Her Magic Touch, Chapter 4

Remember the stunning blond that was offered a lap on...

Through The Eyes of Death

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About Myself: I'm a new writer, looking for feedback. I enjoy writing short stories, but novel writing is my passion. Now if I can just stick with one long enough to finish it. I'm a police officer, if you couldn't tell by my username, so I write about what I know. Thanks for reading

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Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Oct 7, 2008Alpha and OmegaMiscellaneous Stories 59
Oct 2, 2008A Killer in the HouseMiscellaneous Stories 78
Oct 1, 2008A Mothers' LifeMiscellaneous Stories 91
Sep 28, 2008Rookie, Chapter 8Miscellaneous Stories 63
Sep 27, 2008Rookie, Chapter 7Miscellaneous Stories 41
Sep 26, 2008Rookie, Chapter 6Miscellaneous Stories 52
Sep 23, 2008Rookie, Chapter 5Miscellaneous Stories 66
Sep 14, 2008Rookie, Chapter 4Miscellaneous Stories 73
Sep 13, 2008Rookie, Chapter 3Miscellaneous Stories 62
Sep 11, 2008Rookie, Chapter 2Miscellaneous Stories 91
Sep 9, 2008Jack Harker and the Ring of Merlin, Chapter 2Miscellaneous Stories 50
Sep 8, 2008Jack Harker and the Ring of Merlin, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 62
Aug 27, 2008Respite from hellHorror 116
Aug 26, 2008The EmissaryScience Fiction 135
Aug 19, 2008Rookie, Chapter OneMiscellaneous Stories 93
Jun 3, 2008Traffic JammedMiscellaneous Stories 197
May 24, 2008I'm the TerroristMiscellaneous Stories 256
May 10, 2008The Adventures of Phil, the Styrofoam Coffee CupHumor 234
May 3, 2008Hostile Addictions CH. 2. part oneMiscellaneous Stories 158
May 3, 2008Hostile Addictions CH. 1Miscellaneous Stories 152
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Total number of comments: 54

Title article: Sexy Angel
Date: 2008-10-07 02:47:06
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Either these were the twisted thoughts of a rapist as he did the deed, or how indecent he felt as he looked at a woman with lust in his eye. Perhaps you could make it a bit clearer

Title article: Internet Love
Date: 2008-10-07 02:43:32
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Good poem. I don't know much about poetry. But I know that this one touched me in a way that few others have. The internet has opened up a world to us. We should be careful how we use it

Title article: But Did He?
Date: 2008-10-02 20:18:14
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I don't usually comment on poetry, because it's not really my thing. But this one hit home. You used such simple words to make such a hard impact. Good job

Title article: Come Get Your Trailer
Date: 2008-10-02 20:16:50
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I found this so humorous because that is exactly the kind of thing to happen where I live. You captured the heart of the moment and gave a mundane object some humorous qualities

Title article: The Diary of the unknown Whore, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-09-28 16:34:46
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I have to concur with the above comment. I don't really know where you are going with this story. There isn't much in the way of plot and we don't know much about the main character. On the other hand, what you have written you have written well.

Title article: You Want What?
Date: 2008-09-28 16:32:35
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This was great. I loved the carefree attitude of the clerk and how the guy didn't even know what he wanted. Once again, I thoroughly enjoyed the ending.

Title article: Love Crawls Down the Drain
Date: 2008-09-28 00:53:52
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This was a rollercoaster. At first I felt sorry for the guy. Then I thought it might be a dream when all the spiders started crawling around. Then I just felt sorry for him again. Nice bit of writing

Title article: Acorns Don't Fall Far
Date: 2008-09-28 00:47:02
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I liked this. It brought a smile to my face. You described the characters without a bit of dialogue and brought them to life masterfully. The ending was priceless.

Title article: Gone
Date: 2008-09-28 00:42:27
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Sad. Enrapturing. Everything I belive you intended for it to be. Good writing. It started on a sad note, rose up and then plunged the reader back down with the character

Title article: ELIZA AND BETH.
Date: 2008-09-27 18:12:38
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I liked this. You really got a lot done with the characterization and the way the characters interacted with each other. Nice job on foreshadowing too.

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