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Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)
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About Myself: I'm good at telling people what I like and don't like about their writing. It's a free service from me if you ask and show tangible interest in the works of others on this site.
You should comment on others things with something real to tell them, feedback, criticism, WHY you enjoyed/didn't enjoy instead of just IF you did or not.

Besides these things;
I hate the credits system on this site.
I write with bad punctuation on occasion because that's how I want it to sound if you speak out the sentences instead of read them. I know it's wrong.

I'd recommend a few authors from here as genuinely good authors and examples in how to do certain things, and here are the links to their pages:

Very good character development -
http://www.storiesville.com/d.dasgupta
(A nobody named somebody)

Relentlessly uncommon word choice (without sounding pretentious or forced) / good storytelling -
http://www.storiesville.com/Kasi elaborated
(The Invention of Uncertainty)

And just plain funny/original-
http://www.storiesville.com/JJtyler
(A Bad Answer For Writer's Block)

And for most things, including masturbation and partial insanity-

http://www.storiesville.com/content/view/1853/65/


I'll think of more later, but those are the ones I think very highly of.

Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Jul 20, 2008Under The Stars.Miscellaneous Stories 68
Jul 11, 2008Unavoidable Detours Created By The Elderly.Miscellaneous Stories 104
Jul 3, 2008Honest Livings.Miscellaneous Stories 95
Jun 22, 2008Preferences.Miscellaneous Stories 76
Jun 14, 2008Velocity.Miscellaneous Stories 91
Jun 11, 2008Coffee Stains, Chapter 2Miscellaneous Stories 215
Jun 8, 2008Coffee Stains, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 462
May 25, 2008His Favorite Chords.Miscellaneous Stories 549
Apr 27, 2008Admittedly, I Have Been Busy.Miscellaneous Stories 244
Mar 19, 200811:11 And 11:12 Can Be DifferentMiscellaneous Stories 493
Mar 14, 2008Drops Of Rain.Miscellaneous Stories 240
Mar 10, 2008The Sunlight That Didn't Come Through The Blinds.Miscellaneous Stories 266
Mar 8, 2008How Dolan Quit His Job, Without Pronouncing His Name.Miscellaneous Stories 247
Mar 6, 2008You Can't Unring A Bell.Miscellaneous Stories 253
Mar 5, 2008The Strangest Places.Miscellaneous Stories 245
Mar 4, 2008A Man Possessed.Miscellaneous Stories 209
Mar 2, 2008There Are Many Ways (This Not Being One).Miscellaneous Stories 231
Feb 28, 2008It's Free. You Can't Get A Refund.Miscellaneous Stories 304
Feb 27, 2008One Is Always Enough.Miscellaneous Stories 426
Feb 27, 2008I Guess?Miscellaneous Stories 269
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DateSubjectCategoryHits
05/27/2008 09:10:25Re:Comments: Tragedy and Good IntentionsOff-Topic1011
05/26/2008 20:46:26Comments: Tragedy and Good IntentionsOff-Topic1011
05/21/2008 22:49:20Re:Favorite AuthorOff-Topic2792
05/20/2008 11:12:23Re:Writing TipsOff-Topic621
05/20/2008 11:11:48Re:Writing TipsOff-Topic621
03/13/2008 23:12:52Re:What do YOU do when planning stories?Off-Topic764
03/01/2008 01:58:42Re:Appreciate it.Off-Topic542
02/29/2008 05:09:48Appreciate it.Off-Topic542

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OFFLINE Kasi (Kasi elaborated)
OFFLINE Philip Neale (philneale1952)
OFFLINE Dipankar Dasgupta (d.dasgupta)
OFFLINE JJ Tyler (JJtyler)
OFFLINE Jody (Jody)
OFFLINE tomahawk (tomahawk)
OFFLINE Thomas Reynolds (ThomasP3)
OFFLINE Christopher Chadwyck (Chadwyck45)
OFFLINE Egoist (Egoist)
OFFLINE Patrick Lytle (PKLytle)
 
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Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 07/19/2008 23:25:02
Edited By Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^) On: 07/19/2008 23:25:45
SPAZ
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

a wasteland
 Created On: 07/05/2008 23:35:00
Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/05/2008 23:35:22
whoa! there seems to be some serious heat here. but i like the cold, so i'm moving on. see ya

Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 06/17/2008 06:35:22
Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/17/2008 06:36:00
White Tiger
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 06/13/2008 07:46:37
Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/17/2008 06:36:32
Funny, I remember the conversation going more like this:


>>>>>>>>>>CELL wrote:
>>>>>>>>>>>>>Eh, I'm bored. Goodbye.

