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About Myself:

This seems to be a popular topic directed at me, so I'll address it.
Q.
You sure seem to be a know-it-all when you comment, yet you don't do it on your stories. What's the deal?
A.
Simply, I write things the way I like to write them. I think that everyone should do the same. The reason I point out when other people fail at this is because sometimes they aren't aware of it and how disastrous it can be to their story. I, (<--example of something I like to do) know that I am writing badly when I do so, because that is what I enjoy doing and will continue to do so.

The bottom line is that I can help your story become better, conventionally and just to me (but very rarely both, together). If you'd would like that service, I would be happy to do it.

Feel free to let me know of all my shortcomings as a writer, person, or any other facet of my life as you see fit.
I will be the guy grinning on his high horse.
Cheers!
(If you're going to take the time to read something, take the time to give it an intelligent review. A sentence or two of feedback is like giving a nickel tip on a thirty dollar bill.)

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Jul 3, 2008	Honest Livings.	Miscellaneous Stories	71
Jun 22, 2008	Preferences.	Miscellaneous Stories	64
Jun 14, 2008	Velocity.	Miscellaneous Stories	82
Jun 11, 2008	Coffee Stains, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	203
Jun 8, 2008	Coffee Stains, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	452
May 25, 2008	His Favorite Chords.	Miscellaneous Stories	533
Apr 27, 2008	Admittedly, I Have Been Busy.	Miscellaneous Stories	189
Mar 19, 2008	11:11 And 11:12 Can Be Different	Miscellaneous Stories	486
Mar 14, 2008	Drops Of Rain.	Miscellaneous Stories	233
Mar 10, 2008	The Sunlight That Didn't Come Through The Blinds.	Miscellaneous Stories	236
Mar 8, 2008	How Dolan Quit His Job, Without Pronouncing His Name.	Miscellaneous Stories	221
Mar 6, 2008	You Can't Unring A Bell.	Miscellaneous Stories	241
Mar 5, 2008	The Strangest Places.	Miscellaneous Stories	235
Mar 4, 2008	A Man Possessed.	Miscellaneous Stories	197
Mar 2, 2008	There Are Many Ways (This Not Being One).	Miscellaneous Stories	219
Feb 28, 2008	It's Free. You Can't Get A Refund.	Miscellaneous Stories	293
Feb 27, 2008	One Is Always Enough.	Miscellaneous Stories	417
Feb 27, 2008	I Guess?	Miscellaneous Stories	257
Feb 26, 2008	Roosters and Lions In Monotone.	Miscellaneous Stories	250

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Last 10 Forum Posts

Date	Subject	Category	Hits
05/27/2008 09:10:25	Re:Comments: Tragedy and Good Intentions	Off-Topic	917
05/26/2008 20:46:26	Comments: Tragedy and Good Intentions	Off-Topic	917
05/21/2008 22:49:20	Re:Favorite Author	Off-Topic	2542
05/20/2008 11:12:23	Re:Writing Tips	Off-Topic	586
05/20/2008 11:11:48	Re:Writing Tips	Off-Topic	586
03/13/2008 23:12:52	Re:What do YOU do when planning stories?	Off-Topic	740
03/01/2008 01:58:42	Re:Appreciate it.	Off-Topic	502
02/29/2008 05:09:48	Appreciate it.	Off-Topic	502

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Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) a wasteland	Created On: 07/05/2008 23:35:00 Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/05/2008 23:35:22 whoa! there seems to be some serious heat here. but i like the cold, so i'm moving on. see ya
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 06/17/2008 06:35:22 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/17/2008 06:36:00 White Tiger
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 06/13/2008 07:46:37 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/17/2008 06:36:32 Funny, I remember the conversation going more like this: >>>>>>>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>>>>>>>Eh, I'm bored. Goodbye. >>>>>>>>>> cookingWine wrote: >>>>>>>>>>>>Of course Juttabell, and you know that they only go "peuw peuw" for you! >>>>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>>>> Fanny Pack (i.e. you), not unless you have some lasers inside you. >>>>>>>>cookingWine wrote: >>>>>>>>>> You are so gracious Juttabell, please, may I compliment you on your anatomy? >>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>> Eh, sure you can be my fanny pack. >>>>cookingWine wrote: >>>>> Please Juttabell!
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 06/12/2008 13:40:22 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/13/2008 07:29:27 My fanny pack.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/28/2008 12:10:36 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 05/28/2008 12:12:32 Those aren't stink lines. It's the emanating glory that surrounds me.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/26/2008 15:09:22 I heard you don't bathe. Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): I heard it's just the reflective stink from you.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/25/2008 19:00:08 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/12/2008 14:06:40 to answer your question, if the air around Earth froze it'd look like a cube, and then Subzero Earth would get placed inside an ice cube tray. I dunno why, would definitely eliminate an ice cube tray's purpose, but well, that's just what I heard... you know, just from around... Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): I heard you suck.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/13/2008 17:46:01 Hello, ugly.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 04/30/2008 13:08:03 You can go fuck yourself. And then go pour another glass of that boring wine. Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): Cheers!
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 04/30/2008 06:32:44 Hahaha, shut up Cole-Man!! Or I'll have to serve you with my mean, electric dance moves!

