Besides that, there was nothing that was remarkable (in literal terms).

Title article: The Die Is Cast, Chapter 3
Date: 2008-05-11 19:57:02

It feels like it's stretching for me. Tension shouldn't have to get breasts implants at the end of every chapter.
There shouldn't have to be gunshots to keep me reading, I should be curious for her plight, and simply, I'm not. The gunshots almost take away from that more so because it takes away the dynamics of a characters.
When you create gunshots or anything along those lines, you're drawing focus, and inevitably, choices, away from the character. Tension derives from the ability for your character to make wrong/right choices.
I like the active narrator. It makes me believe that there is a bias and that there might be an omnipotent liar.
Keep on keeping on.
CS.

Title article: The Die Is Cast, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-05-11 19:50:38

All you can rape buffet.
That is the single most inappropriate thing I've ever heard.

Title article: Insane
Date: 2008-05-11 18:15:40

I read it again and I remembered how funny and fit the bit about masturbating was into this and how long it took me to figure it out even if it was right in front of me, I didn't expect it.
You are either really crazy and good at hiding it, or really crazy and not good at hiding it. Or you are good at creating characters that mimic you and you're crazy. Or you are good at creating characters that don't mimic you and you're just crazy. Or you're good at writing poetry that isn't pretentious or boring or egotistical but you are still crazy.
Whatever it is, I just read it five times consecutively and I was grinning the whole time. This is a gem on this site.

Title article: 23rd Century Digital Girl: Chapter 1
Date: 2008-05-10 09:13:58

That's dangerously close to a Bad Religion song title.
Someone had to catch it.

Title article: Grotesque
Date: 2008-05-07 18:34:59

That was a good job bringing those events together. Very well done in that regard.
" They smiled over their achievements while the bodies were rolled out, first the 12 year old son, then the 14 year old daughter, then both parents."
I thought that was the strongest line. You have to wonder what detectives get from their job.
I can't say specifics because I'm not that sure of what I mean, but I would like more from this.
Keep on keeping on.
cS.

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