>>>>>>>>>> cookingWine wrote:
>>>>>>>>>>>>Of course Juttabell, and you know that they only go "peuw peuw" for you!

>>>>>>>CELL wrote:
>>>>>>>>>> Fanny Pack (i.e. you), not unless you have some lasers inside you.

>>>>>>>>cookingWine wrote:
>>>>>>>>>> You are so gracious Juttabell, please, may I compliment you on your anatomy?

>>>>>CELL wrote:
>>>>>>>> Eh, sure you can be my fanny pack.

>>>>cookingWine wrote:
>>>>> Please Juttabell!
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 06/12/2008 13:40:22
Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/13/2008 07:29:27
My fanny pack.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 05/28/2008 12:10:36
Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 05/28/2008 12:12:32
Those aren't stink lines. It's the emanating glory that surrounds me.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 05/26/2008 15:09:22
I heard you don't bathe.
Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): I heard it's just the reflective stink from you.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 05/25/2008 19:00:08
Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/12/2008 14:06:40
to answer your question, if the air around Earth froze it'd look like a cube, and then Subzero Earth would get placed inside an ice cube tray. I dunno why, would definitely eliminate an ice cube tray's purpose, but well, that's just what I heard... you know, just from around...
Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): I heard you suck.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)

 Created On: 05/13/2008 17:46:01
Hello, ugly.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)

 Created On: 04/30/2008 13:08:03
You can go fuck yourself. And then go pour another glass of that boring wine.
Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): Cheers!
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Comments

Title article: the Processor-Chapter 1
Date: 2008-05-20 09:23:41

This sounds like an excerpt from gossip girls, if I were to guess. 
For me; 
it's too "And I did this. Then we did this. Then we did that." 
Ellipses (...) don't need to be used that often. It's distracting. 
 
It needs expansion on ideas, not story lines. 
 
At times, it feels like you aren't comfortable typing in those shoes. The short, incomplete sentences don't really accomplish anything and turns them more into a mistake than an expression.  
 
I really had no idea it was even possible to have this; 
",...". 
 
You don't need to tell us when to break. You should drop hints, not flash neon signs. A simple period can do the same job (or, that's when you should be splitting sentences into bursts of incomplete thought). 
 
If you'd like any other opinions, let me know. 
 
Keep on. 
^cs.

Title article: Our Words
Date: 2008-05-20 07:12:02

Very precise language. Definitely the concrete that it was built on, for me. 
 
That has to be the first time I've heard confabulation in practical use, and that kind of represents my whole feeling about it. 
It works for what its intended readership is, but for a non-sophisticate (and to be noted, non-poet) like myself, it strikes as eccentric. 
 
Keep on. 
:cs

Title article: Struggles at the Center of the Universe.
Date: 2008-05-18 07:39:51

Well, this is the first time I've seen it post a story and disregard the part where it tells you who wrote it. 
It was written by me.

Title article: Do You Love Me Still?
Date: 2008-05-14 06:07:51

Eh. In comparison to your others, don't like it.

Title article: when i was born again
Date: 2008-05-12 12:03:53

I looked at this, and literally sighed. It's really hard to drudge through line after line that have no paragraph splits. It's like if a novel wasn't split into chapters.

Title article: Dude, You Got Your Ass Kicked by a Girl
Date: 2008-05-12 12:01:26

This is kind of like a Rob Scheinder movie. 
I mean, I guess it's funny. It's more like, why did you type this out? 
Tough concept, the guy gets his ass kicked by a girl. Snarf snarf har har. Try and master it a little more instead of just stitching lines of dialogue together sloppily.

Title article: Die Twice
Date: 2008-05-12 11:59:09

Hm. I don't know what to think about this. That is rare for me. 
It's okay. There is nothing remarkable, and nothing remarkably wrong. 
Keep on keeping on. 
-CS

Title article: The Die is Cast, Chapter 4
Date: 2008-05-12 11:41:14

Lost me at the end. 
Kings and Queens and Ajax and masters and sleeping beauties are a bit much for me. It also seems like the dialogue is from a James Bond movie. 
I still like the active narrator.

Title article: An Activist Studying Chairman Mao's Works
Date: 2008-05-11 20:58:56

The Chinese concept of the state is so dramatically different from us Westerners, and it's so interesting. Mao really embodied that community concept of worship and idolatry of the state. 
I didn't read the whole thing, but I skimmed bits and pieces. 
For whatever reason you're doing it, I hope it's a good time.

Title article: Friday Night
Date: 2008-05-11 20:25:34

Getting high in a forest before playing volleyball. 
I'm pretty sure I've never heard that one on a checklist. I like how it is almost optimistic in a weird way. Besides that, there was nothing that was remarkable (in literal terms).

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