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About Myself:

I'm still just a student in high school who just wants to get better at writing. Any feedback is greatly appreciated. I'm here because I want to get better at writing and I want to see what others think of my pieces.

I discovered a love for writing nonfiction after reading an excerpt from Russell Baker's Growing Up. I mainly write nonfiction, but I also like to try to step out of the box and try different things.

You're probably wondering about my style of poetry. It started out as an idea that I had while driving to work one day listening to the radio play the song Layla. I loved how it went from the crazy guitar solo to the piano, and I wanted to capture that feeling of "chaos and order" in a poem. I went into work and it started raining and a kid that I worked with started complaining about how weatherman never get the weather right. And that is how ThE sToRm was born. Because of the feedback from that poem, I researched some of e.e. cummings and twisted a bit of his style into mine.

Some of my favorite books include: The Catcher in the Rye, The Importance of Being Earnest, To Kill a Mockingbird, Great Gatsby and Flipped. I would also recommend any writer to read On Writing Well. It sounds like a boring book, but it is quite entertaining and you might learn something.

I am currently taking down some of my stuff for revision, but I'm quite lazy so I might not get around to it for a while. That is also why I have not finished my series. It will come, some time soon.

Sorry I'm not on here as often as I use to be. With school starting back up, I don't have as much free time as I did during the summer.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Oct 6, 2008	Slave to the World, Chapter 2	Horror	57
Sep 28, 2008	Slave to the World, Chapter 1	Horror	113
Sep 27, 2008	Losing Him	Romance	284
Sep 17, 2008	Slave to the World, Chapter 0	Horror	333
Sep 5, 2008	Things aren't always as they appear	Non-Fiction	190
Sep 4, 2008	BREAKING through the SuRfAcE	Poetry	89
Aug 22, 2008	missing	Mystery	140
Aug 11, 2008	bottled UP	Poetry	304
Jul 22, 2008	heaven won't let me in	Poetry	184
Jul 3, 2008	ThE sToRm	Poetry	221
Jul 1, 2008	I Am the Failure	Poetry	265
Jun 13, 2008	Falling to Pieces, Chapter 2	Adventure	97
Jun 11, 2008	The Last of the Fears	Non-Fiction	211
May 27, 2008	Falling to Pieces, Chapter 1	Adventure	155
May 18, 2008	The Undreadful Monday	Non-Fiction	610
May 8, 2008	I shall not live in vain	Miscellaneous Stories	324

Comments

Title article: The enraged mind
Date: 2008-09-27 21:18:21

this was really good, you can write. i like the descriptions of how he sees himself as a monster in the mirror. i thought it was really cool.

Title article: Meter Maid Madness
Date: 2008-09-23 20:30:01

i was just going back and reading some old stuff 'cause im in a mood to read some somethingindecent. nice story, i loved it. i thought it was quite funny. just one thing i noticed though was that whenever you change whoevers speaking, they need a new paragraph. you probably already know that though.

Title article: She Said
Date: 2008-09-21 20:19:04

i loved this. the format of it was unique and visually appealing. i loved the rhythm to it, is it suppose to be a song? the story behind it was good too. i think we all have those thoughts if they really love us for who we are or not.

Title article: Stuck in The Rain
Date: 2008-09-21 15:56:52

ya, this was pretty good. like resistanceisfreedom said, there were a few spelling errors and a unique sentence structure but other than that the story was good. it was cool how you used the dear diary style. i also liked how you developed your main character. she pulled me into the story as well as annoyed me a lot.

overall, this was a good short

Title article: Customer Service
Date: 2008-09-21 12:58:31

im not really sure what max is on....

i love the irony of the story, how the crossdresser thinks that YOU'RE the weird one.its funny hows its based on a true story. haha you asked to touch the guys cat. maybe you're a cat lover after all?

Title article: Are you plagued by happiness?
Date: 2008-09-21 11:21:03

i love the fake ads that you make like this one and the anorexic one. my favorite parts were the introduction with the 'because you pay us to care' and the paragraph about the sun shining.

ya, it made me smile too so i guess this drug isnt working.

