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Website/Blog: www.philipneale.blogspot.com
About Myself: Accountant, 55, aspiring writer. Married 2 children, 2 cats (not married to the cats but they think they rule the roost). See gallery for more pictures - George was starting to demand appearance money so I relegated him to the background.......teach him to be sassy!

Ok, so we're pals again.........Hey George, see the nice reader? Kill !!!!!!

Started writing in July 2007 and found that I couldn't stop. Manuscripts now comprise 3 finished novels (60,000; 85,000; 65,000 words respectively) one in progress (currently 20,000), 2 compilations of short stories (total 100,000 words), and some messing around with poetry, although I must confess that it's not my favourite.

That started as limericks on birthday and anniversary cards and now I can't get off the hook.

If anyone knows of a cure............I may be interested (although not JUST yet).

First manuscript is now a finished and published novel "A Ticket to Tewkesbury" (see stories list for a preview and list of acknowledgements).


Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Jan 6, 2009At Your CommandHumor 93
Jan 2, 2009A Shot Too FarAdventure 104
Jan 1, 2009And Did These FeetHumor 92
Dec 28, 2008A Shot in the DarkAdventure 229
Dec 25, 2008Two Little Dicky Birds, Chapter 4Mystery 87
Dec 23, 2008Two Little Dicky Birds, Chapter 3Mystery 94
Dec 22, 2008FallingRomance 258
Dec 20, 2008Two Little Dicky Birds, Chapter 2Mystery 123
Nov 29, 2008A Deal of TroubleHorror 124
Nov 18, 2008AnniversaryPoetry 105
Nov 4, 2008Wishful Thinking - The Final Chapter, Chapter 7Horror 122
Nov 2, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 6Horror 148
Nov 2, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 5Horror 154
Oct 30, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 4Horror 165
Oct 29, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 3Horror 188
Oct 24, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 2Horror 208
Oct 20, 2008Ouch!Humor 322
Oct 9, 2008What Kind of Tool Am I?Humor 260
Oct 2, 2008Lasting LoveMiscellaneous Stories 247
Sep 29, 2008Wishful Thinking, Chapter 1Horror 604
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Full MarksNov 14, 2008

Comments

Title article: Philosophy and other stories
Date: 2009-01-07 05:57:36
Har dee har
Sorry Jipper, I just found this hilarious, and the kind of theing that the old can get away with with impunity. 
 
Ik, perhaps the box should have been ticked, buit then that may have skewed ny impression before getting down to reading. 
 
Nothing offensive, just an old woman's clear and sharp logic in the situation. 
 
Reminds me of the story of the guy who told his friend of the tragic death of his wife whilst she was out shopping for dinner. 
 
"Wow, that's terrible" he said "What did you do?" 
 
"Had to open a tin of soup!" came the reply. 
 
 
Awesome simplicity in the humour! Well told. 
 
Phil

Title article: The Island of Rambam
Date: 2009-01-07 05:52:09
Marks
Marks for the depth and meaning, but this was faaaaaar too deep for me. 
 
You've put a lot of effort into the work, and I feel such a schmuck for failing to fully appreciate what you've achieved. 
 
This is right up Terry's street (I'm supposing), but I just cannot stand in the same ray of sunshine when it comes to this sort of work. 
 
Made it through to the end though - it was the least I could do. 
 
Phil

Title article: Rentals
Date: 2009-01-07 05:32:21
Crazy
Weird and crazy story of "what if". 
 
You wrote this as if you had been through something similar, and there was a lot of detail in the devil. 
 
Found it highly amusing, especially the fight scene, and there is a need for more of this kind of fantasy stuff on the site. 
 
The trick is knowing where to kill the story. 
 
Phil

Title article: Traveling
Date: 2009-01-07 05:25:22
Good
Yes thios was good. It has a rocking chair rhythm to it, and I'm sure you designed it that way. 
 
This is MY kind of poetry - not arty-farty, just down to earth "Pam Ayres" stuff. 
 
Thanks. 
 
Phil

Title article: JULIA'S NIGHT OUT.
Date: 2009-01-07 05:23:10
Deveoping
This is developing into a very interesting serial. 
 
Usually with this kind of story, the plot doesn't extend much beyond on piece, but you're string us out very well. 
 
Lots of possible scenarios - father, boyfriend, her own insecurities after the operation. 
 
Who knows what's coming next......Terry does! 
 
Phil

Title article: Rookie, Chapter 29
Date: 2009-01-07 05:17:58
Knew it
I just knew that......when all seems calm, something comes along and man, were they surprised? 
 
Lots of action but it did seem a little rushed, and I gather from your PM that you were anxious to get this done and on the site. 
 
Its a great story, take your time and just let it flow. 
 
Phil

Title article: Order
Date: 2009-01-07 05:01:28
Hah!
Been there, seen it, done it, got the tee-shirt. 
 
Why can't people take responsibility and do for themselves? 
 
Nice little critique on eating habits. 
 
Phil

Title article: Diaologue
Date: 2009-01-07 04:59:30
Elements
Elementd of the Orwell novel "1984" in this one, and overall quite interesting. 
 
English is a very difficlut language to use, even if it is your native tongue, and you seem to be coping with it very well. 
 
Care with word choice would help, and a few examples are listed here: 
 
Coup up = cooped up 
 
Laps dogs = lap dogs 
 
Where = we're. (This is a really tricky one as there are several spellings, each meaning different things). 
 
worked = work 
 
 
Not a lot of tidying up, and you're doing well. 
 
