Cassandra's House, Chapter 1

CASSANDRA'S HOUSE Chapter One...

Broken Glass

The first thing Pamela noticed when she opened her...
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About Myself: I'm a 30-something living in North Carolina. I write for fun, and am looking for some critiques.

My literary heros include Stephen King, Dean Koontz, John Saul, and E.A. Poe. If you are looking for a really good short story, check out Dean Koontz's "Kittens" from his book Strange Highways. Also, check out Raymond Carver's "Little Things" (aka "Popular Mechanics"). And, if you can find it, a short called "The Old Black Hat" by Gary Raisor. Classic.

Also, for reading material, I enjoy comic books. Not only the Spider-Man, Batman, X-Men variety, but also Calvin and Hobbes, Zits, and Non-Sequitor. Some good reading right there, I tell you.

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Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Jun 14, 2008One Night at Denny'sHumor 226
Feb 16, 2008FulfilledHorror 521
Jun 12, 2008Old Habits Die HardMiscellaneous Stories 297
Jul 11, 2008Thoughts from a LoserPoetry 217
Jul 7, 2008DeathPoetry 173
Jun 17, 2008Sweet PerfumePoetry 208
Jun 16, 2008May Before NovemberPoetry 140
Jun 14, 2008House of PainPoetry 149

Comments

Total number of comments: 186

Title article: you let me die
Date: 2008-12-14 22:05:20

I agree with what everyone else is saying, but I also want to add this: you couldn't have picked a better location for your poem. Carnivals/circuses can be fun, but, if looked at in a different light, they can be incredibly creepy. You brought the creepiness out. 
Keep up the good work.

Title article: Moonscape
Date: 2008-12-13 00:03:15

Its been a month of Sundays since I last posted a comment. I'm glad I'm starting off with one of your poems. 
This was an amazing poem. The imagery was fantastic, and how you paralleled the motions of the sea to the emotions of the subject was phenomenal. Keep up the great work!

Title article: The Tall Tales Of Chris
Date: 2008-07-16 18:51:04

So-So. There were a lot of spelling errors, and the story didn't quite flow. Not only that, but I found out that it makes me just as uncomfortable to read a conversation between two men in bathroom stalls as it does to have a conversation with a man when I'm in a bathroom stall. Yeesh.

Title article: Why
Date: 2008-07-15 16:24:05

I'm with June on this one. Very dark and foreboding at the beginning, and then the last for lines are brighter and more simple, like a ray of hope in a storm of desolation. Very well done.

Title article: Lights, Camera, Action.
Date: 2008-07-15 16:20:20

This was a fascinating short story. It was well written, well detailed, and very interesting. This is one that you should seriously consider having published in a magazine somewhere. Excellent job!

Title article: Because It's There
Date: 2008-07-15 14:57:35

This was a well told story, and reminded me of being a kid and walking through the woods not too far from our house. I didn't have any cool ex-racetrack experiences, but my memory is full of my own follies. Good job.

Title article: A Dollar Seventy-Five and a Hot Dog
Date: 2008-07-14 18:19:11

This was a pretty amusing story, but I didn't care for the ending. I was cheering him on, hoping that he would get his hot dog, and then he dies before he can swallow his first bite. What a letdown. 
On the other hand, the encounter with the woman at the newsstand was pretty funny. That should be drug out more, in my opinion. Good vocabulary and descriptions. 
Good story!

Title article: Imagination Encircles The World
Date: 2008-07-14 18:01:51

This was an excellent visual poem. The descriptions were ideal, and it flowed very well. 
 
I'll nitpick, too. 
 
You should invest in a new "period" button for your computer, because there are several places that need one. I assume that yours is just broken. 
 
Lack of dots on the page aside, this was an outstanding poem!

Title article: Dare To Be Free
Date: 2008-07-14 17:56:20

Another five-star poem. But you knew I would give you that, didn't you? It's like you wrote it for me. You're a sweetheart, no matter what the ButtPirates (Sterling?) say. 
Seriously, though, it has a good message and good flow. Keep it up. 
This is one for the favs.

Title article: Stop Pretending!
Date: 2008-07-14 17:50:46

Aside from agreeing with Lemon about how it flowed (it was kinda bumpy), I enjoyed this poem and think that the message that you are trying to get out is a good one. Keep it up.

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Nathan Weaver (onyxdragon)

missouri
 Created On: 10/01/2008 15:42:06
FYI, I finally finished and posted the second chapter to "The Fall of Babylon."
Max Booth III (Chainsaw Enema)

 Created On: 07/12/2008 12:18:59
Dude, that hand is beyond weird looking

Amie Kerlin (lemon)

in the orchard
 Created On: 07/09/2008 21:03:17
hey, I just wanted to stop by and let you know that I enjoy your work. keep it coming =]

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