Through The Eyes of Death

England 1066 (Dawn)...

Her Magic Touch, Chapter 3

She doesn't sleep well that night. Obviously...
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Total number of comments: 52

Title article: Dank Pasta
Date: 2008-10-09 07:55:16

The idea of a story about such a simple thing as a craving for pasta is intriguing and shows that inspiration can develop from anything. I felt that the story would have worked better without the obvious 'over the top' exaggerated descriptions and/or adjectives. Nevertheless, there was an interesting, underlying sense of mystery in it. What went on the night before? Why is the main character so seemingly 'broke?' Where does he live to have immediate neighbours, yet be seven miles away from the nearest store selling basic groceries? Is the dreaded 'mould' a symbol for something more sinister? And finally, why 'pasta' of all things?

Title article: Winning The Frog Lottery
Date: 2008-10-09 07:39:40

This left me unimpressed. I guess one can call it experimental. Still not much in it for me. Sorry.

Title article: The Visitor
Date: 2008-09-07 05:00:17

I enjoyed this. True there wasn't too much to it but it dealt with a difficult subject. Show promise and I would like to read more by this author.

Title article: A NIGHT IN PARIS.
Date: 2008-09-07 04:54:06

I found this difficult to read. Maybe it's because of the type of font used and the fact that there were no paragraphs. Also, it would have benefited from a spell check. Is this perhaps because it is an 'experimental' story?

Title article: The Fall of Tone & The Beast of Vag
Date: 2008-07-04 06:34:10

Alfred had it down pat - pathetic. no other word for it. I could not even go beyond the first paragraph!

Title article: The Lock
Date: 2008-05-21 06:07:36
I'm sure.....
I'm sure it's quite good. If only I could read it......

Title article: Together in Death
Date: 2008-05-21 05:55:01
Sad and bitter
A sad and bitter tale but it's mainly bitterness that comes through. Bitterness and a sense of revenge for what basically is one's own stupid mistakes. 
 
Not too bad as a story but it would have benefited from careful proofreading to avoid confusion in tenses, spelling mistakes and other typos, which together make a piece of writing feel sloppy.

Title article: Chinook
Date: 2008-04-14 01:30:38
Thanks
'Crazy Scott.' Thanks for your kind comment.

Title article: Neighbourhood Watch
Date: 2008-03-26 07:07:00

Liked the ending.

Title article: The stolen car
Date: 2008-03-25 07:28:04

On the whole OK but as the others said, the relationship between the characters was pretty obvious. I too kept on reading and the final paragraphs were worth it but could have done with some editing. I think leaving out the last sentence makes the former two more powerful.

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