Phil

Title article: The Dream (dialogue)
Date: 2009-01-07 04:49:36
Abrupt
The ending came rather too soon, and that spoiled an interstingly structured piece. 
 
Remeber to use parentheses ("") when using direct speech and try to space out paragraphs where different people are speaking. 
 
The plot developed well, but like Lorislittlesecret, I felt that there could be more to this story. 
 
Let your imagination go and just follow it. 
 
Phil

Title article: The Dream
Date: 2009-01-07 04:43:58
Suggestion
It might have been better to put the Dream and the Dream Dialogue closer together and treat them as chapters which would then prompt a link to the reader. 
 
Going to read the Dialogue before making any assessment, although this was an interesting start. 
 
You might want to look at some of your words choices and grammar - nothing major, but it hinders the flow a little. 
 
Phil

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Verthandi W. (Verthandi)

Created On: 01/07/2009 15:46:39

Hi there! n_n

I wanted to stop by and thank you (a lot!) for your comment!

Well, English isn’t my first language at all. I live in Venezuela so it’s Spanish all the way! (Though I hate it!).

I hope I haven’t made a lot of mistakes while writing, but I know there are still a lot of them ’cause as I read again every chapter I always find something I must fix. It’s quite nerve-wracking! Yet, it would mean the world to me if you could point those little things out, just so I can learn a bit more! n.n

I really hope you like the story. “Immortal Sonata” is not my kind of writing (actually it was originally a script for a movie I was planning!), but I must admit I started it and now I can’t stop! n_ñu

Anyway! Thanks a lot for reading my silly little story! n_n

Verthandi W.

PS: I shall be looking at your stories very soon! I see a lot of “Horror”! My kind of thing! Haha! n_=

Vincent Revaro (Surrealist)

Earth (For now...)
Created On: 11/26/2008 00:09:56

Hey, I'm somewhat new to the site, but in the short time I've been here I have found an amazing community. I was thrilled to read about your success in being able to publish a novel. Your success makes me question whether or not I'm getting into this writing thing too early! Maybe I should reconsider my choice of career. If we have our whole lives to be successful, why worry about starting now?

I hope you continue to compose and share the craft you have learned.

-Vincent
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Hey Vince

Shouldn't wory about the timing. You do it when you feel the need. I l;eft it until fairly late (56 now) but it's like a drug when you get going.

This is a great site, and I've let my attendance slip whilst working on the book but that's something that will change pretty soon.

There are some great writers on here, but everyone suffers the same fate - breaking into the agent/publisher club is not easy and over half of my submissions have been politely rejected - the other half didn't even bother to reply!

Finding my publisher was just a stroke of luck, and they've been VERY good. It really is a lottery.

The book is my second, but it's the first oen that's been done the correct commercial way. The other was on Lulu and is self-published so it's not widely known unless you realise exactly where it is.

Thanks for the sign-in.

Phil


Amie Kerlin (lemon)

Created On: 10/12/2008 16:53:04

Aparently I missed your birthday, so happy belated birthday.

I just thought I would drop in and say hi since I hadn't talked to you in FOREVER. I have so much reading to catch up on.
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Hey Lemon, not gone "sour" on me then?

Belated thanks

Phil


amanda (ams)

Created On: 10/01/2008 13:34:29

happy birthday!!!
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Belated thanks

Phil


Michelle Huff (allmine)

Not sure.....
Created On: 10/01/2008 09:17:48

HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): Golly, how did you know? It's really amazing that you knew..........so kind of you to remember an old man (!)

Phil


Lisa (antheerr)

England
Created On: 08/21/2008 14:07:32

I guess I'd better sign your guest book and say "Hi Dad".
You know what I think about your writing - I like most of them (except for the one about the spiders you horrid man!), and the ones I don't are just not my cup of tea rather than there being anything wrong with them. I like the ones I already know best, like the wine one, or the ones about George and Poppy and co, but that's because I already know the stories, but enjoy the way you tell them.
Anyway, keep going with it Dad - you need to start making some money though to pay for my lifestyle!!! Lisa

Max Booth III (Chainsaw Enema)

Created On: 08/08/2008 05:56:33

Wow.

You been reading all my stories and now I feel bad I've haven't read many of yours. That gonna change, though. Just read your 'Layers of Innocence' and that was brilliant. You are truely a talented writer, my friend. I think I might start on your 'Stick' series next.

Oh yeah, you can keep your cats. I'm allergic to them, they make me go blind.

Keep well,

Max
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): That's great because George says his passport is out of date anyway.

Phil


Christian Wright (FRANTIC)

WICKLOW
Created On: 08/06/2008 16:41:53

so youre from Derbyshire.Lived in Utoxeter, thats not too far from you is it.Anyway write on.
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): No, just up the road along the A50 - about half an hour.

Phil


Nathan Weaver (onyxdragon)

Missouri
Created On: 08/06/2008 09:59:46

I must say, I like Lulu as well. I haven't published on it, yet, though. I'm trying to finish writing and polishing a collection of short stories. I really like the way Lulu works. It's very nice. I'll have to go check your collection on Lulu out. Write on.

stickfigure (sTiCkFiGuRe)

lost in my mind
Created On: 07/30/2008 07:50:21

Sit back and breath...popping stories out faster then the Spears sisters. I read fast, but not THAT fast.
Feedback from Philip Neale (philneale1952): In take 'em while they're there........no fresh ideas for a day or so, but got a stock af three or four to keep me going.

Phil


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