Title article: Come Get Your Trailer
Date: 2008-09-20 20:24:42

this was quite funny. i liked the style and how it was written, it made it humorous. my favorite part was when the narrator's listing all the complaints they've gotten about the trailer and someone called to ask to get the supplies.

so true, we all tend to procrastinate cause we're lazy

Title article: Survival, Chapter 20
Date: 2008-09-20 20:11:05

poject 30, 2 was great! it was a lot of fun reading everyone's stories and writing. id so be in for a trilogy, if we have one!

great job allmine with the epilogue. I cant believe that it was Jessie, whose your lover. i was almost certain it was Jason. well i should've known based on your forums. i also liked how you made Mrs. Q the admin's exwife great idea!

Title article: Survival, Chapter 19
Date: 2008-09-20 20:03:26

haha this was amazing, i was cracking up laughing. ways to kill bambi. omg thats hilarious. and the grave robbing and max trying to find someone to eat. i also loved how lemon organized the UFC fight.

great chapter!

Title article: Survival, Chapter 17
Date: 2008-09-20 19:56:45

ya good story, i liked the eerieness of it. i also thought that you had a good style. but there are four girls, theres amie, michelle, june, and I. no need to dress up potter.

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Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

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Name	Entry
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 09/23/2008 03:35:34 Sometime in the future ...
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) getting the hell out of massachusetts	Created On: 09/05/2008 19:14:13 Okay, we're leaving. Steve Carell freaks me out ... why does he always have to scream like that? Something's terribly wrong with his soul, it's the only conclusion I've been able to come up with.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) Coming for you	Created On: 09/05/2008 19:03:53 Did you really think I would find that funny?? I find that highly offensive to my Indiana people. You have pissed off an entire state. We're coming for you, Amanda. We have corn n' the cobb with hidden razor blades ... and that's about all Indiana has. Well, it has me and that's priceless. You've pissed off the wrong tribe.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) In your head	Created On: 09/05/2008 18:42:44 sumbitch! smacks self in the forehead i knew that, too. Nope, it's a song by the Rolling Stones called "Jumpin' Jack Flash" Yes, it did. It does that all the time for me. Damn ghosts and their cruel tricks ... one day i'll make 'em all pay ... with possessed blood thirty purses
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 09/05/2008 18:27:01 Lol i wasn't trying to guess a song. To be honest, i didn't know that thing you quoted was a song. Isn't that a nursery rhyme? shit ... it sounds familiar. Why must you curse me?!
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) Dublin	Created On: 09/05/2008 18:10:26 I was born in a cross-fire hurricane And I howled at my ma in the driving rain, But its all right now, in fact, its a gas! But its all right. Im jumpin jack flash, Its a gas! gas! gas! I was raised by a toothless, bearded hag, I was schooled with a strap right across my back, But its all right now, in fact, its a gas! But its all right, Im jumpin jack flash, Its a gas! gas! gas! I was drowned, I was washed up and left for dead. I fell down to my feet and I saw they bled. I frowned at the crumbs of a crust of bread. Yeah, yeah, yeah I was crowned with a spike right thru my head. But its all right now, in fact, its a gas! But its all right, Im jumpin jack flash, Its a gas! gas! gas! Jumping jack flash, its a gas Jumping jack flash, its a gas Jumping jack flash, its a gas Jumping jack flash, its a gas Jumping jack flash
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 09/05/2008 17:55:31 Well he needs to learn how we handle things here in the States. No matter how terrifying they may be I don't understand. My name is Max ... not Jack. Are ... are you smoking the reefer?
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) Alaska	Created On: 09/05/2008 17:39:03 Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 09/05/2008 17:39:26 Oh, I see. If he doesn't watch his back I'm gonna sick a purse on his ass. See how he likes that! any 3's?
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 09/05/2008 17:08:34 Do I have a monopoly? What the hell is that supposed to mean? I'm more of a Go Fish kind of guy
Philip Neale (philneale1952) Derbyshire, England	Created On: 08/23/2008 13:07:38 Jeeez it took me like three hours to get to the end of this book. Does Max have a monopoly? Anyway, singing in (just the once). Phil