Leaving

Leaving Fall has always been my...

Valentine's Day

There are times in our lives when it seems that Life...
Darby (corky994) Profile Page
Darby (corky994)
Hits 478
Online Status OFFLINE
Member Since 04/08/2008
Last Online 05/30/2008
Connections 0
Avg Profile Rating
 
About Myself: I am a recently retired attorney. I am brand new at writing short stories but I am excited to give it a try.

Stories


Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Apr 13, 2008Better than the auto clubRomance 241
Apr 10, 2008The death of a spyMystery 594
Apr 11, 2008The fuchsia dashikiAdventure 262

Comments

Total number of comments: 7

Title article: The fuchsia dashiki
Date: 2008-04-13 06:08:00
Thanks you
Thanks for commenting on the story and letting me know wha confused you. I think that should be easy to fix. Thanks again.

Title article: Product Of My Environment?
Date: 2008-04-11 11:31:27

Good character sketch. The diaglog was quite good. I thought there might be a little too much playing with wind outside the car.

Title article: The fuchsia dashiki
Date: 2008-04-11 11:01:27
Thank you
Thank you. I'm brand new at this and I appreciate you taking your time to comment.

Title article: The Mute Guitarist
Date: 2008-04-11 10:42:29
First Comment
I think it is a very nice story liine and an interesting character. I'm taking an on-line class in mystery writing and we have been learning about "hook"-leading sentences that pull the reader into the story. I think you could use one of those because it is hard for the reader to know where you are going with the story until the end.

Title article: The death of a spy
Date: 2008-04-10 13:23:11
Thankyou
Thank you for reading my story and the kind words.

Title article: The death of a spy
Date: 2008-04-10 13:22:07
thanks
Thanks for the kind words. I tried to make the Dad come across as crazy enough to justify Peter's actions but perhaps I need to revisit that.

Forum

This user has no forum posts.

Connection

This user has no current connections.

Guestbook



This user currently doesn't have any posts.

Pictures

Picture/Images uploaded by the member



No Items published in this profile gallery
 

Remove Ads