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The Adventures Of Pugswallow, Chapter 1

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Member Since	04/08/2008
Last Online	05/30/2008
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About Myself:

I am a recently retired attorney. I am brand new at writing short stories but I am excited to give it a try.

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Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Apr 13, 2008	Better than the auto club	Romance	231
Apr 11, 2008	The fuchsia dashiki	Adventure	256
Apr 10, 2008	The death of a spy	Mystery	566

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Total number of comments: 7

Title article: The fuchsia dashiki
Date: 2008-04-13 06:08:00

Thanks you
Thanks for commenting on the story and letting me know wha confused you. I think that should be easy to fix. Thanks again.

Title article: Product Of My Environment?
Date: 2008-04-11 11:31:27

Good character sketch. The diaglog was quite good. I thought there might be a little too much playing with wind outside the car.

Title article: The fuchsia dashiki
Date: 2008-04-11 11:01:27

Thank you
Thank you. I'm brand new at this and I appreciate you taking your time to comment.

Title article: The Mute Guitarist
Date: 2008-04-11 10:42:29

First Comment
I think it is a very nice story liine and an interesting character. I'm taking an on-line class in mystery writing and we have been learning about "hook"-leading sentences that pull the reader into the story. I think you could use one of those because it is hard for the reader to know where you are going with the story until the end.

Title article: The death of a spy
Date: 2008-04-10 13:23:11

Thankyou
Thank you for reading my story and the kind words.

Title article: The death of a spy
Date: 2008-04-10 13:22:07

thanks
Thanks for the kind words. I tried to make the Dad come across as crazy enough to justify Peter's actions but perhaps I need to revisit that.

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