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About Myself:

I'm just a college student who probably spends too much time writing and not enough studying... Oh well. Have fun and Write on!

If there's a book you really want to read, but it hasn't been written yet, then you must write it. ~Toni Morrison

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Jun 23, 2008	Forbidden Magic	Adventure	136
Feb 7, 2008	Never Forget to Lock the Door	Poetry	238
Jan 27, 2008	Children of Dragons	Poetry	230
Jan 6, 2008	The House of Miss Black	Poetry	363
Jan 3, 2008	Deadly Music	Adventure	741

Comments

Total number of comments: 4

Title article: Never Forget to Lock the Door
Date: 2008-09-07 00:30:19

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*edit fixed fowl to foul
thanks for catching that
These are the ideas I had when witting this. Whether or not this is what the poem conveys is another story altogether
In the first set of lines I tried to set up the framework of the poem. 'My reality is safe, no one is to enter' the poem is about created a world inside one's own mind. And the 'portal' in and out of their mind is the door. They don't like other people, so they keep their mind shut and locked to new possibilities and friends. Because of that viewpoint on life, the place in his mind is one of stagnation. The water is frozen, never moving and the trees are dead
The person in the poem does not like the wind because wind brings change, I was thinking about the imagery of words travailing on wind. Change is bad.
The next part about the caves is just another reference about how inside his own head he is. He is deep within a cave of his own thoughts.
And naturally, he hates to leave and have to interact in the real world

Title article: Deadly Music
Date: 2008-01-09 20:19:32

oopss.
I guess the link is broken... Something about the spacing between the dashes posted incorrectly.

Title article: Deadly Music
Date: 2008-01-09 20:15:00

Thanks for all the comments! I really enjoyed writing this one. I was inspired by a picture I saw on Deviantart
http://noah-kh.deviantart.com/ art/bride-of-lasducifer- 11242427

Title article: Lessons
Date: 2008-01-06 08:11:12

An interesting story. I like the idea of a supernatural being gaining it's own personality by coexisting and living out human lives. I feel the best attribute of your story is in the details of the old man hospital scene. You really paint a vivid picture of a man who has given up. My favorite detail in this scene is “The stained bed sheets that had bunched up…” I feel this line really sums up his life if you think about the bed sheets being like his soul. His soul is stained from killing the children, and has also become bunched up by only focusing on the guilt of his wrong doing. Like the bed sheets causing a large sore his bunched up emotions have also caused a very real and painful existence.

good job