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Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Aug 23, 2008	Life As He Knew It.	Miscellaneous Stories	75
Jul 20, 2008	Under The Stars.	Miscellaneous Stories	143
Jul 11, 2008	Unavoidable Detours Created By The Elderly.	Miscellaneous Stories	145
Jul 3, 2008	Honest Livings.	Miscellaneous Stories	136
Jun 22, 2008	Preferences.	Miscellaneous Stories	97
Jun 14, 2008	Velocity.	Miscellaneous Stories	114
Jun 11, 2008	Coffee Stains, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	231
Jun 8, 2008	Coffee Stains, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	497
May 25, 2008	His Favorite Chords.	Miscellaneous Stories	592
Apr 27, 2008	Admittedly, I Have Been Busy.	Miscellaneous Stories	278
Mar 19, 2008	11:11 And 11:12 Can Be Different	Miscellaneous Stories	518
Mar 14, 2008	Drops Of Rain.	Miscellaneous Stories	263
Mar 10, 2008	The Sunlight That Didn't Come Through The Blinds.	Miscellaneous Stories	297
Mar 8, 2008	How Dolan Quit His Job, Without Pronouncing His Name.	Miscellaneous Stories	275
Mar 6, 2008	You Can't Unring A Bell.	Miscellaneous Stories	277
Mar 5, 2008	The Strangest Places.	Miscellaneous Stories	269
Mar 4, 2008	A Man Possessed.	Miscellaneous Stories	228
Mar 2, 2008	There Are Many Ways (This Not Being One).	Miscellaneous Stories	255
Feb 28, 2008	It's Free. You Can't Get A Refund.	Miscellaneous Stories	334
Feb 27, 2008	One Is Always Enough.	Miscellaneous Stories	452

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Comments

Title article: Let Me In
Date: 2008-05-07 17:56:43

Hm.
I dislike the horror genre. Gotta' write what you gotta' write.
Keep on keeping on.
cS.

Title article: BillBored
Date: 2008-05-07 17:54:48

Ah. Going to limewire for music is part of the problem because it is sapping dollars straight out of
1) the record industry, which puts out new music and when it is losing money, and which will stick to reliable artists that will turn a buck in order for themselves to stay in business.
2) and the artists themselves, obviously. be they punk, randb, rap or fucking muddy waters himself.

I just started buying vinyl. Not only is it so full of quality substance and good art, it seems to be missing a lot of the singles era that we are so unfortunate to have thrust upon us.
I'll tell you an album to be bought.
Anything by Fake Problems. Have a good one.

Title article: Useless
Date: 2008-05-07 17:44:03

This seems like something that should be filed under non-fiction.

Title article: The alter ego
Date: 2008-05-07 17:42:45

I thought it could have been better. You dragged me into feeling pity for him at times, and suggested it at some (hoping you would do the latter more often).
The overall vision has been done before, and I think you need to change it so you make it your own, unique perspective on how this happened as opposed to a simple story on alter-egos and such.
I appreciate that you try and draw emotion without using violent change or anything like that. A good effort.

Keep on keeping on.
CS.

Title article: girl
Date: 2008-05-07 17:36:34

I like the brevity. It makes things that aren't crucial seem crucial.

Keep on keeping on, and hopefully, writing more.
CS.

Title article: never
Date: 2008-05-07 17:35:05

Hm.
A beginning in an ending.

Title article: never grow old
Date: 2008-05-06 15:58:39

That was a great transitional line with the casket falling.

I think that was the perfect length for a concise piece like this. I'm going to come back and see what else you have to offer after this.

Title article: A Quiet Isolation
Date: 2008-05-06 15:55:53

It nodded in and out of interesting to me.
It was very rich and emotional imagery, which for me is both good and bad because at times it was drawn out.
But this seems like the kind of thing that you aren't writing for readers.

I wish I had the attention span or the willpower to look back through the story and figure out what the photograph metaphorically stood for, because that seems like it should be an interesting point that doesn't jump out at the reader.

Keep on keeping on.
CS.

Title article: Split Seconds and Poison Emotions
Date: 2008-05-06 15:43:57

Eh. I have a problem with suicide stories because I always feel jipped out of an ending.
The characters were rigid. The only choice during the whole story was that she put up with him instead of killing herself. Creating choices is what creates tension, and ultimately, the desire to read.

Besides from the negative, the sentences were put together well and it was a smooth read. I'd work on the ability to create a story with many dynamics, maybe too many to start so you can get the idea.

Keep on keeping on.
CS.

Title article: Smoke, Steel, and Innuendo
Date: 2008-05-01 08:30:31

Drawing a line that orgasm and gunshot passes through is a dangerous game. People can make anything be anything else, but sometimes, you should only do it if they have enough in common to begin with.

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05/27/2008 09:10:25	Re:Comments: Tragedy and Good Intentions	Off-Topic	1300
05/26/2008 20:46:26	Comments: Tragedy and Good Intentions	Off-Topic	1300
05/21/2008 22:49:20	Re:Favorite Author	Off-Topic	3473
05/20/2008 11:12:23	Re:Writing Tips	Off-Topic	750
05/20/2008 11:11:48	Re:Writing Tips	Off-Topic	750
03/13/2008 23:12:52	Re:What do YOU do when planning stories?	Off-Topic	869
03/01/2008 01:58:42	Re:Appreciate it.	Off-Topic	626
02/29/2008 05:09:48	Appreciate it.	Off-Topic	626

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Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 07/19/2008 23:25:02 Edited By Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^) On: 07/19/2008 23:25:45 SPAZ
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) a wasteland	Created On: 07/05/2008 23:35:00 Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/05/2008 23:35:22 whoa! there seems to be some serious heat here. but i like the cold, so i'm moving on. see ya
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 06/17/2008 06:35:22 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/17/2008 06:36:00 White Tiger
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 06/13/2008 07:46:37 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/17/2008 06:36:32 Funny, I remember the conversation going more like this: >>>>>>>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>>>>>>>Eh, I'm bored. Goodbye. >>>>>>>>>> cookingWine wrote: >>>>>>>>>>>>Of course Juttabell, and you know that they only go "peuw peuw" for you! >>>>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>>>> Fanny Pack (i.e. you), not unless you have some lasers inside you. >>>>>>>>cookingWine wrote: >>>>>>>>>> You are so gracious Juttabell, please, may I compliment you on your anatomy? >>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>> Eh, sure you can be my fanny pack. >>>>cookingWine wrote: >>>>> Please Juttabell!
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 06/12/2008 13:40:22 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/13/2008 07:29:27 My fanny pack.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/28/2008 12:10:36 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 05/28/2008 12:12:32 Those aren't stink lines. It's the emanating glory that surrounds me.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/26/2008 15:09:22 I heard you don't bathe. Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): I heard it's just the reflective stink from you.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/25/2008 19:00:08 Edited By Jutta Motrin (CELL) On: 06/12/2008 14:06:40 to answer your question, if the air around Earth froze it'd look like a cube, and then Subzero Earth would get placed inside an ice cube tray. I dunno why, would definitely eliminate an ice cube tray's purpose, but well, that's just what I heard... you know, just from around... Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): I heard you suck.
Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)	Created On: 05/13/2008 17:46:01 Hello, ugly.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 04/30/2008 13:08:03 You can go fuck yourself. And then go pour another glass of that boring wine. Feedback from Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine): Cheers!