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Member Since	12/20/2007
Last Online	08/29/2008
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Website/Blog:

stoneread.blogspot.com/

About Myself:

I have a lifelong love of reading and a secret desire to be an author, that my chronic bouts of procrastination have always managed to stall. I read The Lord of The Rings when I was nine, and from that most excellent starting point have always felt my favourite genre to be fantasy, although I consider the definition of fantasy to be as broad as the mind can wander. I would like to recommend the following authors: Brian Lumley, Katherine Kerr, Raymond E Feist, Robert Jordan, Jean M Auel, Anne Rice, Frank Herbert, Isaac Asimov and of course good ol' Tolkein. Wikipedia them or something, they're all excellent storytellers!

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Aug 25, 2008	Ode to Chaabuk	Poetry	203
Aug 24, 2008	Omniboredom	Poetry	71
Aug 17, 2008	Some Haiku's	Poetry	109
Jul 9, 2008	Death (thought I'd have a go)	Poetry	134
Jul 8, 2008	Wiggedy Wack	Poetry	254
Jun 30, 2008	Tired Avenue Dirkin/Anna Devine	Poetry	336
Jun 28, 2008	Jigsaw Poem	Miscellaneous Stories	173
Jun 12, 2008	For you	Poetry	171
May 18, 2008	Money: A life's worth	Miscellaneous Stories	391
May 3, 2008	New Topic # 5	Humor	229
Apr 20, 2008	Procrastinator	Poetry	316
Mar 17, 2008	Your Life	Poetry	290
Mar 11, 2008	End of Minds (part five)	Science Fiction	357
Feb 10, 2008	Magnets	Poetry	376
Feb 7, 2008	So there I was 5...	Humor	930
Feb 5, 2008	House of Minds (part four)	Science Fiction	485
Jan 31, 2008	Strength	Poetry	345
Jan 27, 2008	Deja vu	Humor	644
Jan 21, 2008	Battle of Minds (part three)	Science Fiction	482
Jan 16, 2008	Frogs in Slow Boiling Water	Poetry	464

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Comments

Title article: The Possessor of All, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-08-24 22:12:49

I liked the gentle nature of the wizard, made him seem very pure, to consider the pain of the herb. I would consider having something happen before you say 'to be continued' anything at all that hints at the next chapter enough to keep the reader wanting to read on
I love the name of the horse Marantha, such an original name

Title article: Her Face -- A Haiku
Date: 2008-08-24 21:59:51

I pictured my girlfriends face when I read this. If a haiku paints a mental picture, this one succeeded perfectly

Title article: The Possessor of All, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-08-24 21:48:42

For a first chapter, there was a lot of exposition. You might want to consider the idea that some of the explanations and scene setting can wait for other chapters. This was a lot of information to take in in one go, which can make it hard to follow.
I see some classic themes here, good vs evil, power and temptation, the holy grail (the ultimate prize). This shows that you have put a lot of thought into this story. In most great fantasies there is 'the dark one' and the agent of the light, tried and true characterisations, which bodes well for this story.

Title article: Suburban Hell
Date: 2008-08-24 21:29:54

That was riveting man, really good. I found myself wondering what the fuck was going on so badly that I could barely wait till the end. I have a suggestion: Give the man a choice to star in season 2, that way when he says no he gets shot. Otherwise the whole explanation from Mr Cole is unnecessary if he was only ever planning to shoot him. All in all a great story

Title article: A Toothy Tale
Date: 2008-08-24 21:10:21

I really really enjoyed this. I have worked in fruit and veg shops and listened to old couples arguing viciously over who said what and when about something as simple as "do we have any apples left at home?". I think the dynamics of the couple in this story are very common in a lot of relationships, when you find yourself arguing a point with your partner for no other reason than they 'might be wrong'. This story had a lot of accurate observations and was very entertaining.

Title article: A Child In The Garden
Date: 2008-08-24 20:48:26

Very interesting, and surreal. This had a biblical tone to the dialogue

Title article: As my mind falls apart
Date: 2008-08-24 20:45:08

I think I appreciate the theme here, but I cant help thinking you have limited the poem by choosing words that rhyme and writing the poem to fit them. "And hopefully these thoughts away from me will stream" seems like a poorly constructed line to me

Title article: PUT DOWN IN HULL (1965)
Date: 2008-08-24 20:39:29

It hard to judge this poem when I dont understand it. It rhymes well, and the wording wasn't inane, as far as I can tell

Title article: Brain Chatter
Date: 2008-08-24 20:37:08

This very different, and caught my attention. I often cant sleep from brain chatter like this. Good work

Title article: McFearless
Date: 2008-08-24 20:33:46

I liked this tale, very much reminds me of living fast dying young and leaving a beautiful corpse as a life motto. A lot of adrenaline junkies could relate to this tale. I think perhaps dominic's reactions to mcfearless' life threatening behaviour was unlikely, I myself would have at least been mad at him

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08/25/2008 23:04:03	Re:How Do You?	Off-Topic	722
08/25/2008 09:42:14	Re:Ahahaha	Off-Topic	9291
08/24/2008 21:00:20	Re:pinky and the brain	Off-Topic	295
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08/22/2008 00:08:53	Re:THATS IT!! I CALL Shenanigans	Off-Topic	2333
08/22/2008 00:07:17	Re:pinky and the brain	Off-Topic	295
07/13/2008 07:50:29	Re:Ahahaha	Off-Topic	9291
07/09/2008 19:41:07	Re:Let's clear the air	Off-Topic	1195
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Connection

Mugen (Dirkin)'s connections

Project 30 (Project 30)

Jason Haugh (Something Indecent)

fabian villegas (fevilleg)

jesse (jesse2008)

Anna DeVine (Sad Sara)

CARMEN WRIGHT (20CARMEN_NiCOLE11)

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

Alamo St-Jean (The_Gimp)

JS Brown (Crazy Scott)

Patrick O. (Roadkill315)

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Guestbook

Name	Entry
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 08/11/2008 15:14:41 Yeah, it's gonna have a lot more of a fantasy plot. I'm about to start the prologue in a little bit, and work out the plot some more.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 08/10/2008 19:08:36 Hehe enjoy! I think it turned out great. There is a sequel in the talks. You think you'd be interested in doing another chapter?
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 08/09/2008 19:16:19 Hey, man, what's going on? You havent posted any stories (other then Project 30) in a really long time. I miss your writing.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 07/26/2008 05:31:34 Lets see, you got me addicted to Cracked as if it was really Crack...now you're tellin me about a free game online...damn you.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 07/14/2008 16:34:05 Dude, this has been bugging me forever. What game is your picture from?
C.D.Walker (indianaman130)	Created On: 07/09/2008 16:24:48 The only authors i haven't read from your list are Kerr and Auel. Shame about Jordan, started reading the Wheel in 98.
jesse (jesse2008) Blog	Created On: 07/05/2008 19:02:38 Very nice work Dirkin. You should update that blog, I'll would be glad to link up. But, that's beside the point. You keep on writing, you're doing a hell of a job.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) a wasteland	Created On: 07/02/2008 22:33:51 A zombie says hurry the hell up with new literal man story
Lori Branson (lorislittlesecret) right now...not sure...	Created On: 05/04/2008 08:54:51 Nope..not me, you!
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/02/2008 07:08:16 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 05/25/2008 19:59:19 Okay, here's a better one: Why don't Monsters eat Clowns? Because they taste funny. Heh... Feedback from Mugen (Dirkin): Hmm i don't know any mexican jokes... (aussie), try this: why did the boy fall off the swingset? he had no arms.