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Songs From A Fender Bender

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Michelle Huff (allmine)
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Member Since 01/22/2008
Last Online 10/11/2008
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Website/Blog: www.voicesnet.org/displayonepoem.aspx?poemid=133749
About Myself: "I'm not bad, I'm just drawn that way...."

The world is perfect with the right man holding me tight and whispering in my ear, I love and you and want to take care of you forever.....And if you believe that load of crap then you are just as fucking delusional as I am.

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Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Mar 19, 2008The Perfect GirlfriendRomance 1131
Mar 10, 2008Broken Promises and Shattered DreamsPoetry 487
Feb 27, 2008Cracked PerfectionRomance 748
Feb 21, 2008HerRomance 828
Feb 5, 2008She Loved HimRomance 1107
Jan 29, 2008Of Life - Part IIIRomance 371
Jan 28, 2008A Valentine for EllieRomance 981
Jan 23, 2008Of Life - Part IIRomance 472
Jan 22, 2008Of Life - Part IRomance 565
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Comments

Total number of comments: 488

Title article: Waiting on Time
Date: 2008-10-11 21:54:23

This is very good, such emotion. I would break it up into a couple of paragraphs. Also Jade's needs to be possesive. Ant the sentence where you say she has cancer is a little stilted sounding to me. Hey you asked for critisicm! And that's all I got....so great job, keep writing, you have a knack

Title article: Through the Eyes of Death
Date: 2008-10-11 21:51:36

Why is it everytime I post something, you feel the need to post something better? Huh huh huh? Great job, I loved the flowing style of the story...like an epic tale, almost Braveheartish in style. Splendid job.  
 
BTW - it really does need to be broken up into smaller paragraphs..the human brain realistically only reads so much.

Title article: To Become A Master
Date: 2008-10-11 21:32:32

I remember this story, you had it posted before did you not? Arrogance is never a trait that is wise to have, That's what makes me perfect..hahaha, j/k. Great story about whatever the word I am looking for here of some people who think they have it all

Title article: At My Funeral
Date: 2008-10-11 21:27:23

You are a crazy nut, and this is funny. Tim Duncan...hahaha. Have you ever noticed that Tim Duncan always looks like he has just found dumb for the first time? And I am a Spurs fan too....

Title article: Her Magic Touch, Chapter 4
Date: 2008-10-11 21:24:06

Much better with the changes. However when you talk about the blonde (that stupid b with an itch) I think you can leave offf the sentence, we'll get to her later. But it was a lot better....

Title article: Her Magic Touch, Chapter 5
Date: 2008-10-11 21:20:38

our author comments are hysterical. Yeah if they can afford to worry about their ED in the first place, then they can afford to buy her nice things. But it would be nice if she could find a man that loves her for her...Much better chapter!

Title article: It's a Matter of Importance
Date: 2008-10-11 21:06:07

No Potter, there is no wrong way...I mena that they were going to take the time to do it, rather than a wham bam thank you maam...you know, do it right....

Title article: Songs From A Fender Bender
Date: 2008-10-10 15:17:20

Yeah I'll say it again, his music is fantastic, you have got to check it out. It is so from the soul, and it cannot be expressed in words...so heart-touching

Title article: Neither Borrower nor Lender Be
Date: 2008-10-10 13:02:13

Ah for the love of your child....there is nothing more precious. Without the cigarette, you could have been describing me! I am on the no carb thing myself, I would die for some chocolate cake...

Title article: Have Conscience
Date: 2008-10-10 08:05:19

Interesting twist on the mind of a rapist. Problem is it's not their conscious, it's the fact that their reality is distorted. But this is a sick poem (sick being good in this case) and you got the scene so to speak right....

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Lisa (antheerr)

 Created On: 10/06/2008 03:45:39
Thought I should say Hi seeing as you seem to rule the roost.

r.e.potter (r.e.potter)

not sure where im at
 Created On: 09/29/2008 16:32:45
Just thought I'd pop in and say hey....so hey.

Helen Moore (HelentheCelt)

Far Far Away
 Created On: 09/10/2008 09:07:36
Hello fellow writer...

love your work

keep in touch

love and hugs xxx

Philip Neale (philneale1952)

Derbyshire
 Created On: 09/03/2008 06:52:38
Birthday? Nobody told me.......errr Happy Birthday mama.

Phil
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 Created On: 07/03/2008 21:16:54
A zombie wishes you a happy birthday!

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 Created On: 05/02/2008 06:14:08
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 Created On: 04/18/2008 00:28:59
I know who you are
Great stories, and your poems are great.

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