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Joseph Galea (darknstormy)
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Member Since 12/01/2007
Last Online 07/11/2008
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DateTitleCategoryHits
Mar 25, 2008Santa SmithMiscellaneous Stories 119
Feb 18, 2008Sin of OmissionMiscellaneous Stories 196
Feb 8, 2008Chance EncounterRomance 293
Feb 8, 2008The Crows of Kille ManjaroMystery 266
Feb 7, 2008PigeonsMiscellaneous Stories 226
Feb 5, 2008Presents from the PastMiscellaneous Stories 164
Feb 3, 2008BirthdayMiscellaneous Stories 232
Jan 22, 2008Christmas HealingRomance 222
Jan 13, 2008ChinookMiscellaneous Stories 270
Dec 1, 2007Oleander EveningsRomance 464
Dec 1, 2007The Rebirth of Monty PrikleworthHumor 381

Comments

Title article: The Room
Date: 2008-01-22 07:23:22

Germ of a good Kafkaesque idea. Vaguely reminiscent of Poe's "The Pit and the Pendulum" without the tension. Mixed tenses, wrong verbs in places.

Title article: Pugna pro diligo, secui 1
Date: 2008-01-18 13:25:59

Not bad.  
Proofreading would have picked up where "you're" was used instead of "your." Common - but irritating mistake.

Title article: Loneliness
Date: 2008-01-17 03:07:28

I wanted more. However, I think that leaving readers to make up their own ending is a good technique.

Title article: Hitler
Date: 2008-01-16 11:10:41

I'm afraid I found this disturbing - sick even.

Title article: Chinook
Date: 2008-01-16 10:50:59
Thanks
Thanks for the feedback..... and to black187, just wanted to let you know that the real Chinook who inspired this did die - we had to put him down due to kindney failure and cancer - now that made a grown man cry!!

Title article: God's Will
Date: 2008-01-13 09:25:46
Interesting
The conflict between the renewed hope of the protagonist and the tragic end so soon following his 'rebirth' is what makes this story darkly interesting. I enjoyed it. Needed some proofreading to pick up some minor errors but good!

Title article: Kitty
Date: 2008-01-13 09:15:00
Unfinished
The story had great potential but it went unexploited. It just felt unfinished.

Title article: Regret
Date: 2008-01-13 09:11:04
Regret
Regretfully I found the transition from the first part of the story to the last part somewhat uneasy It confused me a little- although I like stories that end with an unexpected twist. This could have been more unexpected. Some spelling errors.

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