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About Myself: I'm just a kid in high school. I try to find time to write in between school work, after school activities, working a part time job, and having a social life. Pretty much the average life of the average American teenager. Hopefully I'll find the time to be back here more often, and I'll eventually get around to reading your stuff.

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DateTitleCategoryHits
Dec 14, 2008Memories that haunt sLEEpMiscellaneous Stories 85
Oct 23, 2008Land of the FreePoetry 93
Oct 16, 2008Slave to the World, Chapter 3Horror 126
Oct 6, 2008Slave to the World, Chapter 2Horror 161
Sep 28, 2008Slave to the World, Chapter 1Horror 197
Sep 27, 2008Losing HimRomance 523
Sep 17, 2008Slave to the World, Chapter 0Horror 401
Sep 5, 2008Things aren't always as they appearNon-Fiction 290
Sep 4, 2008BREAKING through the SuRfAcEPoetry 134
Aug 22, 2008missingMystery 185
Aug 11, 2008bottled UPPoetry 355
Jul 22, 2008heaven won't let me inPoetry 249
Jul 3, 2008ThE sToRmPoetry 263
Jul 1, 2008I Am the FailurePoetry 388
Jun 13, 2008Falling to Pieces, Chapter 2Adventure 131
Jun 11, 2008The Last of the FearsNon-Fiction 271
May 27, 2008Falling to Pieces, Chapter 1Adventure 198
May 18, 2008The Undreadful MondayNon-Fiction 669
May 8, 2008I shall not live in vainMiscellaneous Stories 418

Comments

Total number of comments: 262

Title article: A Day In The Life...
Date: 2008-12-22 17:31:59

ya this was quite an interesting story. the way you made the main character so bipolar was really creepy, but you did a good job with that. i liked the way the "normal" guys view was written. at points it reminded me of holden caufield, even though there nothing alike. it was just the addicting way it was written.

Title article: An Unwelcome Encounter
Date: 2008-12-22 17:17:48

this was nicely written, the descriptions were perfect and seemed to highlight the awkwardness of the situation. please expand on this, it kept my attention and i found myself wanting to read more. i also have a tendency to leave things hanging so i definitively could see this story standing alone, but as a reader i really want to see how this continues.

Title article: The Adventures of Jason the Cow
Date: 2008-12-22 10:02:03

for the first time, ive got to agree with xena. this wasnt anything like the childrens books that i had read when i was younger. for one thing, there was absolutely no plot to this, there was no building action and no ending. i almost stopped reading after the first few sentences, but i managed to trudge through it. it was also quite annoying how everytime you used a big word you added an explanation. idk im into simplifying things, so pieces with lots of large vocab. words kinda annoy me. also, you added in lots of information that we don't need to know about and don't care about, like we dont need to know that they only like organic stuff or whatever. i really messes up the flow of your story

Title article: St. Ninians Attends the Christmas Extravanganza '08
Date: 2008-12-21 15:42:24

i really liked the imagery and the wording that you used in this. i liked the way you made it eerie and kind of savage like, yet the girl didnt have the courage to stand up. 
 
just wondering what is this tradition? i feel like im missing soemthing here

Title article: Admin - The Fictionalized True Adaptation of a Story
Date: 2008-12-18 12:39:28

haha good job with this one. my favorite part is when he has to fill out all the stuff before submitting his story and how it takes him forever. its so true though i dont really understand the concept of tags either.

Title article: Kenya Are you There?
Date: 2008-12-18 12:30:57

ya this was nice. it was a good idea, something very creative and interesting. it was cool had you gave us a glimspe into these two characters lives just through dialogue. i loved the ending, where she asked all the wrong numbers if they are kenya, it just seemed to bring it all together.

Title article: buy a balloon
Date: 2008-12-17 13:53:23

i liked this. it was different, but it was good. i found it interesting that you didn't capitalize any of the letters. it kinda fit with the tone of the story. i liked how you added at the end that the girl was in a wheelchair. it kinda changed the story around since she was victimized by the clown.  
 
the only thing i found confusing was the line, "i knew there was now was i could get my wheelchair to go that fast." did you mean 'no way' instead of 'now was'?

Title article: On the Shore of Lost Cause
Date: 2008-12-15 18:13:36

i loved the imagery in this. i especially loved the line "Calling for angel wings, anyway to get back home" i loved the imagery that it created and it kinda reminded me of your icon pictures. 
 
the only thing that seemed a little off was the line, "And I'm trapped here, reaching my arms through a screen." it seemed forced, and it also accented the rhyme scheme which seemed a little out of place in a depressing poem.

Title article: One Day
Date: 2008-12-15 17:16:52

ya it reminds me of the quote, 'everything will be alright in the end. if it's not alright then it's not the end.' i think that we all look forward to times when we are happier and when we get those times we try to hold on to them as long as we can. great poem, it was simple but nicely expressed.

Title article: Memories that haunt sLEEp
Date: 2008-12-15 14:28:24

thanks for the comments. rubywhispers, i did mess up the title when posting it here, thanks for letting me know. 
 
just background information to this story. i was really bored one day and i decided to flip through the channels to see if there was anything good on and i came across a biography on pbs on lee atwater. i decided to watch it and i found it fasinating. It was interesting to know that he was the brains behind the michael dukakis commercial that they voiced over, but the thing that fascinated me the most was about the story of his brothers death. his brother actually did die because a deep fryer fell on him.

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Max Booth III (Chainsaw Enema)

 Created On: 07/29/2008 14:28:43
WHERE'S WALDO!!!???!!!
Max Booth III (Chainsaw Enema)

 Created On: 07/29/2008 13:28:31
I can be all italics also, see? I mean this, too. I'm saying it with anger cause it's in italics. ahahahahahahah
Max Booth III (Chainsaw Enema)

 Created On: 07/29/2008 13:19:27
Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/29/2008 13:19:52
Say whatever you say, those purses are frightning.



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Max Booth III (Chainsaw Enema)

 Created On: 07/29/2008 13:06:19
Who said I was drinking?
Max Booth III (Chainsaw Enema)

 Created On: 07/28/2008 18:13:53
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yah, my computer's fixed!
 Created On: 07/06/2008 16:51:34
Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/06/2008 16:52:06
i'd figure i say thanx for wishing me a happy birthday. have a happy fourth of july!--what, what do you mean its the sixth of july? damnit. happy sixth of july!!!
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hiding from cannibalistic rednecks
 Created On: 07/02/2008 23:16:38
I like that song Lake of Fire and Polly by them.
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in the middle of an exorcism
 Created On: 07/01/2008 21:43:25
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He was the lead singer of a grunge band called Nirvana, but then he blew his head off with a shotgun.

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I DONT KNOW!!!
 Created On: 07/01/2008 13:01:09
Hey, you better take that advice to heart. I gave the same words to Kurt Cobain and now look where he is.
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out of my mind in a wasteland
 Created On: 06/30/2008 22:04:29
I'm the first to sign this! Now, to leave some words of wisdom...ah shit i dont have any WAIT! i got some. oh, nope, i lost it..

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