The Lottery

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DateTitleCategoryHits
Oct 9, 2008Mystery AvengerMiscellaneous Stories 35
Mar 25, 2008Santa SmithMiscellaneous Stories 140
Feb 18, 2008Sin of OmissionMiscellaneous Stories 206
Feb 8, 2008Chance EncounterRomance 312
Feb 8, 2008The Crows of Kille ManjaroMystery 284
Feb 7, 2008PigeonsMiscellaneous Stories 244
Feb 5, 2008Presents from the PastMiscellaneous Stories 176
Feb 3, 2008BirthdayMiscellaneous Stories 251
Jan 22, 2008Christmas HealingRomance 238
Jan 13, 2008ChinookMiscellaneous Stories 291
Dec 1, 2007Oleander EveningsRomance 487
Dec 1, 2007The Rebirth of Monty PrikleworthHumor 400

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Title article: Red Hair
Date: 2008-01-22 08:14:27

Good story. could be made even better by tightening it up a little.

Title article: Hot
Date: 2008-01-22 08:00:34

Big build up ending with a whimper.

Title article: The Race
Date: 2008-01-22 07:48:59

Short and funny. Mixed tenses in places but nothing that a good proofreading can't correct.

Title article: Don't Worry, Just Procrastinate
Date: 2008-01-22 07:45:48

If Mitch had money what the heck was he doing sharing an apartment with this loser! Sorry - did not find it too amusing.

Title article: The Room
Date: 2008-01-22 07:23:22

Germ of a good Kafkaesque idea. Vaguely reminiscent of Poe's "The Pit and the Pendulum" without the tension. Mixed tenses, wrong verbs in places.

Title article: Pugna pro diligo, secui 1
Date: 2008-01-18 13:25:59

Not bad.  
Proofreading would have picked up where "you're" was used instead of "your." Common - but irritating mistake.

Title article: Loneliness
Date: 2008-01-17 03:07:28

I wanted more. However, I think that leaving readers to make up their own ending is a good technique.

Title article: Hitler
Date: 2008-01-16 11:10:41

I'm afraid I found this disturbing - sick even.

Title article: Chinook
Date: 2008-01-16 10:50:59
Thanks
Thanks for the feedback..... and to black187, just wanted to let you know that the real Chinook who inspired this did die - we had to put him down due to kindney failure and cancer - now that made a grown man cry!!

Title article: God's Will
Date: 2008-01-13 09:25:46
Interesting
The conflict between the renewed hope of the protagonist and the tragic end so soon following his 'rebirth' is what makes this story darkly interesting. I enjoyed it. Needed some proofreading to pick up some minor errors but good!

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