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Title article: A Feeling Of Love, Chapter 4
Date: 2008-08-13 22:41:05
ahh
I dont think im overstating anything when i say i really liked this one. It is raw and to the point... i like it i like it alot! nad this guy is crazy.. i was shocked when he actually did it. i didnt think he was gonna but he killed her.. dang

Title article: The Elephant Dance, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-08-08 01:41:49
hmmm
a few good lines i liked... not bad.. the elephant character was money.. pretty extremo.... and like i dont know mr dog man.. im mixed about the ending... like i assume she killed herself because of what just happened with the elephant.. but i didnt get that feeling.. maybe if it was more connecting and shoed something that demoniastrates how confused she is shes gonna cut her throat.. i dont know. i think it works

Title article: 3-way # 5
Date: 2008-08-07 19:24:20
ps
it would of been really neat if you posted it like.. three minutes before whoever the douschebag is in front of you in the recent stories window.. 3way number 5. a love poem. neat. would have been. 
 
... ohhh alfreds got jokes!.. i mean.. poems.... .. .

Title article: 3-way # 5
Date: 2008-08-07 19:18:10
srry not finished pressed wrong key
you know i expected something after the beaver story...i guess thats what im just trying to say. and arnt these things supposed to be short.. and the puncuation at points messes up the line for me... these have good stuff.. and also not good stuff.

Title article: 3-way # 5
Date: 2008-08-07 19:14:32
sex
and then were left to assume there will be funny hijinks going on between the guy who wants sex and the new girl who wont knwo what the fuck is going on... and we chuckle to ourselves.. but then thers more.. ok ok ill nibble a dibble what happens... ok so shes switching from person to person... is she gonna make a huh oh speggehitios? no shes pretty good at this.. thats no fun. oh now hes crying, but she doesnt wanna listen to him and switches over... should of left it there. not bad.. but she switches and continues with guy. and says goodbye. oh and so she DOES do this a lot. so whats the basis m night shama? nothing happend it all went well. wheres the mind bending hallucinations of god and panda bears killing hosers

Title article: 3-way # 5
Date: 2008-08-07 19:04:53
these stories
are kind of like m night shamalamanahans, you know who im talking about... and why. If you or anybody liked the 'happening' ill kill you good. cause like... the first i kinda of liked... like i wanna like it.. cause its funnily vulgar, and the stupid premise tickles my fancy... but it keeps going after it should of stopped. i mean like what if someone was telling you a funny joke, but after genuily laughing at the punchline you find out that its not the punchline... there is no punchline.. i dont know it made me feel unsexy. the beaver and the cuntarnia and the little quips from the dad were nice.. but then the oompa and lion. no need. like there was a beaver in her vagina or cuntonia, and then you leave me with a oompa and a lion? cmon now m night shamalan. but i still liked it.. but the second one.. same thing but...i didnt like it. i could of not not liked it.. but it kept going. like it could of been pretty humerous just leaving it at, he picked when she said shed have phone

Title article: image
Date: 2008-08-07 18:40:37
well
this was stupid... are you fucking stupid? im kidding i liked this pretty well... except for the turning invisible part.. like turning invisible is pretty generic.. but not so much for girls wanting to turn invisible to spy on guys.. you know its usually the other way around... so its not so generic after all... even tho i AM generalizing... but still.. you know.

Title article: gone was the girl
Date: 2008-08-07 18:27:40
hey
hey how long has this story been promoted for? is this a new one? or am i htinking of something different... anyway i thought your character description was good and you could of used more hyperbbubbles.... i didnt read... or reread the story. oh and youve got some grammar errors hear and there, but i liked the end... pretty good huh? how did i know that? magic.

Title article: A Picture of Waves
Date: 2008-08-07 18:23:51
gary
colemoris... what if youre gay? i liked this, could of used more rhyming... good simple words rhyming in good spots is always good for me. you had a few and then you stopped... you are a bastard. 5 stars?

Title article: Memoirs of my Soul
Date: 2008-08-07 18:16:36
mr philip
what are you talking about... so otherwise these words would have affected you? pshh... like i thought you were going somwhere with this story and then it just completely took a U turn... like.. what does he think of us? i thought maybe you said something about maybe he thinks were gross or something... not that he fears us... and i dont believe this guy as a bum... hes dirty cause theres no sinks around... no there are.. unless he lived somewhere like europe or something where they charge you to use their bathrooms.. but i think he's dirty cause hes a bum.. cause thats what bums do.. 
cause they juts dont care. and they want money... and most people wont look in disgust.. theyll think in disgust.. probably wont even look either... no food in his stomach so he goes and drinks... i guess that's a good strategy.. less food in the old tum tum the less you have to drink to forget and the less money he spends... so that works... 5 thumbs up from me

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I don't mind the bad review, it's just stepping stones to making a better story. However, sounds like you know from experience about pills.
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