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Daniel (thickblueline)
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About Myself: I'm a new writer, looking for feedback. I enjoy writing short stories, but novel writing is my passion. Now if I can just stick with one long enough to finish it. I'm a police officer, if you couldn't tell by my username, so I write about what I know. Thanks for reading

Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Jan 7, 2009Rookie, Chapter 29Miscellaneous Stories 40
Jan 5, 2009Rookie, Chapter 28Miscellaneous Stories 62
Jan 5, 2009Rookie, Chapter 27Miscellaneous Stories 55
Jan 2, 2009Rookie, Chapter 26Miscellaneous Stories 64
Dec 31, 2008Rookie, Chapter 25Miscellaneous Stories 52
Dec 30, 2008Be Good for Goodnes SakeMiscellaneous Stories 57
Dec 29, 2008Rookie, Chapter 24Miscellaneous Stories 60
Dec 27, 2008Rookie, Chapter 23Miscellaneous Stories 63
Dec 24, 2008Rookie, Chapter 22Miscellaneous Stories 79
Dec 23, 2008Rookie, Chapter 21Miscellaneous Stories 72
Dec 15, 2008Rookie, Chapter 20Miscellaneous Stories 80
Nov 27, 2008Snapshot, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 102
Nov 23, 2008Rookie, Chapter 19Miscellaneous Stories 86
Nov 22, 2008Rookie, Chapter 18Miscellaneous Stories 83
Nov 22, 2008Rookie, Chapter 17Miscellaneous Stories 70
Nov 21, 2008Rookie, Chapter 16Miscellaneous Stories 90
Nov 17, 2008Santa's Little Helper, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 120
Nov 9, 2008Rookie, Chapter 15Miscellaneous Stories 102
Nov 8, 2008ChosenMiscellaneous Stories 224
Nov 8, 2008Rookie, Chapter 14Miscellaneous Stories 105
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Comments

Title article: Ugly Innocence, Chapter 8
Date: 2008-12-24 15:37:23
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Ditto to every one of these last comments. Not only did you create the perfect relationship, you created the perfect mother figure, drawing I'm sure from your own experience. Bravo

Title article: Ugly Innocence, Chapter 7
Date: 2008-12-24 15:34:37
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How sweet this is. Even as I'm reading I find myself rooting for poor ole Sammy. This is another wonderful example of the quality of writing that I expect from you.

Title article: Ugly Innocence, Chapter 6
Date: 2008-12-24 15:27:33
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Wow, as a father of a 5 year old girl, I dread the thought of her becoming a teenager as I'm sure that every boy she meets will in fact be a true blue monster. Great writing as always

Title article: Ugly Innocence, Chapter 5
Date: 2008-12-24 15:16:43
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Sex and Romance in a monster story?? Sure. I'll go along with it. It is your story after all. And after seeing what you've done with this one, I feel safe committing the ending to your hands. Great job on this.

Title article: Ugly Innocence, Chapter 4
Date: 2008-12-24 15:13:13
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This is great. So much uniqueness has gone into this story. It's unlike anything that I've ever read. And I read a lot. I can't wait to see the rest. You've got a winner on your hands with this series.

Title article: Ugly Innocence, Chapter 3
Date: 2008-12-24 14:58:59
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I feel so sorry for the little guy. You've got so many questions buzzing about in my brain right now that I can't wait to click on the next chapter link, hoping some of them will be answered.

Title article: Ugly Innocence, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-12-24 14:53:16
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beautifully written and wonderfully told. You're spinning a yarn that I'm already addicted to and can't wait to read the rest.

Title article: Underground
Date: 2008-12-22 10:59:05
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Not a bad story. Definety a concept that you can build on and turn into a great story. I would suggest that you read over it and correct some of the spelling and grammar mistakes that I found. I would also recomend that you read other books and short stories in the same genre as the one you have written to observe the language, word usage, and prose that the other authors use.

Title article: Ugly Innocence, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-12-15 16:19:19
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I love this. This is really an unusual premise for a story and I love the way you built up the suspense at the beginning. I can't wait to read the rest of them

Title article: Semi-Conscience
Date: 2008-12-15 15:13:02
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This was a neat premise by just throwing us into the action. It really drew the reader in by trying to stick with the story and figure out what happens next. I would suggest that next time you develop the main character a little bit more. Describe the pain he is feeling more. What is going through his head? You have a good hook but it is those things that keep the reader feeling like he is living the story.

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01/04/2009 19:19:37Re:The RookieOff-Topic238
12/24/2008 14:42:40Re:Merry Christmas!Off-Topic476
12/15/2008 20:55:42Novella'sOff-Topic159
12/15/2008 14:41:51Re:Gotta Site/Blog/Whatever? Let's see 'em!Off-Topic376
11/23/2008 19:01:39Re:HEEEEELLLLP!Off-Topic279
11/03/2008 15:32:59Re:I guess we all need a break sometimeOff-Topic168
11/03/2008 14:57:16I guess we all need a break sometimeOff-Topic168
10/24/2008 14:45:45Re:I must perservereOff-Topic910
10/21/2008 01:34:54I must perservereOff-Topic910
08/27/2008 01:35:17Re:How Do You?Off-Topic2970

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Philip Neale (philneale1952)

Derbyshire, England
 Created On: 01/01/2009 17:58:44
Can't believe I didn't do this already either.

Happy Easter!!!

Phil
Nathan Weaver (onyxdragon)

Missouri
 Created On: 11/17/2008 12:23:55
FYI, I uploaded the second chapter to "Going Nowhere." The 3rd coming soon.
Max Booth III (Chainsaw Enema)

 Created On: 11/10/2008 12:12:22
Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 11/10/2008 12:12:34
To be the first to sign, I shall say you are a great writer with loads of talent. Keep working on Rookie, cause in all truth, it's really good.

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