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Comments

Title article: Make Profits not Ethics
Date: 2008-06-11 17:12:50

Yes, corporate greed is. But corporations are also what has elevated us to a comparatively high standard of living so there are tradeoffs that you have to look at when analyzing these things.
Health insurers don't need to make as much money as they do.
Oil doesn't need to make as much money as it does.
But they do, and this is something that has to be accepted because you can't enforce laws on big business without expanding government and limiting freedoms.

If you really want to go down with these people, it means to stop using their services. And if you're online, you're probably using a service provided through a major corporation.

Title article: Purple Haze
Date: 2008-06-11 16:46:20

Apologies. I'm used to seeing you under the resistanceisfreedom tag. Comment, in spirit, withdrawn.

Title article: Purple Haze
Date: 2008-06-11 11:55:00

War stories aren't my bag but Jimi Hendrix is so I felt compelled to comment something on this.
There is never an excuse to not use the right punctuation. A good way to learn how is to read your story out loud, find where you need breaks and splits, then use commas and split sentences accordingly.

Title article: Unexisted, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-06-08 16:13:17

Erm. Episode of Gossip Girls?

Title article: The Dog and I
Date: 2008-06-07 17:06:50

I like the line about behaving casually in the third or fourth paragraph. Hilarious and very distinct.
The language struck me as pretentious at times.
Overall, I liked it. I think you're talented.

Title article: The Phone Beeped
Date: 2008-06-07 17:03:49

Go pills!
Go outside relief!

Title article: Make Profits not Ethics
Date: 2008-06-07 17:00:25

Ethics can't exist in capitalism. There isn't a market for it. If you want to inject ethics into the market, than I hope you would like to be behind in the technology race and in general success of the economy. You talk about deaths of children, but nobody is starving to death. You talk about a Feudal system when class doesn't exist in nearly the same terms. You're making unfair and exaggerated juxtapositions.

All I'm trying to say is that there isn't room for ethics in corporations in a competitive system like the one we have in the US, because they would be eliminated by now. Wal-Mart isn't ethical, but they run a very tight ship so they can run out "ethical" businesses.

I'm not necessarily disagreeing with you on all points, but look at things comparatively to the rest of the world, and tell me that the drive towards business over ethics hasn't treated us well.

Title article: Alliance of Minds (part two)
Date: 2008-06-07 16:16:08

without warning him and giving him the chance to fight back (and I'm sure, win, even if I don't know yet I can guess since this isn't the last part).
Keep on keeping on.
-CS

Title article: Alliance of Minds (part two)
Date: 2008-06-07 16:15:15

It's too slow for me, in this part. I mean, all the pieces are there. This is more of a preferential argument rather than something technical or constructive.
I am one that does not typically tread in the sci-fi shelf, because, frankly, surreal doesn't really interest me.

All I can really comment on is the character again. He seems flat to me. He's going through a growing experience, but it seems to be secondary to the description about how he gets there. I almost feel like the main character is the mental evolution of our protagonist instead of the protagonist, and that disinterests me.

I've always walked this weird line of how much action is too much action, and how much description is too much description. And for me, here, I didn't really get enough of either. It seemed to be a release of concepts more than a story.

I'll be to part three soon. Pretty good job on the suspense, although, for an alliance of extraordinary individuals, you'd think they'd be smart enough to kill him

Title article: Awakening of Minds (part one)
Date: 2008-06-03 17:52:52

needs, especially a short story, is a character as quick as he/she is deep.

The point of this section is obviously how he achieves this advanced thought and talent, but it stretches things out too much for me. It's hard to stick with it.

Overall, as an opening to a bigger piece, I'm not sure whether I would continue reading it (I'm going to regardless, but for the sake of being an unprompted reader). I'm thinking that I would open up the second part and skim it to see if more happens in the way of action or character, as opposed to conceptual things.

I did like the ending though. I can't continue to part two today as for I'm a busy man, but I'll be there soon.

Keep on keeping on.
-CS.

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