A Date with Priya

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About Myself: Children of this site... its past your bed time.

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Title article: To Whom It May Concern
Date: 2008-07-13 19:13:47

And no Brandon, im not a writer, but I did play one on tv. I was a writer in the day and a murderous rapest at night. I got caught, but I became a hero from the tabloids and made millions when I got out of jail because the cop didn't put a period on my paper after reading me my writes...my lawyer got me off on that technicality. god, judges on dumb. Sad part is...thats reality.

Title article: To Whom It May Concern
Date: 2008-07-13 19:05:36

No problem with kids. I myself am 27, a kid in my own right. But I am not dumb. You would be a fool not to see what this society has done to our future.  
Example given in this story sums it up, it happens alot. This was not rampant 30 years ago. Killing classmates. Kids today have no regard for authority or their actions. 
And yes, I blame tv and video. I even blame todays music and radio and their non creative shows on degrading women that have caused our children to become pregnant more prevelant at the alarming percentage in age at around 13. Find me a show that is not sex based and murderous in todays world. No need to name them, im sure there are a few. Reality tv is also the problem....lets see, one guy and 25 women fawning over him as if he were jesus himself. Get a life girls. quit looking for that million dollar payout and take school more serious. But then, I can see there point, if your not effin hot u wont get the job. this is what we tell our children..its all about looks

Title article: War On Earth
Date: 2008-07-13 18:17:29

Again, I havent a clue...six piece...u mean gun? Dude, make yourself clear to the reader...im tired of guessing.

Title article: To Whom It May Concern
Date: 2008-07-13 18:12:21

Thats whats wrong with the world. Spoiled kids who can't be reprimanded. What, you made my kid stay afterschool,,,ill sue.  
 
Officer, my father spanked me for calling that lady fat,,,I want him arrested. In comes social services to the rescue 
 
Get a job? are you kidding me, you cant make me work. 
 
Wow, killing is fun and the guy is a hero, I love video games. 
 
Son, you need to study. Im gonna be an actor or a pro basketball player...they make millions...gonna watch tv instead. 
 
There is nothing new in this paragraph that I can take away.

Title article: The Reluctant Lover
Date: 2008-07-13 17:49:27

45 minutes I would have guessed. Was this the only trailer in the park, and was the dining room table she was chained to made of steel. Oh, and was she mute and brainless. If she just sat on the chair looking at the chain around the leg or whatever all day long and never screaming while the residents of the trailer park were outside walking their dobermans, she must have been blonde. If it was a house with a basement it would be more believeable. This story was just a lil sour lemon.

Title article: War On Earth
Date: 2008-07-13 17:41:21

Ok I tell you what I didn't like about this. First i have no stories so I don't have to lie and pretend this is so incredibly fantastic. 
 
This made no sense, simple as that. It comes across like a poor mans attempt to sound like the book of revelation or Nostrodamus, and a drunk one at that.  
 
What poem can be seriously viewed with lines such as,, 
(wondering what the fuck is that)...I mean seriously. 
 
Only you know just what your talking about, and I wonder about that.  
 
You try to make it sound like annihlation' and it comes across like abomination. Nymphs being pissed off, Gargoyles imploding, red velvet knives. What are you talking about dude. And who is this elephant of death...the Republicans?

Title article: War On Earth
Date: 2008-07-13 11:23:58

Dude, maybe poetry isnt your bag.

Title article: The Water Sparkle
Date: 2008-07-12 15:04:38

Dont worry alex...he'll come back

Title article: A Poetic Response
Date: 2008-07-12 15:00:07

Obviously it doesn't take much to be a great poet on this site. The only thing I like about this is that it was short.

Title article: The deer's have eyez (Poorly written grammar story), Chapter 1
Date: 2008-07-11 10:27:55

No dont rewrite ..burn. Dude, I just read something great,,,then I stumble on this,,,thanks for the let down.

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I know I'm gonna regret this because one day youre gonna slag off my story.But your comments crack me up.

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