DysFUNctional

"Dennis I want you to go to your brother's house...

An unexpected gift, Chapter 1

(Author's note: It's the first chapter to an attempt...
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Patrick O. (Roadkill315)
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About Myself: My interests are my marriage, our 4 kids, writing, fishing, golf, nascar, fantasy sports, chess, travel, my hot sauce collection now at 255 bottles and growing, and food that is very hot and spicy enjoyed with cold Labatts.

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DateTitleCategoryHits
Apr 10, 2008Alternative Gaye CallingMiscellaneous Stories 246
Apr 3, 2008Rouge's Realm Revealed (Chapter One)Science Fiction 215
Apr 2, 2008Manifest ThirstAdventure 476

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Title article: Far Out ((Part 1))
Date: 2008-04-10 09:45:28

Indiana Rivers - what a character name. What is next for Indiana Rivers?

Title article: The death of a spy
Date: 2008-04-10 09:39:11

Nice start, got the questions churning in my mind fast... reading on so many sentences starting with the word, "I"... great story line, interesting idea for the kid character. His motivation for killing his dad in the end didnt seem to fit well, needs more to justify the act he is coimmitting in my simple mind.

Title article: For the cause
Date: 2008-04-10 09:31:33

First short paragraph; not too engaing. Some good action in the rest. I take it this is more a draft of a story line you'd want to turn into a story.

Title article: Alternative Gaye Calling
Date: 2008-04-10 09:12:15
From the "New Writing Prompt" thread...
For those of you not following that thread in the forum, I place this story here as well and invite all to go to that thread and join in the challenge there.

Title article: Let Me Go!
Date: 2008-04-09 10:56:18

Can't begin to count the number of times I wish I had a parachute myself. Getting fired sucks too. Captured those realities well here. Thanks

Title article: The Abyss Above
Date: 2008-04-09 07:32:49

I hate make shift door knobs... But I really liked your story!

Title article: Slogans
Date: 2008-04-09 07:29:37
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Curse your Ford comment, ok Maybe curse is too strong, funny none the less!

Title article: The Padded Room
Date: 2008-04-09 06:50:42

Good writing. First two short sentances left me wondering, what is this? Plenty to grab me into the rest... I liked best how you illustrated the internal conflict of the main character too. Good fire scenes, nice write.

Title article: Nothing Else Matters
Date: 2008-04-09 06:41:48

Wow, deep, wishy washy heart string plucker, all good.

Title article: The Last Hero
Date: 2008-04-09 06:40:04

Don't see too much non-fic. here, or at least I havent read much... you did well on this, thanks

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R.E.Potter (R.E.Potter)
This e-mail address is being protected from spam bots, you need JavaScript enabled to view it 		Created On: 04/14/2008 21:44:54
enjoy reading your work.

Christian Wright (FRANTIC)

Dublin Land
 Created On: 04/14/2008 11:41:52
Like the new profile pic.
Keep writing and goodluck.
Thomas Reynolds (ThomasP3)

The Garden State
 Created On: 04/04/2008 14:48:35
Hi, Thanks for commenting on both of my stories, I really do appreciate the feed back! Just hopping around to introduce myself. There is a ton of stuff on this site.
Lori Branson (lorislittlesecret)

New Braunfels, TX
 Created On: 04/04/2008 10:15:03
Just stopping by to say I am glad that you are joining in a lot more lately...
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)

 Created On: 03/13/2008 20:40:25
Don't know if you write any, but I catch your comments around on other people stories and they're usually pretty good.
I'd like to see a story or something of yours.
Feedback from Patrick O. (Roadkill315): HI, thanks for the note in my guestbook, I have recently posted a couple of stories, would love your review. Thanks

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