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Member Since	12/20/2007
Last Online	10/07/2008
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About Myself:	I love writing, I love reading aswell. My favourite books are Pride & Predudice, Cathy's boook, Cathy's Key, and the twilight series. I live in England. I'm studying Art at college. I'm 16 years old. I love Slipknot more than any other band. I like dogs more than cats.

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Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Oct 3, 2008	Darkening shore	Poetry	75
Sep 26, 2008	To the love of my life	Poetry	137
Sep 18, 2008	InMe	Poetry	142
Sep 17, 2008	The Lady and the Maid	Romance	183
Sep 15, 2008	Stalker, Chapter 2	Horror	107
Sep 8, 2008	Stalker, Chapter 1	Horror	148
Aug 30, 2008	Skin	Horror	187
Aug 26, 2008	Paranoid/Forget	Miscellaneous Stories	139
Aug 23, 2008	The coast	Poetry	168
Aug 20, 2008	in your eyes short	Poetry	129
Aug 17, 2008	Heaven Sent, chapter 4/4	Romance	142
Aug 16, 2008	Goodbye, my lover	Poetry	173
Jul 26, 2008	I am alone - the story	Horror	316
Jul 25, 2008	I am alone - the poem, read this before the story	Poetry	398
Jul 23, 2008	Heavan Sent, chapter 3/4	Horror	121
Jul 22, 2008	Heavan Sent, chapter 2/4	Romance	144
Jul 17, 2008	Until we meet again...	Poetry	278
Jul 9, 2008	A cruel passion	Horror	220
Jul 8, 2008	In the heart, Chapter 2	Horror	110
Jul 1, 2008	Question of Love	Poetry	183

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Comments

Title article: If The Sun Didn't Rise
Date: 2008-09-16 07:14:19

wow
This story is really well written, and my eyes stung by the end. Very touching - makes me feel sort of miserable :-) I really loved this and it still lingers with me now.

Nice

Jessica

Title article: RefUGe
Date: 2008-09-15 04:50:17

Brilliant!
Wow, I really liked how you wrote this. It is so blunt yet so true that it really hits me (the reader) really hard. were you referring to the Social problems, because I got that impression, and if so, you did it well.

Good stuff!

Jess

Title article: A Long Time Ago
Date: 2008-09-01 02:20:25

Very nice.
I really really liked this poem. I found that it flowed with ease and that every sentence hit me with the same kind of feeling. This poem Tells of the suffering of the woman staring out of the window, of the agony she feels. The last verse adds that it is often to late to stop something like suffering.
A minor thing you could do to improve this would be to add more about how she is suffering? Maybe you could add a part from a different persons POV? but along the same lines?

Jess

Very Nice!!

Jess

Title article: The Dragon
Date: 2008-08-25 11:25:51

nice.
I liked how you twisted the usual fairy-tale-situation so that the prince was the baddie and not an old hag or a monster as usually is the case. The only thing you can maybe improve on the rhyming, but this is only minor and unnecessay.

Keep trying!

Jessica

Title article: Hoping The Sun Doesn't Rise
Date: 2008-08-24 10:17:09

Good.
I think this poem was good. I think this because it flows well and makes the reader think about it. Some of the rhyming might have been better, but only slightly. I think you did a good job in writing this but you could create a longer poem maybe?

It's a great poem by the way.

Good job

Jessica

Title article: bottled UP
Date: 2008-08-24 10:10:20

Nice
I read the poem and I was like, Wow. This poem is really well written and flows well. I think that the way you set out the poem really adds to the appeal of the poem. In a way, writing it in a free verse makes the reader concentrate more on the words.

You're a really great writer, WELL DONE!! I love it!!

Jessica

Title article: POETRY: MY SUICIDAL KISSES
Date: 2008-08-23 07:40:04

nice.
this is really intresting. I like the way you chose to set this poem out in little bite size pieces, instead of one looonnnggg verse that might have detracted from the impact that this poem has. The idea of explaining words is a nice idea too.
Maybe you could expand on this idea more? I think you should :-)

Well done! I love this!

Jessica

Title article: Before you land
Date: 2008-08-23 07:34:16

nice.
I liked this very much, it is quick paced but you still can create a image in your head of what is happenning. I liked the way you used the last word of a line in the next one, it was very effective and improved the quality.

Good poem you have here!

Jessica

Title article: i could have loved no more!
Date: 2008-08-21 13:28:24

Nice
Nicly written: I liked the way you wrote it using plenty of description. I liked the images you created and I found that I could easily picture in my head.
Well done! Keep writing like this!

Title article: A Date with Priya
Date: 2008-08-18 12:58:26

nice
I enjoyed this very much, I thought that the way you took the time to set the scene was really effective; I found the pace perfect, you could have skipped through without much detail, but you didn't, which was good. Your a skilled writer, you should write more like this!

*Thumbs up*

Jess

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