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Website/Blog:	www.storywrite.com/SageSyren
About Myself:	Also try http://thefourbreazeales.blogspot.com/ This is my family website. I was gone, now I'm back. Decided I liked this place and missed it. I'm a hearth and nature witch. I love to laugh and have fun. All comment are welcome and any help you can give in puncation and dialogue tags would be greatly appreciated. For the future....thanks

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Title article: Manifest Thirst
Date: 2008-04-21 11:20:09

Nicely written. I love the way you could keep my interest without trying. :)

Title article: Alternative Gaye Calling
Date: 2008-04-18 10:32:46

Fact or Fiction?
This feels like it's got a lot of fact mixed in there. I didn't read the prompt but totally understand what was going on. Good sign. I just wondered about smell...lots of places there to sneak it in.

Thanks for a wonderful read.
Syren

Title article: Waves
Date: 2008-04-17 12:45:18

This was very powerful. Makes a person stop and think.
Syren

Title article: An Ode To Whiskey
Date: 2008-04-16 12:16:15

Oh I don't know, pirates and knights might come to a drunken mind if one had just seen or read about them.

I like it this way, although I would have liked to read the other version also.

I did feel like the flow was off in paragraphs two and four, but it sets a good scene.
Syren

Title article: All Alone
Date: 2008-04-15 13:24:43

Moving
First and second line have misspelled words; herself and like.
Missing 's' in Tear(s) line 3
Line 9 like is misspelled
Line 10 missing comma between silent(,) empty
Line twelve misspelled special

Those were just a few typos but it didn't distract from the poem. It was sad and very moving. I think a lot of ppl feel this way and yearn for someone to see them for who they are.

Great job.
Syren

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