Love Crawls Down the Drain

I can't believe she broke up with me! After five years...

Her Magic Touch, Chapter 3

She doesn't sleep well that night. Obviously...
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Website/Blog: www.voicesnet.org/displayonepoem.aspx?poemid=133749
About Myself: "I'm not bad, I'm just drawn that way...."

The world is perfect with the right man holding me tight and whispering in my ear, I love and you and want to take care of you forever.....And if you believe that load of crap then you are just as fucking delusional as I am.

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DateTitleCategoryHits
Oct 10, 2008It's a Matter of ImportanceRomance 139
Oct 3, 2008MiseryPoetry 219
Sep 25, 2008But Did He?Poetry 391
Sep 15, 2008May and DecemberPoetry 607
Sep 10, 2008WhoreMiscellaneous Stories 904
Aug 22, 2008My PresentPoetry 493
Aug 13, 2008The DragonPoetry 966
Aug 5, 2008PassionRomance 1245
Jul 8, 2008The LetterRomance 883
Jun 5, 2008What Am I?Poetry 452
Jun 2, 2008More ImportantPoetry 350
May 30, 2008The Boys in Her LifePoetry 371
May 19, 2008Number 1Poetry 436
May 19, 2008Why Do I CryPoetry 708
May 5, 2008True Love MeansPoetry 566
May 5, 20081500 DaysRomance 560
May 2, 2008The Dance of LoversRomance 567
May 1, 2008When I know that you love mePoetry 349
Apr 7, 2008I want to BelievePoetry 536
Mar 31, 2008You Won't Talk to MePoetry 401
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Title article: Lasting Love
Date: 2008-10-02 07:20:35

Beautiful, sweet, simple and vry touching. I loved the message that you show in these few words. Proves that love is more than flowery poetic words, it is a feeling between two people.

Title article: A Mothers' Life
Date: 2008-10-01 18:42:46

Beautiful story and pretty decently written. It isn't fair those that have to suffer while other live a depraved life. great job on this story.....

Title article: I Will Lay In Vain
Date: 2008-10-01 17:38:29

Wow, there's hatred towards a LOT of different subjects here. Are you feeling aniti American, Anti God, Anti War, Anti teenager, anti-sex or anti love in this poem. Wow...you might want to pick one subject and stick to it....

Title article: Passing On The Stairs
Date: 2008-10-01 14:00:51

Very powerful, I sense the tension between the two former lovers. Isn't this always the way...to pretend to act civil when all we want to do is rip their eyes out? Your writing is very mature...

Title article: the marble
Date: 2008-10-01 13:11:48

You knack for description is impeccible. You describe them and the emotions they give off woithout fail. The only thing that I see that I would work on is the choppiness of some of your sentences. The opening paragraph seemed a little stilted to me, but then it faded into a lovely view of the world around the narrator

Title article: There You Are
Date: 2008-10-01 13:03:29

This is a peautiful poem and I agree one of your best, though there have been several by you. I love the above worldliness you gave his love. That she is almost etherial...wish someone would think of me that way. Great Job!

Title article: A WALK IN THE PARK
Date: 2008-10-01 13:01:26

I remember reading this story...it was one of the first ones I read on this website. It is just as lovely now as it was then, if not more so. Glad to see it back up

Title article: Photograph
Date: 2008-10-01 12:56:52

How very sad. Very well written and so very true about the emotions that people feel for each other. Love is fickle isn't it? Somehow though, I think you need to work on the openings of your stories since they seem to be very stilted. Once you get going, you have a lovely smoothness to your writing

Title article: Puppets
Date: 2008-10-01 12:32:30

It was weird and I got lost, not the first time I am sure, but I did like it a lot. Lots of metaphors in this one. I would clear up the end just a little bit since I am not the only one that seems to have gotten lost!

Title article: Autumn Comes Again
Date: 2008-10-01 11:39:28

Yeah autumn always brings back memories of my childhood more than any other season. I think it is the back to school thing. At first I wondered if you were using Autumn as a metaphor for something else, but then you went a different direction....love the nostalgia you have in here

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Lisa (antheerr)

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Thought I should say Hi seeing as you seem to rule the roost.

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Just thought I'd pop in and say hey....so hey.

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Hello fellow writer...

love your work

keep in touch

love and hugs xxx

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Birthday? Nobody told me.......errr Happy Birthday mama.

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Great stories, and your poems are great.

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