Her Magic Touch, Chapter 3

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Total number of comments: 48

Title article: A Night After Dinner.
Date: 2008-10-13 02:14:39

I think your generalization of waitress was a bit rough,I.m sure there are career ladies doing that job. From the description of your "hero" I think he should have tried to sleep with the woman he was with. He could be struggling to get anyone better.

Title article: Waiting on Time
Date: 2008-10-10 19:58:28

A lovely vignette on a young person's last moments. It invoked sympathy and compassion without the sloppy sentiments. A good little story, extremely well told. Well done!

Title article: The Devil you Know
Date: 2008-10-07 05:12:03

This is a clever story. The plot was original and well thought out. However I agree with Hodder, it seemed to me that you rushed to the ending, which was a shame, because the whole thing was very well written otherwise. 
I still enjoyed it. Keep writing, you have a nice style.

Title article: Wish ( Her lullyaby)
Date: 2008-10-04 05:18:12

It just goes to show. A poem (or story) doesn't have to be written in anything but plain, simple language to be enjoyable and inspirational. This is a delightful child's prayer. I loved it.

Title article: Photograph
Date: 2008-10-03 23:30:27

Beautifully told story, made even more poignant and real by your use of plain, simple language. I was there with the old man, feeling his pain and anguish. Congratulations and well done.

Title article: WORDS AFTER SEX.
Date: 2008-10-03 23:17:21

Use your imagination. What he said was hurtful. That's enough. 
"words like insects, biting at her flesh and mind" My God! what more do you need. A lovely, sad, poem.Well done Terry.

Title article: the marble
Date: 2008-10-03 05:03:50

Couldn't agree more. Wonderful, evocative descriptions that make the story come to life. "A smile that carved it's way into her dough skin........." Wow. Great writing. Well done.

Title article: Why, Daddy?
Date: 2008-09-30 03:13:22

Wonderful. One of the best pieces of writing I have read on this site. You have a talent for getting the atmosphere just right. Not too poignant or sentimental. Like I said, just right. Well done. Give us more.

Title article: Light Bringer
Date: 2008-09-24 05:18:33

very evocative writing.Did the lightbringer epitomise all mankind or am I putting my own construction on your story? Whatever, it was a thought provoking piece of work. 
Hate to nit pick but I hope you meant disdain, not distain. Well done.

Title article: You Can't Get There From Here
Date: 2008-09-24 02:44:35

well written story.If this is an actual happening, then I sympathise with the despatchers. 
Made me smile and entertained me at the same time.You have a good style and good use of words. 
Good job.

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