Hoping The Sun Doesn't Rise

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Jessica S,A. (Forsaken)
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Member Since 12/20/2007
Last Online 08/21/2008
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About Myself: I love writing, I love reading aswell. My favourite books are Pride & Predudice, Cathy's boook, Cathy's Key, and the twilight series. I live in England. I'm 16 years old. I love Slipknot. I like dogs more than cats.

Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Apr 15, 2008Forsaken 2Romance 557
Apr 30, 2008The Special Spoon :-PHumor 481
May 4, 2008TrappedHorror 415
May 19, 2008A Violent PassionHorror 338
May 20, 2008To die... Is not to die, Chapter 1Horror 327
Jul 25, 2008I am alone - the poem, read this before the storyPoetry 280
Jun 14, 2008Blood Price, Chapter 1Horror 272
Apr 4, 2008StarlightRomance 256
Apr 8, 2008NightmareMiscellaneous Stories 253
Apr 29, 2008ForSakenRomance 249
Jul 26, 2008I am alone - the storyHorror 247
May 19, 2008HatePoetry 241
Jul 17, 2008Until we meet again...Poetry 235
Jun 1, 2008Heaven Sent, chapter 1/4Romance 214
May 9, 2008ForSaken 3Romance 196
Jun 8, 2008At The End there is NothingMiscellaneous Stories 191
Jul 9, 2008A cruel passionHorror 181
Jun 9, 2008In the heart - chapter 1, Chapter 1Romance 178
May 27, 2008I'm sorryPoetry 176
May 11, 2008The ForSaken TrilogyHorror 164
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Total number of comments: 49

Title article: i could have loved no more!
Date: 2008-08-21 13:28:24
Nice
Nicly written: I liked the way you wrote it using plenty of description. I liked the images you created and I found that I could easily picture in my head. 
Well done! Keep writing like this!

Title article: A Date with Priya
Date: 2008-08-18 12:58:26
nice
I enjoyed this very much, I thought that the way you took the time to set the scene was really effective; I found the pace perfect, you could have skipped through without much detail, but you didn't, which was good. Your a skilled writer, you should write more like this! 
 
*Thumbs up* 
 
Jess

Title article: The Gift - Awakening
Date: 2008-08-17 13:16:36
hmmm
Sorry, but I think you need to work on this. I think you used the wrong kind of imagery for what is happening to him; people can inturprate seizurs in different ways, and reading this part made me uncomfortable and eager to skip to the end. I do think you have a good story here. Just needs alittle work is all. 
 
Jessica

Title article: gone was the girl
Date: 2008-08-17 12:52:54
Nice.
I liked this poem alot. I liked how you repeated the same line, the title, through out. It gave the poem a rythem and though it did not rhyme, helped the words fit well within the verses. It was really nice, there was one thing you might want to work upon, maybe you could explore further with her life and what it's like: maybe something along the lines of cinderella's? 
 
Hope this helps 
 
Jess

Title article: The Beast and the Wicked Witch
Date: 2008-08-17 12:44:50
confused
Sorry but I'm a little confused. I don't have anything bad to say about it though. I am liking the way you familiarised it with the different fairy tails by using the same kind of antagonist. a witch.

Title article: The Smell of Fear
Date: 2008-08-17 07:05:14
cute
This was really cute, it's nice n' light hearted which makes for a pleasant read :) I found myself laughing, which I really liked because it's such good quality writing. 
 
Good one! 
 
Jess

Title article: A Love Poem
Date: 2008-08-17 04:52:24
Beautiful
Beautiful poem, I don't know what girl wouldn't love this, I know I do. This poem is really well written, the rythem is the same throughout and the words are passionate. 
 
Love it 
 
Jess

Title article: WHY must I write
Date: 2008-08-16 13:25:46
Nice.
ooo I like this one. It's simple, yet I am left thinking about after I've finished reading it. I'm sure this poem puts into words how most of us writers feel; that we simply WANT to write because it's what we enjoy. It's clever to make it short because then people remember it  
 
Really nice work  
 
Jessica

Title article: The Most Epic Story Ever Heard
Date: 2008-08-16 09:49:15
Hmmm
Well, I'm a bit confused here. I doesn't really flow and some of the rhyming seems a bit forced (for the sake of rhyming) but I think your very nearly there to making this a good poem. Maybe you could rephrase some of the lines?  
I liked how the narrator seemed to be confessing some secret unwillingly. 
It's like he is under interigation.  
Keep trying! 
 
Jess

Title article: Painful Words
Date: 2008-08-16 09:42:04
Nice
I really liked this, I read this and I was like, 'the narrator must really feel sore about whoever he is telling this too because the wording makes me sympathise with him, in that it tells of heartbreak. The whole poem is really well written. 
 
Good work! 
 
Jessica

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