The Adventures Of Pugswallow, Chapter 1

Pugswallow sat in a mud puddle popping bubbles and...

Elijah

The distant door closed shut behind him with a click....
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Total number of comments: 52

Title article: Chosen
Date: 2008-11-11 03:10:45

Good story, well written. I was wondering what the old folks had done to upset your killer. Cutting him off in traffic, that's what I call a mighty short fuse. Hope he's not just getting rid of all the senior citizens.

Title article: The Children I Never Had, Nor Wanted.
Date: 2008-10-30 23:22:55

I'm going to be different here. I liked the style.It gave the story a sense of frustration, of restlessness. I don't know if that's what you were aiming for, but for me, it suits the story. It gave the whole thing a rather unique atmosphere. And we shouldn't be afraid to try different styles. Well done!!

Title article: GOOD FRIDAY.
Date: 2008-10-30 04:01:44

This is my intro to the series. I shall have to look up your previous chapters. I liked your descriptive and evocative style.You write with a passion that comes through to the reader. I hope this isn't the last of the series. Great work!

Title article: Mind Over Matter
Date: 2008-10-15 05:08:20

Well written, suspensful, scary stuff. Liked the way you used the traffic lights to heighten the tension. I'm sure we were all hoping for that ending. I agree with yellowcat about the restraining order, but hell, this is a story, right. And a damn good one!!

Title article: A Night After Dinner.
Date: 2008-10-13 02:14:39

I think your generalization of waitress was a bit rough,I.m sure there are career ladies doing that job. From the description of your "hero" I think he should have tried to sleep with the woman he was with. He could be struggling to get anyone better.

Title article: Waiting on Time
Date: 2008-10-10 19:58:28

A lovely vignette on a young person's last moments. It invoked sympathy and compassion without the sloppy sentiments. A good little story, extremely well told. Well done!

Title article: The Devil you Know
Date: 2008-10-07 05:12:03

This is a clever story. The plot was original and well thought out. However I agree with Hodder, it seemed to me that you rushed to the ending, which was a shame, because the whole thing was very well written otherwise. 
I still enjoyed it. Keep writing, you have a nice style.

Title article: Wish ( Her lullyaby)
Date: 2008-10-04 05:18:12

It just goes to show. A poem (or story) doesn't have to be written in anything but plain, simple language to be enjoyable and inspirational. This is a delightful child's prayer. I loved it.

Title article: Photograph
Date: 2008-10-03 23:30:27

Beautifully told story, made even more poignant and real by your use of plain, simple language. I was there with the old man, feeling his pain and anguish. Congratulations and well done.

Title article: WORDS AFTER SEX.
Date: 2008-10-03 23:17:21

Use your imagination. What he said was hurtful. That's enough. 
"words like insects, biting at her flesh and mind" My God! what more do you need. A lovely, sad, poem.Well done Terry.

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